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TheSilentChloey — A Phantom's Trilogy Cover Colour
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Published: 2013-04-19 09:44:17 +0000 UTC; Views: 3952; Favourites: 11; Downloads: 7
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With a bit of help from a friend with effects on Paint.Net, I have finally managed the effect of rain
. Here was the picture's original atmosphere, with the rain falling and three powerful Claymores meeting their match with humans and a strange monster that has no yoki.All credit goes to for the amazing lineart and for original colours, please go here .
Well that's about it for now, however there some more information to add.
For those of you who don't know about A Phantom's Trilogy it is a Claymore fanfiction based not only on Nohiro Yagi's series Claymore, but also on 's Phantom Miria Trilogy which is still currently incomplete. APT as A Phantom's Trilogy is often shortened to is a story that runs almost parallel to both the cannon Claymore and 's PMT (Phantom Miria Trilogy) and features OCs as main characters along side a single cannon character (Miata). Of course everyone's favourite Claymores are almost certain to either appear or be mentioned by name so there will be little dissapointment.
If you are also following The Silent Chloey Series, don't panic, I am still working on it as well as APT, so there will be more chapters of the TSC series
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If you expect people to improve you should try to be impartial and give the proper rating/critique, this colouring is below average, apart from the flats very little was done, it's not an eye-catching picture, the characters don't stand, the shadow areas aren't smooth, the "rain" doesn't look like rain. Overall, the picture's contrast is poor with bad shading, no textures, glows, foreground effects or whatsoever.
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Is there anyway btw, to change the critique level down to the most truthful rating? I agree and felt sorry i overrated her artwork.
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Do it next time, guess it couldn't be helped since you're not very experienced in that field either
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Well, yeah, I didn't master critiqiung artworks. I just simply give what I see is good. Actually, this one is better than any of her previous works.
Btw, I would be grateful if you give a critic on my artworks too, especially the coloured one I just posted.
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Oh, sorry, I don't have the critique feature. Also you can draw detailed drawing and paint them, you achieved much more than I ever did, you don't need critique from me, go ask some talented artists out there
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No, i mean you critique my artwork, here's the link: [link]
Hmmmm..... really? Me talented than you...in colours?! I don't think so. You got more wonderful colour style than me.
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Many thanks for the feedback!
I sort of know what you mean by the lighter green and I will get to work changing that on the next piece of Chloey's colours (I also have a couple of minor details to add in to it as well)
I will also see if I can darken Natalie's dress a bit more to achieve better results (for some reason I liked the lighter pink on her, but perhaps it will do in a lighter scene)
Anyway thanks for the feedback!
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That's good to hear!!! Btw, i started to read the first part of the chapter 1 and I find it better with more deep information than the previous drafts you sent to me. Here we can see in vivid detail Chloey and Chris's interaction and how they reacted/ felt about the disaster being made on the bandits, as well as that flashback with Teresa of the Faint Smile in the scene. i can't stop thinking of teresa gets annoyed by Chloey in putting a frog in her belly....a prank hope to produce houmourous results to the serious monster!!!.
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It wasn't Tess of the Faint Smile, that was Chloey's older sister Teresa deLupia
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Heheheheh!!! I thought it was Teresa of the Faint smile. now mortalshinobi had more reason to hate this Teresa...he actually wants person to be named once and never be used the names in another person. i don't know what he will say if he will know this.
Now I just read almost the whole story! This was a seriously moving story you had made!!!
I found the story convincing and comprehendable. At this way, the reader can know more about the situation of the town and how it gets even worse in everyday. You really emphasize the situation of Lido as well the emotions of the main characters, esp. on Chloey. The overall chapter achieved a serious atmosphere and seems to suggest that a "big thing" is going to happen soon.
The little scene before that dreadful argument in the meeting is on great timing. In fact, you manage to pull flashbacks which are really in the good mood of the whole story. The incident of the bandits show Chloey's soft and emotional character as well, as if she really didn't like putting the bandits to their final resting places if there are other options to be choosen. Chris side her is very much like of a concerned husband to her wife, and I agreed on his insistence of taking that incident as his fault (which is really the true essence of what husbands should do). I would like to see more of their love developments in the future chapters.
now to the council meeting. You nail the scenes correctly and you execute it very well. Very great emphasis of Chloey's outburst of anger here, as seen by the shock expressions that surrounded her. Even her action is recorded by the secretary huh, that's surprising. Marchello's reaction is well executed, but I want more reaction on her husband Chris. I just don't know, but i don't see much Chris action when he saw her darling almost hurl a fire from her mouth against marchello. Perhaps he could just hurriedly approach near on her side so that he can manage to put the fires out when tensions are getting dangerously high. At least i want to see Chris with eyes bulging and alert at this scenario.
Well, at the end, she manage to pull a calm talk to marchello's son. And a another good mini scene between marcusand claire happened.
Ad finally, another flashback of sad memorable, but sad memories. I love how the childhood Chloey was once a spoiled child who causes trouble to her sister, teresa, even capable of plotting revenge at her sister by bringing the most unwanted living creature her sister hated.
