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thiNk-diff3r3Nt — my snow whiTe
Published: 2009-02-22 03:38:07 +0000 UTC; Views: 127; Favourites: 2; Downloads: 0
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Description And as they wrap her in silk and put her in her coffin made of frozen water and glass, they hear a sudden shriek of joy from afar. It was at least a yard away but it sounded as clear as ice.

The shriek was of a wanderer who has searched far and wide, now at his destination. Only to discover that what he came for was long, long gone. For by the time he finished his journey, her beauty has already been frozen by the dark, cold breeze from the dead tree, her lips cold as clay.

Finally, the sun aroused  from the east and there they saw how radiant her face was. It was as radiant yet the opposite of how they saw her face under the moonlight. The warm and unconditional glow of the southern sun melted the land and brought back its earth.

As it melted the coffin, there stood a beautiful and radiant young maiden.
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rosielf [2009-04-17 02:20:23 +0000 UTC]

This is really good, I only have one comment and that is on word choice... I think instead of "Finally, the sun aroused" you could put "Finally, the sun arose"

I don't think aroused and the sun go hand in hand in a sentence haha, but other than that I really like this piece


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thiNk-diff3r3Nt In reply to rosielf [2009-04-17 02:55:37 +0000 UTC]

yesh... thanks!!!

aww.. it's so sweet of u 2 comment

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rosielf In reply to thiNk-diff3r3Nt [2009-04-17 03:12:36 +0000 UTC]

Not a problem

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