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Published: 2008-12-21 23:24:55 +0000 UTC; Views: 149; Favourites: 1; Downloads: 1
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Description Chapter 4 : temple’s secret


After some long trip over the hills, fields and trough a forest Kate and Max came face to face with a temple. It was more like a house of stone, or what was left of it. It got no door and some walls are taller than the others, also missing peaces, there were parts with no ceiling or stone floor. Some vines have grown all over the ruins. But it was only the front  view, there were many stairs to climb on to see into the temple.

Max: So this is… Was the temple?  How did build it?* Max asked while he goes up the stairs*

Kate: yes it was once a great temple… Our people build it for the one that came from above* She was walking by Max’s side.*

When they climb the entire stairs, Max stunned as he saw that what looks like a labyrinth of ruins, much of it was taken over by the vines.  As soon as Kate hears many footsteps from guards, she covers Max’s mouth, with her hand, and pulled him behind a wall, a stone wall and it was pretty old too like the rest.

Kate: shh… There are a lot of them. I can hear them. It will be better if we...erm... you take out one by one. * She slowly removed her hand from his mouth.*

Max: But why are so many guards here? What there trying to find?

Kate: Rumors tell that the king weakness is somewhere in the ruins, so they where ordered to find it, but it had been years. We got to find where it is.

Max:  Well, what if we disguise ourselves?

Kate: No good, they can smell us if we get too close…

Max: what if we use the local smell to disguise ours, so we can steal uniforms from the guards. * Max picks up some rocks and shows them to Kate.* We can lure two or more with rocks.

Kate: That may work…

So they picked up some stones and threw two or more in labyrinth, not two far where they are. So if guards heard the stones near the entry, they would think that the intruder is escaping. Luckily two guards that were in the area did think that, well they have to check out any noises, and went to check it out. They ran to  the entry to find what or who tried to enter the  temple.

Guard #1: Well, seems that it escaped. It certainly was afraid of the Kings guards. HaHaHa * He started laughing. *

Guard #2: * He starts sniffing.* Hey, they are still here, I smell a neko and a …* Tries to figure out from who or what is that smell.*

While they sniff the air near the “doorway”, Max and Kate closes on them, quietly, from behind.

Guard #1: It´s getting stronger…

Max used, a quick, karate chop on the guard´s neck, which is a week spot of most, causing him to faint. Kate, holding a lager rock in her hands, hit the second guard on his helmet, at the same time, almost. The impact on his head, from hitting his helmet, was so strong that he fainted too.

Max: Kate, You didn´t need to kill him. o.o * He was looking at her with the eye wide open.*

Kate: Oh well… * she started to take the guards armor off.*

They disguised themselves, and took some mud from the floor, where were missing stones, and passes it over their faces.

Max: Ok, I think this will do, but we got to be very careful. * He sees Kate running into the ruins labyrinth.* H-hey!!!
* He runs after her.*
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Comments: 22

melmoon [2008-12-22 13:09:37 +0000 UTC]

O_o
ficamos na expectativa''

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Unreal-max In reply to melmoon [2008-12-22 14:45:55 +0000 UTC]

como assim? o.o

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Voxian [2008-12-22 04:17:56 +0000 UTC]

very well done... i noticed few, if any grammatical errors... I'm amazed you can write so well, considering that English is not your first language...

still though, great storyline... i wish i could come up with stuff like this...

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Unreal-max In reply to Voxian [2008-12-22 09:25:33 +0000 UTC]

Well >.< I think for me there will allways some grammatical errors, I´m not a perfect writer even in my language.
To tell the truth, I stuied some 3 year in the U.S so my English is better than most people here, where I live, but I allway was not so good in gramma >.<

Thanks I try making a good story. I now that a lot of people make far better storys, but at least people(most)aren´t like from the "orkut" who says Maxs drawing is so bad that is hurts the eye.

I still have 124 drawings to see >.<

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Voxian In reply to Unreal-max [2008-12-23 03:54:28 +0000 UTC]

ya, I'm sure there were some errors... but i didn't notice them, cause honestly I'm terrible at English also.....

oh you studied in the U.S. ? that's awsome... what part?

hey, it's good... don't compare yourself to others...

there will always be idiots... someone will always hate your drawings...

124!? you mean, new drawings to look at?

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Unreal-max In reply to Voxian [2008-12-23 09:31:09 +0000 UTC]

Well for me if they understand me, I did the least in writing.

I moved to N.Y, but my family got to move once more. I spended 3 years in florida.

I hnow they are idiots, cause they couldn´t tell the "why" . xD
yep 124 >.< well today is my last day at work, so maybe I´ll have time.

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Voxian In reply to Unreal-max [2008-12-23 19:57:53 +0000 UTC]

true, as long as ppl understand what you are trying to say, it really doesn't matter too much...

haha, I've never been to either one of those places... i used to live in California, but last year i moved to Illinois... (hate it here)

ya, usually idiots have no explanation...

ROFL that's insane... good luck getting through all those... I'm sure plenty of them are mine....

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Unreal-max In reply to Voxian [2008-12-23 22:31:05 +0000 UTC]

I´m still lazy to look it all

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Voxian In reply to Unreal-max [2008-12-23 22:44:47 +0000 UTC]

haha lol xD

well at least look at mine... <3 =^.^=

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AkasukiGirl [2008-12-22 00:22:39 +0000 UTC]

Kool!

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Unreal-max In reply to AkasukiGirl [2008-12-22 09:27:39 +0000 UTC]

Why thank you sweety I´m glad that you like the capters

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AkasukiGirl In reply to Unreal-max [2008-12-22 20:09:41 +0000 UTC]

-blush- They are awesomely awesome.Mabey I should write out one of my Oc's stories....

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Unreal-max In reply to AkasukiGirl [2008-12-23 23:46:08 +0000 UTC]

Yeah u should ^^

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AkasukiGirl In reply to Unreal-max [2008-12-24 00:14:41 +0000 UTC]

hehe.I will when I have time,I'm super busy right now.

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Unreal-max In reply to AkasukiGirl [2008-12-24 10:12:16 +0000 UTC]

ok >.<

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AkasukiGirl In reply to Unreal-max [2008-12-24 14:29:16 +0000 UTC]

hehe.I started Suki's

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Unreal-max In reply to AkasukiGirl [2008-12-24 14:32:46 +0000 UTC]

I saw it
I got to make more bad guys lol

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AkasukiGirl In reply to Unreal-max [2008-12-24 16:01:00 +0000 UTC]

lol.

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halibabica [2008-12-22 00:10:13 +0000 UTC]

Not bad so far. I keep forgetting to edit these for you. Maybe sometime soon!

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Unreal-max In reply to halibabica [2008-12-22 09:31:02 +0000 UTC]

No sweat^^ Now I´m just worryed about the stories ideas

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halibabica In reply to Unreal-max [2008-12-22 12:54:45 +0000 UTC]

The story ideas aren't bad, but they may be better in another form of media. It's written like a script, so maybe it could be a comic someday.

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Unreal-max In reply to halibabica [2008-12-22 14:45:29 +0000 UTC]

xD You know, thats th idea, I want to make a comic some day.

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