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VIDEO VERSION HERE (without audio because of tumblr...) : webmegami.tumblr.com/post/4529… New page in the middle of university stuff!
And... so many other things to do!!! And I suck at fight scenes I think... Now excuse me I’m going to collapse on my bed because of exhaustion… *dies*
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Basically it will be a story opposing Fi to Ghirahim, they will be the main characters of this comic I’m making.
For the context: Link and Fi have been in mission again and had to face Ghirahim once more. Unfortunately during this fight Ghirahim used a more vicious weapon covered with poison. Same if Link was able to hold on, a single cut from this weapon contaminated him and now his life is in great danger. Obviously not in the condition to act by himself, Fi decides to intervene…
Hope you will like it…
Art, Human Fi (this version) and Fi's sword © Webmegami
Fi and Ghirahim © Nintendo
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Comments: 73
Don't think of it as "you suck,"
Think of it as Fi is a little rusty and Ghirahim is toying with her.
I do.
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Don't worry, Fi! You're WAY better than Ghirahim! You're a fire bender, even! You got the sacred flames! (P.S. Webmegami, if you want to to use that idea, you can...)
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Indeed she's better than him! >: )
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"Fi I will help!" runs up with sword gets stabbed by giraham "That didn't last lo-"dies
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So I just read up to here from the start: and omfg, this comic is so perfect and I love Ghirahim and the whole human Fi and I really do hope you continue! I'm so excited for future pages~! ♡
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Thank you a lot 
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This is really great! ^_^ Your redesign of Fi is absolutely astounding, I love it! The effects you use in your coloring are amazing to me. I suppose experiance would bring the time it takes to do something like this down quite a bit, but just how long does it take you to do just one of these panels? I can't even fathom being able to make a panel like this if you gave me a full week just to work on it alone.
My only nitpick about the actual pics is that Fi's and Ghirahim's action poses near the end of this one seem kind of stagnant. I'm not really reading the motion of a battle into it. Not to say that I'm any good at this stuff myself, but I dunno, I'd say try doing some different angles in your fight panels, and up-shot, a down-shot a close up. Right now the camera is just kinda fixed on a level plain. Doing dynamic angles is more of a challenge I know, but I think the result would be worth it.
As for the actual comic portion (I just read 1-7 now) its not needed but I kind of would have liked to see a little more backstory, like maybe a panel or two of like key points in Link and Ghirahim's battle to begin with. But like I said you don't especially need this, this comic has a fast pace and it works well.
I don't know if you quite have Fi's speech pattern down right. I can't imagine her saying some things you have her say, like her "Get ready to fight" line, --you make an effort to use her formal robot speech but it seems to me that a better fit there would be "prepare to battle." or somesuch. And then some of her lines just get a little confusing. I know what you mean by her last line on this page "So you think" but that phrase just kinda hits my ear wrong for some reason. More like "So you say," "So you believe," or "That's what you think." (probably one of the former two for her speech pattern)
Sorry, I don't mean to get so critical but I hope you're a person who like lots of constructive criticism. I'm a literary person, I migrated to dA from fanfiction, this is what I do.
I've written so much because I really think you have something good going on here, and I want to help you improve and make it even better. Keep up the good work. ^_^
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Thank you a lot for the comment
Well to be honest it depends of my motivation and of the time that I have but I guess that it takes around 2-3 hours for a panel (sketch, lineart, colors + effects). And yes, I must improve in the movements, I'm not satisfied with my technique yet.
I had thought about making the backstory as well, but to start I needed to be in the action already. Maybe later I will tell what happened before the first page of the comic. ^^
And I seriously would need an english translator. XD Because I don't have the typical english expressions and I'm a bit scared that it ruins the text and comic. lol
There's nothing wrong with constructive criticism, it's nice to have a full opinion about what is done in my art
Thank you a lot again
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Oh I'm sure you could find someone to look over your text before you submit the actual comic and make sure it reads all right. There are lots of helpful Americans, Brits and other native English speakers on the internet. Heck, I volunteer to help you. I'm actually looking at majoring in English in college (and I have good grammar when I focus, I swear.) I try to check dA fairly often, but sometimes I have my busy weeks. But if you wanted to note me with the dialogue you want to include in a future comic I'd be happy to look it over. Incidently, what is your first language?
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*Bites nails waiting for new page* I read all of your comic pages and they are excellent in color, creativity, and style. You are good at fighting scenes! Ghirahim is so sexy and Fi is beautiful as a human.
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The MANY thing I like about this comic series thing:
1) Link is in a life/death situation
2) Shows Fi is beautiful in human form
3) Show Ghirahim getting his butt kick by a GIRL (LOL) XD
4) AND it is Skyward Sword
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OMG!!!!!!!!!!! Having major epicness feels!!!!!
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the fighting does look stiff, especially the last panel, but otherwise, great work
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Yes, I will try to improve in the next pages. ^^ Some advices?
Thank you
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there needs to be more of a sense of tension, movement an stance. look at some fight scene stills to get a good idea at what i mean.
itll give you a good reason to watch sucker punch, aha.
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this is gorgeous, I can't wait to see more beautiful drawings of ghirahim and fi!!
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La colo est magnifique, comme prévu !
Superbe page
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Yeah it would be better XD
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*thinks before getting EVIL idea and sneaks in whiel in human form and searches ghirahim's room for antidote, all the while pouring RED WINE on his clothes and bed and stuff while searching*
[[i guess not really evil in a sense |]]
Jewel: my admin doesn't know what she's talking about, it IS evil
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go fi go!!!! it's great to see another page of this ^^
you do not suck at fight scenes, i think this one is just fine
good luck with everything megami-sempai!
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you're very welcome megami-sempai ^^
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