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Published: 2012-01-03 11:17:11 +0000 UTC; Views: 2817; Favourites: 41; Downloads: 5
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Description The girl stroke the match. Sparks flew, then the matchhead caught fire in a bright light and an acryde smell filled her nose. After a moment the bright light and smell of the chemicals were gone and a natural flame was born, living on its own, feeding only on wood and air. A tiny flame first, but still emitting a pleasant light and smell. She felt a relieve as she watched the flame grew to full size, and slowly consuming the wood.

The girl smiled. The flame reflected in her eyes, she felt the warmth as the fire comes close to her fingers. Before it starts to hurt she took the matchstick gently between the thumb and index finger of her other hand. It was black, the burned wood still warm, leaving a bit of soot on her small fingers. She watched dreamly into the flame, as it wandered upwards, to the end. Then the flame died, becoming small, and vanished, only small traces of smoke drifting upwards, before it also dissolve into nothing. The fire was gone.

The girl was sad. She let the burned, blackend match fall down on the table, and then took an other one from the box. She smiled again, move it down to the side of box to light it. Then there was a sudden pain at her hand, the match and matchbox fell down, spilled the sticks that were inside all around the ground. The girl looked up, frightend, tears in her eyes, the hand were she had been hit throbbing with pain. Her mother was looking down at her, angry, yelling at her, rising her hand for an other stroke.

The girl closed her eyes as she saw the hand rushing down to her.

The woman opened her eyes. Even if now much older, they were still much like the eyes of the girl; full of fear and sadness, glittering with unshead tears. She was sitting alone in her appartment in front of a small table. It was cold. It was dark. A strong wind was blowing outside. Light from a distant lantern outside the window, behind a leafless tree cast shadowly figures at the wall. Her trembeling fingers held a matchstick.

The woman sat on the table for some minutes, was breathing in and out, still shivering. Then her trembeling lessened, and with a focused motion she stroke the match. She calmed down, the tension faded, her trembeling stopped, she held the burning matchstick now motionless and watched dreamly into the flame. Her sad face even managed to form a smile, as the warm flickering light filled the room, chassing away the shadows and the darkness.

The fire burned so brightly, so pure, so warm, so beautiful, so fascinating, so innocent. Gone were the bad memories from the past, gone were the problems of the present, gone was the fear from the future.

But after a few heartbeats the flame went out and the shadows and darkness came back. She took and other matchstick in her hand, but did not stroke it. Warm tears streamed down her cheek as she started to sob uncontrollable.
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Comments: 29

Griffonmender [2014-03-16 17:18:55 +0000 UTC]

Β Β  It's very well done.
Β Β Β Β Acryde should be acrid, however, and (in these sentences; "But after a few heartbeats the flame went out and the shadows and darkness came back. She took and other matchstick in her hand, but did not stroke it. Warm tears streamed down her cheek as she started to sob uncontrollable. ",) stoke should be strike and uncontrollable uncontrollably.
Β Β  However despite it's flaws, it is a very intriguing story^^ And to be frank, my literature favorites were long over do for something that's not a Hetalia fanfic.

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TerramArmsXIII [2014-03-16 11:59:13 +0000 UTC]

hmmm, this is well done sir, i have to say you use beautiful words to convey what you will!Β 

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MiriaGreyhaven [2014-03-05 21:28:38 +0000 UTC]

You describe my feelings so perfectly... I am almost in tears from the accuracy of this, you truly are an amazingly talented writer!

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witch1978 In reply to MiriaGreyhaven [2014-03-06 21:41:05 +0000 UTC]

It is a very personal story, I am glad that you like it ... Thank you ...

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MiriaGreyhaven In reply to witch1978 [2014-03-09 21:24:20 +0000 UTC]

My absolute pleasure!

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RipplingEmbers [2012-05-20 06:22:23 +0000 UTC]

Good lord, you're a beautiful writer. What I finished reading this, goose bumps ran all up my arms. I love all the emotion in this piece, especially how the woman calms down after she lights a match, and likewise, how she breaks down after the match burns itself out.

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witch1978 In reply to RipplingEmbers [2012-05-24 16:34:32 +0000 UTC]

Thank you ... I was not sure about the gap between the past, and the present, but felt a bit as this is a little bit autobiographic story and shows how such a "disorder" affects people of all ages on very different ways and views ... when my mother caught me as child playing with matchsticks it was very much alike what happend in the story (and still did not made the fascination for fire go away, no matter how the punishment was ... I simply spend much more energy in not getting caught than not doing it) ... but now I am an old crone ... noone really cares what I do with matchsticks and candles as long as I don't set something big on fire (which I don't do, I keep to matchsticks ) ... It helps a bit for some weird reasons ... but there are not enough matchsticks in the world to make the cause for the tears go away ... its like escaping in a dreamworld, flee from reality (like people taking drugs, drink, smoke, play videogames, stay all the time on the chat) ... and even when I stop for some days, weeks, month, maybe even over a year ... i still come sometimes back and light a matchstick ... sigh ...

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RipplingEmbers In reply to witch1978 [2012-05-24 23:39:26 +0000 UTC]

I suppose we all have our ways of dealing with harder parts of life. Seeing beauty and relief in fire is just one of these ways, and the way you described the momentary relief it brings is quite wonderful.

