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Published: 2008-02-28 18:56:06 +0000 UTC; Views: 2393; Favourites: 26; Downloads: 46
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My submission (finally!) for 's SDL. As you can see, my coloring is total amateur, but I'm starting to learn, and I plan on updating the profile image as frequently as my style improves. Now, onto the important stuff...Name: Keitaro (last name unknown)
Age: 28 yrs
Weapons: Shingetsu (black katana), 2 specialized daggers, and many white, 5 inch long piercing needles.
Fun Fact: Has poor vision in his right eye, making depth perception at long rages difficult (i.e. he hates archers).
Fighting style: Lunar Cry School of swordsmanship, dual dagger close range style fighting, and an early form of martial arts similar to Wing Chun.
Background: Keitaro has been a student of the Lunar Cry school for most of his life, studying swordsmanship and combat skills from a young age. Most of his life has been spent within the school, so while his technique is well honed, his practical skills still need polish. He's as likely to strike down a mob of fighters as he is to hesitate to attack a (seemingly) defenseless woman.
A recent theft at the school is what has prompted jeitaro to leave his secular life. A rare-one might say legendary- sword in the school's possession, Tsukiyomi, had been taken by an unknown person. Because many were injured in the theft, it is believed a warrior of great skill stole the sword, and this has led Keitaro to the SDL. The rumors of a legendary sword, and the gathering of strong swordsman lead him to search within the ranks of the SDl for his school's missing sword.
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That's a start at least. Comments are welcome, critiques are encouraged (this is chiefly a learning experience, after all). Brutal flaming is sort of discouraged, but meh- I'm a tough guy. I can handle it.
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so, he's from something similar to a swordsmanship monastery?
also, where did he get the glasses from? i thought this was feudal japan or around that point.
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The actual timeperiod sdl is based in ranges from 1400-1600. Technically, various versions of eyeglasses existed at the time, though not as sleek as their current forms. So while it is possible, I took a couple of liberties with a more up to date look. In details, his glasses are kind of simple, and not completely practical. Which is why he still has depth perception and vision issues, even with the glasses on.
Monastery might be too strict a term. The Lunar Cry School is a pretty extensive school, mainly centered around swordsmanship and martial arts. The only reason he's been there so long is because his parents saw his talent early, and allowed him to live in the school.
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now that i think of it (and look it up on line to make sure), doesn't samurai champloo have a main character that wears glasses and come from a similar time period? there is even an episode which has at least three samurai that have eye-glasses... though one did look like it was made out of bamboo.
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He seems a bit cliched, at least, that's kind of how he's come across in his motivations. I guess I'd like to see you throw a monkeywrench into his "fetchquest" -style personality. The glasses, the swordsman's motivation... there needs to be something more. I guess all of that doesn't really matter except to creativity's demands, so you can feel free to disregard my opinion. Things like the name "Tsukyomi" have been done to death on swords, techniques, and the like since Naruto came along. Don't take it as me disliking your guy or anything, I know it's hard to really make unique characters, just... maybe spice him up a bit. Unknown sister, parents are mobsters, cousin is a cat... whatever. Everybody's guy is "The Best There Ever Is"... but I like the poor eyesight thing. Any reason behind the cloth wraps on the hand, or just shooting for the badass look? No problems with that... Hey, I wouldn't have said anything if I didn't like him. And anyways, it's just one guy's opinion, I thought I'd shoot beyond "AWESOME!!" or that sort of thing, which 95% of all comments are. Keep it up.
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I appreciate the constructive criticism. It's really appreciated, seeing as it's more useful than the random 'good job'. Visually the character will be getting an update soon. The hand wrappings were simply a cheat out of drawing hands. He's currently visually plain, but that's intentional. I don't want him to seem too unique at the moment; he's a skilled student at a great school, but that's it. While he's skilled, he's hardly a legendary swordsman or at the top of his school. And his secular training style is double-edged; his technique is flawless, but also rigid and predictable at times. He needs a few real world fights and losses to help learn to be more adaptive.
The Tsukuyomi thing... I don't suppose it helps that I did the research on the gods and such to develop this first. His poor eyesight in one eye ties to the Tsukuyomi legends, and if it counts for anything, I did develop this before that bloody Naruto chapter with Tsukuyomi. I'm going to stick with that for now, as it ties into his school's principle's and themes. Hopefully the whole Moon theme will become more prevalent throughout my writing of the character.
