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ubermonkeymagic — Little Puppet
Published: 2006-04-25 16:47:39 +0000 UTC; Views: 154; Favourites: 0; Downloads: 3
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A little puppet on little stringsPull them and I do all sorts of things
Just a child's play toy doll
Pick me up or watch me fall
You toss me around
Throw me down
Break my heart
Tear me apart
There's nothing I can do
So like the puppet I am I follow you
I'll follow you through the pain and tears
Since as a puppet I have no fears
You lied to me but I have no choice
Since as a puppet I have no voice
Your puppet everyday and night
Like a doll you hold me tight
Like water through your hands you try to cup it
'Cuz on little strings I am your little puppet
Comments: 8
I liked he sad mood you are in while writing the poetry, I m usually the same.
I think I have no right to critisize your choice cause you are the one who wrote it but I think it would be better if you did this line like that:
''So like the puppet I am following you'' but still really nice
the rhyme and the meaning..what can I say? I liked it as most other works of you. it s obvious that you spent much time on thinking the similacrums and the comparisons.
''Just a child's play toy doll
Pick me up or watch me fall'' yeah love is usually our experiments, you mix the two treatment and wait for what the result is gonna be and maybe be as careless and cold-hearted as the scientists, dont care whether the cavy is gonna be harmed or survive...you know how the dolls end up, in a ripped dress thrown away
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Arigato... or thank you (in which ever language you prefer.)
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no problem I like the ryhme in your poems
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Thank you... I like positive criticism... makes my ego-level go up when it comes to my poetry...
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Thank u John-John...
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