Just out of curiosity, why not a candle? It takes longer to burn out... Or does that make it loose it's appeal?

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witch1978 In reply to RipplingEmbers [2012-05-27 22:14:23 +0000 UTC]

Yep, but the transience of the fire is also something that makes it so special, and a cadle is somehow cheating ... and it burns also completely different than the wood of a matchstick (or a bonfire)... it is full of energy and more ... while a candle is somehow boring ... of course a cadle also has some nice wax ... I know, i am weird

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RipplingEmbers In reply to witch1978 [2012-05-28 16:48:40 +0000 UTC]

That's a good point. Wood does burn so differently then a candle does. In my case, I love wax (I don't think that's weird at all. XD) so a long-lasting candle with nice wax is more interesting. But if you're looking for the fire, then I see your point.

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witch1978 In reply to RipplingEmbers [2012-05-28 21:45:02 +0000 UTC]

Well, if I would write a story about wax and candles it would for sure get a mature tag

(Note - if anyone reads this - Candlewax on naked skins feels very interesting, but use real beewax candles and not the cheap tealight ... last ones get way to hot and feel very ... unpleasant (unless you are masochistic )

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Fyreglyphs [2012-05-17 21:22:19 +0000 UTC]

I love it~

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witch1978 In reply to Fyreglyphs [2012-05-18 18:34:50 +0000 UTC]

Thank you

Hope it is not to sad and depressing ...

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bearberry915 [2012-04-08 07:12:10 +0000 UTC]

beautiful

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witch1978 In reply to bearberry915 [2012-04-20 19:46:24 +0000 UTC]

Thank you

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bearberry915 In reply to witch1978 [2012-04-21 00:07:46 +0000 UTC]

no problem

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Poison-Root [2012-03-06 20:21:25 +0000 UTC]

beautiful piece

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witch1978 In reply to Poison-Root [2012-03-07 11:40:38 +0000 UTC]

Thank you

I felt a bit better after writing this, but still light matches from time to time ... well, at least it is more healthy and has less side effects than smoking

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Poison-Root In reply to witch1978 [2012-03-07 18:34:46 +0000 UTC]

You're welcome~

xD I lit a match for the first time in my life a few months ago, I burnt myself and my friend next to me, somehow~

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witch1978 In reply to Poison-Root [2012-03-20 21:26:13 +0000 UTC]

Yep, fire can be dangerous ... but also fascinating

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StormyMaid [2012-01-16 01:30:30 +0000 UTC]

so wait... did the mom kick her out?

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witch1978 In reply to StormyMaid [2012-01-16 23:36:34 +0000 UTC]

No, at least not physical ... still for the girl it was surely like her mother has stopped loving her as she hit her hard and often for a reason she did not understood.

Why not take the matchsticks just away from her and talk in a normal way to her why she should not play with fire (and of course put the matchsticks out of reach) ...

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xXXxWolfie-FiendXxxX [2012-01-07 16:42:24 +0000 UTC]

I think you need to work on your writing a bit more, but don't get me wrong. This is very expressive, you can feel a lot of emotions in it. You're good at writing, you just need a bit more practice.

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witch1978 In reply to xXXxWolfie-FiendXxxX [2012-01-10 21:05:41 +0000 UTC]

Thanks ... will try to write some more soon, but currently lack inspiration and best don't want to write about myself more ...

Any direct suggestions what I need to work on especially?

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xXXxWolfie-FiendXxxX In reply to witch1978 [2012-01-12 17:20:44 +0000 UTC]

You're welcome.

It seemed to me that your tenses were a little mixed up. Overall, you're writing in the present tense, but it seems to jump to past tense in places. Try to concentrate on keeping everything in the same tense, unless you're writing a flashback, or have a good reason for switching the tenses. Mind you, this is something that I, personally, need to work on as well, it can be a little difficult You're a very good writer, very strong. Please keep writing.

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witch1978 In reply to xXXxWolfie-FiendXxxX [2012-01-16 23:41:35 +0000 UTC]

hmmm ... i tried to write it mostly in past tense ... originaly tried to write the past in past, and present in present, but that sounded weird ... but have fixed a few spelling errors

Will keep writing, maybe one day also something positiv and optimistic

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Krystalmyth [2012-01-04 00:06:23 +0000 UTC]

Fire is life, and death~ and we're the ones who dance between those meanings as if we could control it. Without fire, we would not be~ when we need it most, it can be difficult to come by, and if we don't respect it, it can destroy everything we hold dear. Something that represents life and death so easily, reminds me that they're not all too different. They both be, and not be~ at any time. Burn as brightly as you can, when you can~ and let the chaos dance until it can't dance anymore. None of us can ever decide when that'll be~ only the fire in our hearts can. <3

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witch1978 In reply to Krystalmyth [2012-01-16 23:38:41 +0000 UTC]

Very nice and poetical written

And speaking of Chaos ... I should clean up my appartment ... there is nearly no space to move anymore, much less to dance

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Werwolfin In reply to Krystalmyth [2012-01-16 19:16:15 +0000 UTC]

Great comment!
Agreed...

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