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Transformers-Mosaic — The Recruit
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Talk about a moment of truth for Bluestreak! The art is beautiful, and you got a lot into a limited space. I too would enjoy a pt 2
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Thanks! I'd love to do a part two. I kind of see the Mosaics as a short glimpse into moments into Transformers history so they don't necessarily have beginnings or endings but tie into larger stories.
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Heh. I love it! It's an interesting point of view portrayed with beautiful artwork. Makes you want to know what happened between them before as well as after...I really hope TFMosaics thinks about continuations...these stand alone things are really making the readers want more...
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Now THAT's the response I'd hope to hear.
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The art is good, but the caps on every word is throwing me off.
But <3 Bluestreak
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PRICELESS! i love Prowls face on the last panel..suspense
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Thanks for the comments and feedback, guys and gals!
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Holy crap! That's so emotional. Pre Optimus
Prime. I love it. I've never really hit that era
with my imagination before. Great work.
The artwork rules too.
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Prowl's dialogue (granted he's rather to the point anyway) is a bit stilted, but I like Bluestreak's. I don't mind that the focus wasn't on Blue in the last panel (better for me to imagine the shock on Blue's face) but yes, I'd like to turn the page and find out what happens next! ^_^
Your artwork is beautiful, though. Perhaps this is in Bluestreak's memory--how he remembers the moment when Prowl told him about the fate of Blue's hometown?
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Thanks! It's always interesting to see people's reactions. I was prepared for the worst. I see what people are saying about the dialog. I probably reworked it too much, trying to cover the info and ideas I wanted to it so little space. Which is also why I changed it from all caps.
And am I the only one who liked that Prowl and Bluestreak look alike?
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Well, it sounds like Blue really wouldn't care who was the leader of the Autobots, so he might not know who Optimus was...I've always thought Optimus was sort of a nobody until he became the Prime (which I gather from Prowl's words that he hasn't been the Prime very long).
And this sounds like it's before Blue became his chatty self...which if I'm to understand happened as a reason of his constantly trying to push away the image that Prowl is about to show him, of his city in ruins. That may be why it sounds odd to some.
And yes, they do indeed share some of the same look (the red chevron and the doorwings). I tend to think of that like Babs and Buster Bunny in Tiny Toons: "No relation." 
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Well yeah Optimus Prime being mentioned was supposed to be more pride or admiration on Prowl's part rather than having the intention of impressing Bluestreak.
And thanks for getting that one of the main points of this is that it wasn't until after his city destroyed that Bluestreak became his chatty self to cover up the pain of it all.
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Mneh. Not really sold on this one. Premis was good, but the dialogue was pretty flat and cheesy sounding, like a 40's comic book.
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Art is fantastic and the premise works, at the very least. Top notch job, honestly.
Why is Bluestreak still covered in Autobot logos if he hasn't been with them for some time, though?
Only complaints:
1) probably could've chosen characters who didn't look so similar to each other. You laid it out very well, to avoid confusion over it, though.
2) the last panel really should be focusing on Bluestreak, not Prowl. *His* reaction's the one that'll be interesting to see. I think that one thing could help to give this page a bit more closure, something a few people here seem to feel it lacks.
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And yet another valuable Autobot joins the members of their ranks.
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Dude....
<3 Prowl, of course. Love the backstory for Bluestreak. +fav!
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Tyrrlin, I love your sig. XD
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Thanks! ^^
I said that to my sister, and she thought I should quote it, so here it is!
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Great art although every word having a capital letter looks a bit odd when you're trying to read it.
I'm reminded of that rather dire trilogy that was published a few years ago - one of the few parts I liked was Bluestreak's discovery that the Decepticons had deliberately let one survivor escape the destruction of Praxus to spread demoralising tales of the horror and destruction. So poor Bluestreak not only owed Megatron his life but had been doing his propaganda work for him all these years too
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nicely drawn and a good idea but the story seems a little off, it might of worked better if Bluestreak had been at his city when attacked and Prowl had come to search for him to convince him that though his city could not be saved they had to ensure that others would.
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Nice artworkon this one, but you really can't tell Bluestreak from Prowl (and vice versa). I woulda given him a different head design or something. Also make Bluestreak a daker shade of grey.
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Definitely could use a second page. Nice deliberate ending.
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Enjoyable. I have always liked the pairing of Prowl and Bluestreak and getting to see a bit of the past between the two was pretty cool.
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Art is lovely, and the moment chosen to be dramatized in this page is certainly an interesting one, but it looks as if there ought to be a second page to this, just as Gearsmith said. I keep on wondering if Bluestreak said no again and Prowl will have to come back another time, or if this is the moment when Bluestreak finally agrees and joins the Autobots.
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The ending was intentional, actually. Maybe the wrong choice, but intentional. Bluestreak ends up coming back to fight, so I didn't think it needed to be portrayed too obviously plus I only had one page. Also, the story I was trying to tell was how he learned about what happened to his city. In my mind what he does next is a story for another day.
This Mosaic was basically a moment I always wanted to see ever since I read Bluestreak's Tech Spec Card when I got him as a birthday gift in 1984. So, I decided to go ahead and make it as a Mosaic.
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Oh, I see. Must be the way that it was plotted out then, or perhaps the one of voice the characters used. I can understand the constraints that one page places on the amount of story that you can put it. I guess I was hoping for something with a bit more closure to it.
Interesting source of inspiration! The tech specs do need a lot more elaboration than they ever really got in any of the existing continuities (comics or cartoons).
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gearsmith has some good points, but still very enjoyable! Love the colour and line work!
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Hmm, despite the grammar errors in the last panel, this ending seems kind of weak. Perhaps it might have been more effective if the image of Prowl was a bit more "emotionally charged".
The way this ends, there MUST be a second page to finish this off. This is currently looking like a page 1 of 2, know what I mean?
Other than that minor critique, pretty cool stuff.
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Hmmm... What is the grammatical error?
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"The city that the our enemy laid siege to."
You should remove "the" in between that and our.
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Oops. Now where's that embarassed emoticon?
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OHH kick to the teeth.
Prowl knows how to twist the knife doesn't he?
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I dunno. The flow doesn't seem to be there. It's kind of, jerky.
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How do you mean by "jerky?" Like the story doesn't flow well? I'm just asking because I'm hoping to learn and improve. This was probably the first TF drawing I did when I got back into drawing a few months back.
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It's the dialogue mostly, to me at least. It feels cumbersome, ponderous, a bit forced and very cliched. There's no conclusive ending feeling to this story, which granted is hard to accomplish in one page. There's a grammar error in the last panel, and I'd suggest that Prowl should have named the city not just said "it was yours", nobody says "it was your city". If someone blew up my town and I was away the news would come to me as "They blew up Hudson", it has more of an impact that way. It would have been nice to have seen both Prowl and Bluestreak in the last panel, to show Bluestreak's emotions at being told his home had been sieged.
Your art is beautiful and your panel layout works for the story, but your lettering needs to change as well. The Constant Capitallization Of Every Word Throws Off The Reader, It's Like Reading German! All the letters should be the same size, all capital letters so it is clearly readable, like pro comics are done.
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