HOME | DD
Published: 2005-11-24 21:48:44 +0000 UTC; Views: 79; Favourites: 1; Downloads: 1
Redirect to original
Description
How do you fall from HeavenWith wings of silk?
Momentous occasions shimmer,
As a fallen angel flies.
Frosted eyes of white and green.
Qualities of stars descend
Beneath a waterfall of glossy brown.
Spirits between the ebony frame,
Where that picture belongs.
Wings of silk, body of lace,
Eyes of crystal. Until they
Melt away that beauty.
And force a fallen angel
To fall once more.
Related content
Comments: 8
0042 [2006-02-19 22:06:40 +0000 UTC]
I'm not sure about the capital letters at the start of each line. It makes the poem too broken up, in my opinon. However, that's just my general dislike for that tradition. I love the... floatyness... of the descriptions here, and the way the insubstantuality of the subject is represented.
👍: 0 ⏩: 0
WordlyTruths In reply to AshInTheNothing [2005-11-29 12:48:26 +0000 UTC]
Thanks. Thanks for the favourite.
👍: 0 ⏩: 1
EnHaLtEn [2005-11-24 22:08:08 +0000 UTC]
I like the title... and the poem is really quite beautiful... perhaps a bit hard to figure out... but overall really well done.
👍: 0 ⏩: 1
WordlyTruths In reply to EnHaLtEn [2005-11-29 12:48:01 +0000 UTC]
Thank you. Glad you liked it.
👍: 0 ⏩: 0