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Published: 2008-12-02 00:08:42 +0000 UTC; Views: 116; Favourites: 1; Downloads: 6
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Description Chapter 1: Reawaking

“A few days ago…”
*Max, and his friends, were fighting shadow and his generals. It looked like the final battle, but shadow managed to get much more powerful. No choice was left for Max but to banish shadow, using himself as a lock. So he hold his sword, legacy, in front of him, pointing it down, and began speak some wired words. Some strange signs began to light up, in a light blue tone, on the blade. He closed his eyes. A bright golden circle on the floor began to rises in front of him, which started sucking air.*

Nina: Max!!! What are you doing???

Jack: * I heard about this, he banished some dark creatures* Turns to Nina and says* My grandfather is doing what he has to do.

Tom: * Was just looking ate what his grandfather is doing. Suddenly he senses a strong quake a saw some rocks falling from the ceiling of the building* Its better that we get out of here. NOW!!!!!

Nina: B-but we can’t leave Max. * She tried to get to him but Jack hold her back*

Jack: My brother is right. We’ll sink with the building if we don´t get out of here.

Sam: I think so too* She runs to Tom, Jack and Nina*

*The sucking of the light circle gets stronger, and shadow is aware that this is his end, but he wouldn´t  go alone*
     
Nina: Max!!! DON´T PLEASE!!!! * A sadness came over her, and made tires fall from her face*

Max: G-go…please!!! Nina... you mean… a lot to me…I don´t want… to take you with us.. GET OUT NOW!!!

Shadow: I don´t thing so * He pointed his dark hand at Nina, and was beginning to charge a dark shot*

Max: GO!!!* he notice the attack from Shadow, so  is making a counter-attack. His body brightens up in a golden sun*  Making sure that Shadow can´t see*

Shadow: AAArgh MY EYES, cures you MAX!!! * He was slowly being sucked. *

*Jack pulled Nina back, the four put a hand in front of there eyes and started to run to the teleport which is the entry to the building*  Outside every one watched helplessly how the building sinks to the bottom of the ocean*

*Nina cried in silence, being touch on her shoulder by Cesar, her brother*


“Days later”

*Max lays , unconscious, near the ocean on green grass*
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Comments: 25

AkasukiGirl [2008-12-14 00:22:42 +0000 UTC]

Awesome!

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Unreal-max In reply to AkasukiGirl [2008-12-14 00:54:05 +0000 UTC]

tnx u ^^

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AkasukiGirl In reply to Unreal-max [2008-12-14 00:54:35 +0000 UTC]

welcome!

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Unreal-max In reply to AkasukiGirl [2008-12-14 01:01:14 +0000 UTC]

I´ll try to make chapter 3 as soon as I can
also I´m not good coloring so I won´t waste my time tring to colo " chrismas gift"

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AkasukiGirl In reply to Unreal-max [2008-12-14 01:05:49 +0000 UTC]

Why not?I'd color it anyway,my coloring sucks too.

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Unreal-max In reply to AkasukiGirl [2008-12-14 01:09:28 +0000 UTC]

>. I got to try making stories


well most didn´t say if they wanna read more

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AkasukiGirl In reply to Unreal-max [2008-12-14 01:11:13 +0000 UTC]

-sniffel- I do, I'm just horrible at stating everything >.>

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Unreal-max In reply to AkasukiGirl [2008-12-14 01:15:40 +0000 UTC]

No your not horrible at strating >.<

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AkasukiGirl In reply to Unreal-max [2008-12-14 01:16:37 +0000 UTC]

thx.i think lol

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Unreal-max In reply to AkasukiGirl [2008-12-14 01:19:46 +0000 UTC]

>.< I think that we can´t let us jugde us

We´re the worsed jugde that we can met >.<

well I got to go
bye bye sweety o/

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AkasukiGirl In reply to Unreal-max [2008-12-14 01:20:20 +0000 UTC]

-blush- See ya

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melmoon [2008-12-06 13:22:46 +0000 UTC]

;000000000;
E AIH?!

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Unreal-max In reply to melmoon [2008-12-06 16:02:19 +0000 UTC]

>.< Eu ainda vou continuar, se mais alguns aprovam a historia >.<

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melmoon In reply to Unreal-max [2008-12-07 14:04:29 +0000 UTC]

todos aprovam ;0;

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Unreal-max In reply to melmoon [2008-12-07 17:13:04 +0000 UTC]

nao sei o/ vou primeiro fazer um desenho de natal

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melmoon In reply to Unreal-max [2008-12-08 12:08:22 +0000 UTC]

*Q*~
boa ideia!

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Unreal-max In reply to melmoon [2008-12-08 14:48:25 +0000 UTC]

e vc nem olhou que postei no D.A ç.ç

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melmoon In reply to Unreal-max [2008-12-09 12:26:23 +0000 UTC]

calma U_U"
voce eh muito apressado

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Unreal-max In reply to melmoon [2008-12-09 14:41:58 +0000 UTC]

ç.ç que nada
mas vc comenta o de quase um semana atrais e nao comenta o recente.

sabe que te amo neh *o*

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melmoon In reply to Unreal-max [2008-12-10 11:22:13 +0000 UTC]

;0;~
eu sou uma pessoa ocupada -q'

NHAIM >//<

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Unreal-max In reply to melmoon [2008-12-10 14:21:45 +0000 UTC]

>.< e eu tbm

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halibabica [2008-12-02 03:07:28 +0000 UTC]

Not too bad, but I guess English isn't your first language. If you like, I'd be happy to proofread it for you and fix up some of the problem areas.

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Unreal-max In reply to halibabica [2008-12-02 09:23:54 +0000 UTC]

Yeah, I only learned the basic from the language. I know that I´m very sucks in English.
I´d be thankfull if you help me.

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halibabica In reply to Unreal-max [2008-12-02 16:07:26 +0000 UTC]

Okay, I'll see what I can do.

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Unreal-max In reply to halibabica [2008-12-02 17:36:13 +0000 UTC]

thanks /o/

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