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Published: 2010-07-10 21:02:18 +0000 UTC; Views: 231; Favourites: 9; Downloads: 1
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I once knew a dream,it was soft and sweet,and it stroked me with gentle fingers,
in the hours before the birds would tweet.
I thought that love was a word we never mean,
and even though I heard it again and again
I could never let it out, in case I was seen.
I once felt that I could stand, upright, proud and tall,
But I was a man called unusual, soft and sensitive,
and all I really learnt was that in the end we all have our falls.
I thought that hate was something we all couldn't stand,
before I found men with souls stained pitch black,
and learnt that in their lives they lent out fists and not hands.
I once longed for mastery over something, something so very dear,
and I strove for it with all my heart, again and again I worked,
only to find that all I really wanted was mastery over my fears.
I thought I heard your name somewhere on the wind,
I believed I had seen my face reflected in your eyes,
only to know that pride is one of the most dangerous sins.
I once felt a strand of grass, under fingers soft and warm,
and wondered why they always made me end up cut and torn,
always partly broken, bruised and faintly scarred this form.
I thought that I would go somewhere great when fully grown,
but that was just a lie I seemed to have made up for myself,
before I reached out and touched the facts, before I saw my broken home.
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Comments: 8
AlterEgo1629 [2010-07-27 01:13:31 +0000 UTC]
This was much more than good. I love the full feel of the sentences. Finding poetry with long sentences is getting harder and harder to do. You have wonderful rhymes, and a great flow. It felt full of a soft emotion, a sadness yet not too sad. It is a great piece, and tells a strong story.
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Wombat-Pentagram In reply to AlterEgo1629 [2010-07-27 03:47:10 +0000 UTC]
thanks very much. I am glad that you like it and that you feel the emotion within it. thanks for the faves as well.
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ladyshadowrage [2010-07-11 22:35:20 +0000 UTC]
This is beautiful and sad hun, I really like it. Awesome write.
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annatubby [2010-07-11 09:11:23 +0000 UTC]
This is a wonderful way of putting ambitions and opinions...i loved it.
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Wombat-Pentagram In reply to annatubby [2010-07-11 11:17:58 +0000 UTC]
thanks glad you like it.
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looFsydoboN [2010-07-10 22:05:59 +0000 UTC]
Great form to emphasize the contrast between dreams, hopes and realities.
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