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Yobi-chan β Imploding Mind
Published: 2014-08-17 20:20:02 +0000 UTC; Views: 210; Favourites: 2; Downloads: 0
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Probably thanks to my ADHD I'm more sensitive to noises. My head goes something like what I've done here. Jumping thoughts, cut off words, tons of sentences and words I cannot distinguish from eatch other. It's a chaotic mess of noises and words, so bad that I almost can't breathe and I feel like dying.Give feedback?
- What do you get out of the poem?
- Do you get the feeling that you can't breathe? That it's too much?
- How well do the wording give you the feeling? I mean.. Does the words being different in different fonts and being cut off or the sentences being broken off, give you the feeling that it's hard to breathe and it feels chaotic in your own head?
Please comment and tell me so I can improve, thank you! : D
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Comments: 7
I thought it was about dying, as in the beep is a heart monitor.
this is great, either way!
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Yes, being in that position is like dying for me xD I start to panic and everything starts to blurr and I'm about to faint, so I run away. The heart monitor beep is like my mind stopping to work and shuts off (:
Thanks for the comment! You could take it as dying or commiting suicide, of course! It does sound like that : D
Thank you! >w< As always~ You make me happy everytime
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It gives me a headache, so guess it works xDΒ
It's chaotic and yes, it gives the "I can't take this anymore" feeling. I especially like the part where you've written the "songs" into each other :3Β
The different colors and texts are also good at giving the confusing and annoying (not the right word) Β impression :3Β
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Thank you! Glad it works! : D
I, myself, get out of breath whenever I read it (:
Thank you! Then I'll probably reuse the different colors and the writing the text into each other another time
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good, gives the chaotic idea xD
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