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Jinore [2011-07-01 05:44:37 +0000 UTC]

(Not very well at critiques er watever but..) I noticed that the exposed shoulder toward the right is a bit large for the pose, a little too exposed to say in other words. And the other shoulder thats covered by hair is a bit small, based from the ref, the arm to the left starts off in the wrong place, also i believe it needs to be bend a bit more. Another thing i noticed was the way the face is turned. Its a bit more towards the back than displayed here. Also, now that i look back at the face, the lips are bigger in the ref you used, and its slightly open showin a smidge (ya,, i said smidge) of teeth. The leg thats pointed somewhat outwards needs to go that way a lil more also. And the girl in the ref, her feet are close to being level since she's on a flat surface, in this (in my opinion) it looks as if she's walked up a few stairs and stopped on one for a model photo. (hope non of that sounded rude, i dnt mean to sound that way..) Though everything else is flawless. Good Job

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AetherealSymphony [2011-02-27 08:30:45 +0000 UTC]

Thanks! Very helpful!

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Katria-Kage [2010-12-07 01:48:35 +0000 UTC]

More tips;
- Use the three eye-tip. Your eyes are only an eye apart.
- The ear reaches from middle of the eye, where the tear duct, etc is, to the corner of your mouth.
- The calf and thigh are about the same length.
- When you stand more on one leg, so your hip is out more to one side, that shoulder goes down.
- The foot is as long as the forearm.

Now I am at a loss. Can't remember any more!

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shininginthedarkness [2010-12-07 01:11:55 +0000 UTC]

I'm not good at actual critiques, so I'm just gonna point out the flaws. Although the feet are excellent. Anyway:
The arm on the left is too long. If you look at the ref, the elbow should be bent more so it's farther away from the knee.
The shoulder/collarbone area is pretty off. The human torso just doesn't have this rounded shape at the top, it basically ends with the collarbone, which is an inverted V. Also, the shoulder should be larger and more prominent, and the arm on the left starts in the wrong place because of this. The torso on the ref is leaning back slightly, and this picture doesn't have that going on, which subtracts a lot from the pose.

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