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Published: 2009-07-15 20:17:04 +0000 UTC; Views: 1457; Favourites: 21; Downloads: 12
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She took her little jewelry box,and lay all her feelings inside it.
She cried a tear, right before,
she lay all her sadness away.
She dug a hole behind the church.
Not feeling anything at all,
she placed the box in-between,
mud and dirt, with ice cold hands.
She buried the box,
so no one could find it.
And off she went,
to one last place.
--
She stood at the edge,
of that big, cold cliff.
Looking down as she felt
-nothing at all.
With no expression on her face,
she took one last, deep breath,
before she lifted her cold arms,
and flew away.
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Comments: 30
TimberClipse [2011-07-12 15:08:38 +0000 UTC]
Hello!
Just wanted to let you know that we have featured you in the deviantART birthdAy Countdown!
Have a wonderful day!
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the-photographicpoet [2010-04-08 13:56:21 +0000 UTC]
Hey there
This fantastic piece of writing has been featured in my latest news article National Poetry Writing Month .
I'd like to take this moment to say I loved reading your work, and would appreciate if you could do the same to the other pieces in the article mentioned.
Please and pass along too, so other people can see just where you've been faved!
Sammie
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darkrane17 [2010-03-12 22:44:16 +0000 UTC]
It is a good story. But so sad. Great word usage.
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unknown-sources In reply to darkrane17 [2010-03-12 22:45:41 +0000 UTC]
Thank you, I appreciate those kind words!
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Inexistences [2010-01-24 14:47:15 +0000 UTC]
Hey, i really liked this poem, it's got quite a good flow. However, there's a spelling mistake in the first line of the second verse, it should be "dug" instead of "dig"
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unknown-sources In reply to Inexistences [2010-01-24 14:50:13 +0000 UTC]
woot, never noticed that!
thank you so much^_^
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KthLinCinOlor [2009-08-23 19:28:57 +0000 UTC]
This is so beautiful , you can really feel her pain.
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starry-night-sky [2009-08-01 05:39:01 +0000 UTC]
So good, so sad, so sweet.
It makes me want to cry almost.
I really like how you described it as flying away.
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bekkia [2009-08-01 04:34:16 +0000 UTC]
Congratulations, your art has been featured as part of my daily supporter feature on my front page! (and also here: [link] ) This is a thank you for faving my artwork at somepoint in the past, and also a motivator to keep up your gorgeous artwork. Don't forget to take a look at those others who have been featured. Have a wonderful day.
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WhiteTiger-Angel1995 [2009-07-22 23:46:54 +0000 UTC]
Your work is amazing! such emotion...one word...wow
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warzoneangel [2009-07-16 15:02:12 +0000 UTC]
It sounds like... she was dead long before she ever got to the cliff.
This is beautifully written.
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unknown-sources In reply to warzoneangel [2009-07-16 16:34:01 +0000 UTC]
thank you, im glad you like it.
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OnlyJustaMemory [2009-07-15 22:00:37 +0000 UTC]
I really like it. It is beautiful and amazing.
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