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You know, there are much cooler names than things like Tsukuyomi... I personally found (can't for the life of me remember) a Japanese word that was "The winter wind that shakes the fruit from trees" or something. Very poetic, but... lost. I'd name my SDL fighter's wakizashi that if only I could find the damn thing again. Anyways, yeah... I think you see my point. Something totally not reproducible (unless you were copied) is always nice too, but then again I always take stuff like this too seriously. XD
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I can understand where you are coming. My point is I didn't choose Tsukuyomi because it was a cool name for a sword, but as a chance to explore my character's school and Japan's mythologies. Sure, it's been done to death; but no matter what name I choose for the sword, I want it to be relevant to my plot. When you have a school that's whole theme center's around the moon, going down into the names of weapons and techniques. Tsukuyomi was the original god of the night/moon opposite of Amaterasu, the sun goddess. My oc's school supposedly derives it's lineage from the moon god, and the sword was a sacred symbol of that lineage.
Anyways, we digress. Originality. I concede the name is not original, but I'd like to think that eventually, my storyline will overcome such cliches and develop into something all it's own.
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Does your guy's school have an opposing school aligned with Amaterasu, or are you going to keep that whole thing out and just go with the Tsukuyomi alone? Having a character (like a sibling) who learns a completely opposite side and grows in conflict with yours is always cool, but hey, it's yours to do with what you will. That just grabbed my creative side a bit, thought I'd share that. About basing on legendary characters; I don't think it's a bad idea or anything, I actually got my character ironed out better with help from a legendary hero as well, since I'd created him with uniqueness in mind but found that he was uncannily similar to said hero during research. Sometimes that's how things go, but you should try to make him unique apart from the aspects of the legend he's related to, as in, throw other aspects into his character/past/personality that don't have anything to do with the legend but are of your own design. It helps establish your person as a unique individual instead of a resurrection of a legend. And of course nothing but inspiration helps things move beyond things seen in the past and into unique and new ideas. 
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I had no plans on creating another school based on Amaterasu. the people of Japan are often considered the '
Also, we have to remember that my character is merely a single player in someone else's larger story. I'd prefer to have a single character with simply his own background, woven into the larger story. He's not the main player, and will likely fall into obscurity in history compared to others. I'd like his main enemies and allies to come from the greater sdl community, to help it feel more like a part of the larger sotry being told, rather than me trying to cut my own section out for myself.
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I'll upload you r profile in the team acc. Um, if you want me to put it down, just tell me, lol
-sorakusanagi
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No, it's fine. I've been busy lately, so I haven't been able to do the visual upgrade to my OC yet. I'll go ahead and post the info on my sdl journal, and when I finally change my oc's look, I'll note you so you can change it on the team account. Thanks ^^
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If you can't find the sword... I can make one for you
Hehehe only kidding... Legendary weapons are something I can appreciate (and respect)!
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I might actually look into having a sword made as an interim weapon later on. Something that bridges the gap between his current weapons and Tsukuyomi. I'll have to see how my plot progresses (I'm trying to work a coherent story through my duels), but if I do need a sword made, I'll come heading to the Kami Shi No Do's place looking for quality bladesmithing.
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That's almost exactly what I love to hear, and it's pretty darned close to what I like to hear...
hehehe
I'll take it
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Iggy needs to know what your special moves from the Lunar Cry Sword School look like...
and how long our duel is supposed to be... i forgot to let ronins know that... whoops
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I have no stipulation on duel length...I prefer to allow people to decide how long it'll take them to tell their story. Especially since my actual sequential art experience is so little; I need the flexibility of not being confined to only a couple of pages. So any length is fine in my opinion.
I'll have a reference sheet up shortly; that'll cover basic details on the sword and weapons, etc.
As far as special moves, I'll note you on more of the details. If you want to know his general fighting style, it tends to go in this order- hand to hand extreme close fighting (weak enemies) -> Dual dagger fighting (stronger opponents) -> Lunar Cry swordsmanship with his black katana, Shingetsu(New Moon) for the near-unbeatable foes.
Like I said, I'll note you for more details if you like.
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i would definently appreciate that.
whenever you get it up is good
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Nice character! I love the fact that you've made him have poor vision.
I'm new to SDL and for my first match... I'd like to duel you, but school's starting in a few days. I have a break late March... will you consider it? Or even just file it away in the back of your head.
Thanks for sharing this!
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'bout damn time. Glad to see my suffering was put to good use! ^^ (kidding)
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