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Published: 2009-12-26 23:59:35 +0000 UTC; Views: 1765; Favourites: 39; Downloads: 32
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Description You are not the eye-erasing beauty
of the sun splitting open the sea with morning,

but you are the green and purple glint
on a wave crest as sun ducks away into night.


You are not the electric-splash shock of
ice water in meltingpot summer,

but you could be the cool, smooth
surface of a palm.


You are not a fire, ravaging, devouring,
chewing and churning and spitting out black,

but you are a shawl, touching my shoulders tenderly.


You are not a symphony of drumroll clouds and thunder,

but you are the sound of rain.


You do not laugh like falling snowflakes.
Your words do not resonate like age-old wisdom stones.
You do not move with the grace of an almost-landing butterfly.


When you look at me, I know my eyes are opaque,
providing no windows.


But you are the lighthouse standing through the storm,

the summer breeze that lifts the flowers just a little
brighter.
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Comments: 19

kittykittyhunter [2011-03-26 17:21:28 +0000 UTC]

Hi. You’ve been featured here .
Please fave the article and check out the other pieces to spread the literature love.

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kittykittyhunter [2011-01-17 00:04:31 +0000 UTC]

Whoa, I love the colours.

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aprilwednesday [2010-12-31 19:08:55 +0000 UTC]

I've featured this in a journal of inspirational artwork: [link]

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Rhubaton [2010-10-06 23:56:31 +0000 UTC]

Oh wow this is very nice. I could see everything that you were describing in it as well!

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peridot-magelette [2010-07-18 05:41:13 +0000 UTC]

gaaaaaahhhh. this is soft and beautiful and wonderfully written. it reminds me of ~Corina90 's work, which is a high compliment!

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KneelingGlory [2010-05-05 04:21:37 +0000 UTC]

Featured in my journal !

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write-it-out In reply to KneelingGlory [2010-05-05 17:39:52 +0000 UTC]

thank you I'm honored

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choirsoftheheavens [2010-03-12 11:16:10 +0000 UTC]

positively wonderful.
this is uplifting in a very rare and awesome way.

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write-it-out In reply to choirsoftheheavens [2010-03-12 16:25:10 +0000 UTC]

thank you so much!

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choirsoftheheavens In reply to write-it-out [2010-03-13 01:17:46 +0000 UTC]

no problem!

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kulapti [2010-01-15 03:51:45 +0000 UTC]

This is beautiful. I love your imagery and how you put the title into the piece. Great job.

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Maybe-Im-Dreaming [2010-01-15 03:41:58 +0000 UTC]

"My mistress' eyes are nothing like the sun.."

Very nice. I like it a lot.

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Rainah19 [2010-01-15 02:31:18 +0000 UTC]

this is beautiful! love it

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KneelingGlory [2010-01-15 00:36:41 +0000 UTC]

You've been linked! [link]

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write-it-out In reply to KneelingGlory [2010-01-15 22:54:53 +0000 UTC]

thank you so much!

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KneelingGlory [2010-01-06 09:34:29 +0000 UTC]

I love that all of the "you are" images are quite muted in comparison to the "you are not" images - and yet I'm left with the afterthought of and that's good enough. People don't have to be spectacular to be loved.

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YouInventedMe [2010-01-02 21:01:36 +0000 UTC]

excellent opening & closing strophes

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write-it-out In reply to YouInventedMe [2010-01-03 17:39:49 +0000 UTC]

thank you!

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Sweetnsexy33 [2009-12-27 17:57:16 +0000 UTC]

Wow. Visually stimulating. Your writing generates the images so vividly in my mind.

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