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I am sure that he won't mind overly much because this Teresa is a far cry from Teresa of the Faint Smile
I would love to say that at last my hard work has paid off! 
With Chloey's outburst scene I was thinking that Chris wasn't actually there at the council, or he was on the way out. Still there's a good idea have him on high alert with Chloey having an outburst like that.
What we do have to remember is that young Marcus does have a soft spot for Claire and that results in him doing almost anything to be around her (even things like carrying the bucket for her).
Sadly yes, the day Teresa was supposed to get married was the day the yoma attacked Chloey's family. Chloey herself had run off and Kate had gone to bring her back I believe that Chloey's running off was what saved Kate from being killed so it was good luck (or perhaps planed) that Kate was to live another day.
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Well, we also have Theresa, Claire's twin daughter.
This way better than the previous first chapter drafts. One of the huge changes is the the portrayal of the story, where the focus is move vivid, and that the characters are well expressed. It's not rushed, the event's are smooth in comparison of the rest of the previous drafts. If this kind of story style goes, no doubt I'll see a more, deeper, personality of Marchello than I thought he is. It is essential to see Marchello's side so that his actions is reasonable.
I think he should be in the council since he was once being delegated as the ambassador. I have no qualms of Marcus, instead I like to see how things will go further for those two. AS to the flashbacks, they are on the right timing.
That's sad then. But what happened to the supposed to be groom? Got coward and run away? And wow!!! A good arrangement of the scene and a rare way to excape a yoma attack!
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I think for the moment I will put the edits on hold (sadly if I go back and edit I might lose the train of thought that I had) and keep working on where I'm up to. Of course that doesn't mean that I won't go back and fix it, I will, I've just got another chapter in the wings that won't stop...
As for the groom he too was killed by the yoma, but Chloey never saw it as she was too busy arguing with her sisters Teresa and Claire at the time.
I didn't really think of their escape until later on in the TSC series, (the chapter wrote itself that way and before I knew it the real tragedy wrote itself out in that flashback alongside what readers of the TSC series already know having read the first chapter of the series to about half way through the first book...I think that the next chapter will tie the entire flashbacks together and that will confirm what the readers have been thinking that happened)
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Hmm...not so sure about it. Well, maybe he can.
I would suggest to focus on telling the story in chunks, than make a rundown first chapter version. current story version is, for me, very well done. If you can make such story as this way the story you will make will be very great.
Now, is the next part of the story will also tackle the redone version of Natalie and Miata, and their checking of the archives? Or just a continuation of the tragic event of Chloey's family? Hmmm....maybe we can reserve that tragic flashback and retold it in another essential part of the story?
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Basically what I have planed is that Natalie and Miata still go in to the locked library, but I have a little less about Chloey and a bit more about some other warrior of her past...and a certain plan is made only after someone's confusion...
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Do your pick...how to have their redone story going on. If you want to add something that might help then you can do it.
Well, i think that Chloey stuff and her past friend warior might help to the story.
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I think so too, and I added a bit of young Chloey in there as well
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Hmmm...sounds interesting. Let me read how this story will make a good mix in the story.
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Yes, that would be a great idea!!! At this, we establish something that make readers understand the characters in depth. Oh, you also make a very great history of Natalie's childhood as well.
As of Natalie, we all know she's cheerful. But she will become as serious like Claire when she had that parasite infected her.
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Ok, so I've got nearly everything I need then
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WHAT DID YOU SAY?
Hekhek!!!
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No no don't get me wrong, I love the picture I just think that the eyes should have like distinct differences to give the audience a good read on the characters.
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I see your point here. I'll make it differ in each other characters next time. Thanks very much very the advice!
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No problem! Thanks for understanding.
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It's okay, I really need someone like you for me to improve. Without critics, then my artwork cannot be known to either better or not.
Well, if you mind, also give me critics/comments in some my latest artworks. I will be grateful if you do that.
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Btw, does this artwork (I mean the girls in here) looks like at their 16 - to twenty years of old, didn't you?
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They look like 19-21 I guess.
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Anything else to comment? I'm eager to hear things from you, sir.
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The shading doesn't make sense because there's no background to indicate any form of light. The only reason there should be any background here is to indicate a form of intensity and you know, basic shadowing (neck having shadow, hair having shadows blah blah). Side from that the lines are solid and overall it seems like a cool picture.
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Thanks. I used an ordinary ballpen in this artwork, so the lines areally that solid and uniform in width, except in some lines that seems to be more solid-looking than others.
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I look forward to more of your work.
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Thanks!!! There will be a new artwork coming shortly.
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Here they are:
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What do you think?
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Try experimenting with the way you draw your faces. Also try different intensity scenes
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That's ok, at least they're not 30-35.
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They're meant to be almost the same
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No they're not siblings.
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Well then they're way too alike
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All Claymores are similar, the only way you can tell any Claymore apart is her hair style and body shape...
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Oh wait this is a Claymore fan art?
cuz if so i totally didnt know...
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I didn't know that.
That makes all the more sense.
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This is better than the first one, esp. terms of the background!!! Though it still didn't resemble raindrops, but it rather adds the action and tension the characters are in...somewhat like saying there is an action going to take place as the characters each preparing their stance.
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