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Published: 2002-07-29 05:21:04 +0000 UTC; Views: 292; Favourites: 1; Downloads: 23
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Wide awakesun is rising
as I'm lying here
I wonder
was it real?
Did you ever
hold my hand
with your arm
around my waist
pull me close
kiss me soft
watch for the smile
on my face?
Did you ever
feel my skin
touching yours
in your bed
breaking rules
keeping time
so we'd be sure
to leave by two?
Were you ever
deep inside me
full of passion
sweating under sheets
in the dark
attempting to relieve
my nonexistant
self esteem?
Did you ever
watch me cry
for unknown reasons
in my head
hold me tight
and try so hard
to make me smile
once again?
As I'm lying here
I wonder
was it real?
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Comments: 10
I guess I'm not the only lonely soul out there. I think I'd be asking if it is real though. The thing they call love has not yet been felt for me. Damn... Sorry.
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i can't even find the right words to describe this, not only could i relate to the feelings very well, it was written perfectly. the flow prepared you for what was in the end. well done
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I really like it..it seems everyone writes the best when their in pain..or the lost someone..or..the being forgotten..the thought of being forgotten. being alone
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great work. Like the rythms of the poem. Also very much like the content. a classic example of the mis-matched emotions and needs between a couple.
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Was it real?... wow. simply beautiful. like *waiting4chaos*, ditto on how you use words. Your work just inspired me.
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Very Very nice. I really like the way you use the words. and How it sits in my mind. I love Reading Poems with Cool Intentions Instead of that Suicidal Crap i see everywhere
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U can feel the broken heart in those words...+fav
When I'm tring to get over what I thought was a meaningful relationship, I've found that getting outa the house and just hanging out with some friends works wonders. It takes your mind of the past, and it just helps to not be alone.
If only the same effect of words could be obtained w/out actually experiancing what they proclaim...
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Well done. This flows incredibly well and is definatly deserving of a +fav in my book. Every thing just seems to go together. Nice job.
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