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Published: 2008-06-09 17:26:50 +0000 UTC; Views: 1867; Favourites: 57; Downloads: 4
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Description how to apologize
to the air
that I breathe
for the fear of loss
that costs
everything
when this grip
that grasps
forever
is so suffocating
when your ears
have grown tired
of these
sad songs I sing

see, panic
and I have spent
so much time
alone
that fright forms
my features
etched its shape
in my bones
and while
I long to make
my heart your home
all flaws
in design are
completely my own

I'm awkward
I'm anxious
but I'm also
all yours
for the rest
of the years
my dust circles
this earth
and though I know
to you it must
seem quite absurd
I hope to rebuild
on the strength
of these words

said
I love you
(I'll always
love you)
yes
I love you
(I'll always
love you)
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Comments: 113

YouInventedMe In reply to ??? [2013-04-14 17:50:26 +0000 UTC]

very much appreciated, my friend.

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DanceWithoutYou [2011-07-11 17:53:44 +0000 UTC]

I read it on one breath. It's amazing, the words scar the mind like sandpaper but it's worth it, definetely.

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YouInventedMe In reply to DanceWithoutYou [2011-08-26 23:39:53 +0000 UTC]

thank ya much

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ifeyescouldtalk [2009-02-13 06:40:15 +0000 UTC]

This poem made me think of him,
and then her,
and then him again.
It gets all tangled up inside, my feelings that is.
They seem to rule me these days,
with gusting winds of anger,
unannounced rain showers of sadness,
and tears that come like a tsunami
devouring anything in its path.
When will i be okay?
What is okay-ness,
surely there must be a definition.

So i trace the thoughts in my head
the memories spinning in circles
making me dizzy
no more she screams
i vomit, and i hit the ground
face first
do you feel like a man?
why can't you love me?
please love me, please
please don't go?
i miss you so.
keep me safe
it hurts.
it hurts.
i hurt.

and he's gone forever
and im glad
he never loved me anyhow
or so i tell myself
she whispers in my ear
let go.

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YouInventedMe In reply to ifeyescouldtalk [2009-02-13 19:44:02 +0000 UTC]

this reads very much like a song
thank you


xo!

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ifeyescouldtalk In reply to YouInventedMe [2009-02-13 22:18:37 +0000 UTC]

thanks..after i read your poem those words came..lol..im not the best writer, but sometimes i get a good one out...i love your stuff..

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YouInventedMe In reply to ifeyescouldtalk [2009-02-13 22:19:12 +0000 UTC]




xo!

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purpleginger [2008-08-18 07:06:27 +0000 UTC]

you've been featured!

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YouInventedMe In reply to purpleginger [2008-08-18 07:57:51 +0000 UTC]

thanks very very much


xo!

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purpleginger In reply to YouInventedMe [2008-08-18 17:45:34 +0000 UTC]

my pleasure!

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Blueskye27 [2008-06-28 17:35:04 +0000 UTC]

Hi. This piece has been featured in my journal this week.

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YouInventedMe In reply to Blueskye27 [2008-06-28 20:29:20 +0000 UTC]

I saw that

thanks very much, my friend

xo!

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Blueskye27 In reply to YouInventedMe [2008-06-29 04:08:42 +0000 UTC]

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y0urstalker [2008-06-16 03:02:29 +0000 UTC]

to the end of time...
COME WHAT MAY!

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YouInventedMe In reply to y0urstalker [2008-06-17 09:29:49 +0000 UTC]

yesyesyes!

xo!

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HoldingBackTears [2008-06-12 22:09:42 +0000 UTC]

I have read this and understand you pain.
Beautiful.

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YouInventedMe In reply to HoldingBackTears [2008-06-13 06:11:50 +0000 UTC]

thank you very much

xo!

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bone-white [2008-06-11 23:53:40 +0000 UTC]

oh...m...y...
Gosh.
i can't breathe.

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YouInventedMe In reply to bone-white [2008-06-13 06:15:05 +0000 UTC]

that makes two of us

thank you

xo!

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DEbree93 [2008-06-11 22:09:27 +0000 UTC]

Every line seems to blend in with the other, making the poem flow right through. Absolutely loved it

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YouInventedMe In reply to DEbree93 [2008-06-13 06:15:27 +0000 UTC]

much obliged

xo!

