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westwolf270 [2016-02-27 19:09:14 +0000 UTC]

great advice and I see where your going. I do in fact ink my own work usually. but the main reason I didn't pay as much attention to details and realism here is cause, I feel what I'm being graded on here is character design and story boarding. these are basically like thumbnails stuff no one sees. but yes your right I would do all the things you listed for the final project which is more like a portfolio finished peace. 

I also got two other courses going on and though I'd like to spend more time on this I really can't. maybe I'll go back after it gets graded.

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cerebraleye [2016-02-27 17:39:10 +0000 UTC]

I remember this one from the correspondence course! Having gone to the school and graduated I can give you some tips about the look of your finished product. The level at which you have done this actually looks , to me, as unfinished pencils. You have the layout of the panels and the characters. Yet, the pencil level that you have down does not have the crisp defined images one would expect. there is only sketchy imagery of what the characters look like. With the course, don't look at this as a finished product for pencils. If you are going to ink it then yeah, You can save all that detail for the inks if you are familiar with the character and know how to put it in. Some things to work on. The sword style. Is it a katana, a Tanto blade ? Is it western style? or some cutting edge futuristic version? Where are the belts to hold up the pants or at lest the top of the pants from the fabric used. If you look at any clothing they will have a thicking seam near the edges to hold them in place. The "arms" with the blades coming out of the characters back. Are they robotic? are they insect like? are they energy formed from a power? The shadows are just blocked in. You need to get a defined area of light and dark on those. Since the edges are not defined, you are not seeing the image cleanly, it is muddled. Then, add the feathering on the "grey" areas of the imagine. Where the shadows are begun to be lost or broken up from the increased intensity of the light. Your panels are good at showing what is going on. I can follow them easily. Though, using your pencil line thickness to show the foreground (heaviest), middle ground (middle weight), and Background (thinnest lightest) with the weight being the darkness of the line you are using as a scale. You have a nice start, and please do not take my critic as a negative one at all. These are small points for improvements. You have a nice vision there and you can only develop that from here on. Keep up the work and oh, get picture reference for all of the items on the page. Photo reference from the internet, your own pictures of reality around you that you want to include, clothes, boots, gas masks, swords, mountains, golems..you get the meaning. Alright, keep working!

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TheKubertSchool [2016-02-26 16:41:00 +0000 UTC]

This looks great! 

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