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The amber girlwas preserved perfectly
and her silky hair and porcelain skin
gleamed like a doll's
But the scientists weren't able to keep
her soul burning
because though she was in the
glass case filled with chemicals and fluids
and they were desperately trying to pump
oxygen into her lungs,
her mind was still up in space
with the stars
So the sun was extinguished
despite the cries and mournful screams
because they had
broke her
and the many who looked up
at her light and glory
slowly began to rot away
And so not a single thing was solved
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Comments: 56
WindFragments In reply to ??? [2014-07-04 00:39:24 +0000 UTC]
I have awesomeness? Thank you!
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the-imagined In reply to WindFragments [2014-07-07 03:00:46 +0000 UTC]
You're welcome ^^
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AilC-94 [2014-07-03 01:18:38 +0000 UTC]
IDK why this reminds me of The Fault in Our Stars but it does :L
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WindFragments In reply to tommyboywood [2014-06-30 21:38:00 +0000 UTC]
Yup, doesn't it always?
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KiraJacqueline In reply to WindFragments [2014-10-10 04:53:49 +0000 UTC]
You're welcome! Β ^ ^
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Alloci [2014-06-30 05:54:47 +0000 UTC]
This is so pretty C:
Will it okay with you if I do some fanart bout this?
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WindFragments In reply to Alloci [2014-06-30 15:18:05 +0000 UTC]
Fanart?! Wait seriously. But of course you can! Tell me after you're done
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TheGalleryOfEve [2014-06-30 01:47:48 +0000 UTC]
Congratulations on your well-deserved DD!!!
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WindFragments In reply to TheGalleryOfEve [2014-06-30 02:52:17 +0000 UTC]
Aww thank you very much!
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WindFragments In reply to princessanastasia434 [2014-06-30 02:52:31 +0000 UTC]
Thank you!
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WindFragments In reply to Lirtista [2014-06-30 02:52:56 +0000 UTC]
Thank you very much
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daybreaksmiles [2014-06-30 00:18:44 +0000 UTC]
Well done! Congrats on the DD, you totally deserve it
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WindFragments In reply to daybreaksmiles [2014-06-30 00:22:47 +0000 UTC]
Aww thank you!
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InfiniteRiver [2014-06-29 23:21:44 +0000 UTC]
Was this some kind of science experiment gone wrong? Like, cloning or something? Transferring a mind between bodies or something?
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WindFragments In reply to InfiniteRiver [2014-06-29 23:47:19 +0000 UTC]
There's a lot of ways to interpret this piece, but when I wrote it
I meant to tell the story of a girl whose body is alive, but whose soul is dead.
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WindFragments In reply to AuthorKatieOlson [2014-06-29 23:02:34 +0000 UTC]
Thank youuu
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TheSisters2 [2014-06-29 19:55:03 +0000 UTC]
You deserved the DD. Perfect poetry technique-Chrissy
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WindFragments In reply to TheSisters2 [2014-06-29 21:01:41 +0000 UTC]
Aw thank you very much
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Sorceress555 [2014-06-29 19:47:28 +0000 UTC]
Mmm, it's about a brain dead patient? Β Very deep, congrats on the DD.
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WindFragments In reply to Sorceress555 [2014-06-29 21:01:02 +0000 UTC]
In a way And thank you!
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TheWeeLad [2014-06-29 16:59:23 +0000 UTC]
I don't understand ONE word of this... but I still like it somehow.
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WindFragments In reply to TheWeeLad [2014-06-29 17:32:23 +0000 UTC]
Haha, well I'm glad you do Β
(But it's basically about a girl whose body is alive and soul is broken if that helps a bit)
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Rot8erConeX [2014-06-29 16:47:31 +0000 UTC]
At first I thought she'd died inside, but now I'm wondering - didΒ her soulΒ become a noncorpeal entity or something?
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WindFragments In reply to Rot8erConeX [2014-06-29 17:37:25 +0000 UTC]
Huh I never thought about it that way. But yeah, she died inside. I wrote it meaning to say that her body is alive, but her soul is dead.
But I can understand why you thought that.
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cremep0ps [2014-06-29 16:45:02 +0000 UTC]
For some reason it reminds me of this:Β www.youtube.com/watch?v=G0KTUyβ¦
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WindFragments In reply to cremep0ps [2014-06-29 17:42:24 +0000 UTC]
Wow I actually really liked that. Hope it turns into a videogame
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WindFragments In reply to scomodo [2014-06-29 17:43:04 +0000 UTC]
Thank you very much!
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WishingUnderThatStar [2014-05-18 13:10:38 +0000 UTC]
Absolutely beautiful imagery. I liked the story of the poem, too.
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WindFragments In reply to WishingUnderThatStar [2014-05-19 00:27:41 +0000 UTC]
Thank you
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WishingUnderThatStar In reply to WindFragments [2014-05-19 11:49:22 +0000 UTC]
You're welcome.
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Undomiel321 [2014-04-25 03:38:45 +0000 UTC]
Cool! It's not often I see sci-fi in poetry. I enjoy it!
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WindFragments In reply to Undomiel321 [2014-04-25 05:17:45 +0000 UTC]
Thanks! Glad you liked it
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