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Xaliandrea [2008-06-11 01:51:55 +0000 UTC]

"...I have spent so much time alone
that fright forms my features
etched its shape in my bones..."

Wow. Very, very nice.

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YouInventedMe In reply to Xaliandrea [2008-06-11 05:34:06 +0000 UTC]

thanks a lot

xo!

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TheTriggulator [2008-06-10 23:39:51 +0000 UTC]

Amazing.

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YouInventedMe In reply to TheTriggulator [2008-06-11 05:35:14 +0000 UTC]

thanks very much

xo!

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Isiliel922 [2008-06-10 19:29:51 +0000 UTC]

you are amazing! I really love it. It really radiates love.

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YouInventedMe In reply to Isiliel922 [2008-06-10 19:32:31 +0000 UTC]

thanks very much

xo!

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Isiliel922 In reply to YouInventedMe [2008-06-10 19:35:52 +0000 UTC]

you're welcome

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anitaROSE [2008-06-10 17:24:32 +0000 UTC]

this is wonderful. so rapid and flustered, but saying something so genuine.

fantastic!

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YouInventedMe In reply to anitaROSE [2008-06-10 18:09:19 +0000 UTC]

thanks very much

xo!

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Blueskye27 [2008-06-10 14:45:53 +0000 UTC]

Wonderful, Shane. Panic etching its shape in your bones...wow, that's so, so good.

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YouInventedMe In reply to Blueskye27 [2008-06-10 18:09:52 +0000 UTC]

thank you

xo!

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Ocean-Flute [2008-06-10 13:19:30 +0000 UTC]

This sounds like it should be a song. Make a song of this, I dare you!

Forgive me though, I still can't believe.

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YouInventedMe In reply to Ocean-Flute [2008-06-10 18:10:25 +0000 UTC]

still can't believe what?

xo!

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angel-in-pieces [2008-06-10 10:55:43 +0000 UTC]

Powerful piece
The rhythm and rhyme seem just right, and there are some really great lines in there.

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YouInventedMe In reply to angel-in-pieces [2008-06-10 18:10:34 +0000 UTC]

thanks a lot


xo!

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akinotasogare [2008-06-10 10:32:38 +0000 UTC]

Beautiful. It touched my heart and spoke to me like nothing has in awhile... I feel this sometimes.

Change because you want to, and it'll make you happy, not because someone else wants you to and it'll make them happy.

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YouInventedMe In reply to akinotasogare [2008-06-10 18:10:59 +0000 UTC]

thank you

xo!

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ottersandsky [2008-06-10 08:55:52 +0000 UTC]

Ah yes I love this.

The rhymes and rhythms.

And the sentiment.

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YouInventedMe In reply to ottersandsky [2008-06-10 18:11:13 +0000 UTC]

thanks

xo!

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ottersandsky In reply to YouInventedMe [2008-06-10 22:50:12 +0000 UTC]

You're most welcome.

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DeadThoughISeemALie [2008-06-10 08:03:06 +0000 UTC]

It seemed to be the best read fast which is how my head is and its gorgeous truly...

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YouInventedMe In reply to DeadThoughISeemALie [2008-06-10 18:11:20 +0000 UTC]

thanks very much

xo!

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DeadThoughISeemALie In reply to YouInventedMe [2008-06-10 20:31:41 +0000 UTC]

your welcome

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KneelingGlory [2008-06-10 06:38:53 +0000 UTC]

So many thoughts and feelings in this that I could call my own.

Glad someone can express them so well =]

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YouInventedMe In reply to KneelingGlory [2008-06-10 07:15:56 +0000 UTC]

thanks a lot

xo!

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Desertlion [2008-06-10 06:33:58 +0000 UTC]

I believe this
to be my most favorite from you
and even after it has been read
it still wanders in my mind
and calls to memories short and long
I do so love this

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YouInventedMe In reply to Desertlion [2008-06-10 07:16:44 +0000 UTC]

I know you never take
my love of your poetry
seriously
but that means a lot
coming from you

thanks

xo!

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Desertlion In reply to YouInventedMe [2008-06-10 07:43:53 +0000 UTC]

np, thanks for making it

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