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Published: 2012-07-01 09:23:10 +0000 UTC; Views: 1239; Favourites: 59; Downloads: 5
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Description "i found shadows in the sun again,"
i looked at her
with a gleam of sarcasm in my eyes,
as she looked down with wind in her hair.

the night looked lovely on her.
the purple of post-nebula progression
it made her eyes look electric blue
though they were a soft green.
"i said, i found shadows on the sun again."

she'd never look up unless
she couldn't breathe and needed
to pull a sigh out of her butterfly winged lungs.

and that bothered me;
                - she'd refuse to breathe
                only because the air seemed
                un-enough.
        she'd give up so easily sometimes.

i run out of pretty things to say
but she looks at me expectantly,
hoping i'll find my muse
within the corner of her elven color-coated eyes.
sometimes i did

all i asked was for the end of the world.
when she heard me, she looked up.
                not because of the lack of oxygen
                or her refusal to take a breath
        but because she said she'd do anything
to make it happen.

so she looked up to the sky,
not knowing how long her neck would be craned.
she closed her eyes and counted,
four hundred and thirty seven, four hundred and thirty eight,
four hundred and thirty nine...
and then,
                "there it is...
                i found shadows on the sun again."
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Comments: 55

Sigma-Echo-Seven [2012-07-16 05:20:19 +0000 UTC]

This was really truly touching!

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itotallycantdraw-woo [2012-07-05 22:57:49 +0000 UTC]

Oh my goodness! I just read this and frantically looked for it to put it in the featured folder of my group. Why did you remove it from ???

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your-methamphetamine In reply to itotallycantdraw-woo [2012-07-05 23:22:48 +0000 UTC]

I get random fits of insecurity and delete my stuff or take it off groups all the time. Sorry about that.

But I am so glad you like it.

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itotallycantdraw-woo In reply to your-methamphetamine [2012-07-06 04:44:18 +0000 UTC]

Well, you should put it back so I can put it where it belongs For future reference, know that you never have to take anything out of our group, everything is welcome and appreciated. Besides, your work is fantastic!

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itotallycantdraw-woo [2012-07-05 22:52:47 +0000 UTC]

This is magnificent! A beautiful blend of poetry and prose. The meaningful metaphor and brilliant word choice really make this stand out. Excellent work!

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ChildOfTheWest [2012-07-04 23:19:30 +0000 UTC]

This reminds me of a medieval poem that is sitting on the edge of my memory. Very beautiful.

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flawedfairytale [2012-07-03 15:15:59 +0000 UTC]

This is stiched so wonderfully together- the sense of time passing and subtle language lends itself so beautifully to the piece- this is really lovely.

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your-methamphetamine In reply to flawedfairytale [2012-07-03 15:28:46 +0000 UTC]

Thank you so much, dear.

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breezybrutality [2012-07-03 13:24:44 +0000 UTC]

TT.TT your reflection is BEAUTIFUL!

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your-methamphetamine In reply to breezybrutality [2012-07-03 14:49:32 +0000 UTC]


thank you so much, love <3

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breezybrutality In reply to your-methamphetamine [2012-07-04 15:26:12 +0000 UTC]

Anytime, dearest ♥

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tonepainter [2012-07-03 06:43:29 +0000 UTC]

Hauntingly beautiful...

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your-methamphetamine In reply to tonepainter [2012-07-03 08:09:27 +0000 UTC]

Thank you so much.

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InTheStarryNightSky [2012-07-03 04:24:08 +0000 UTC]

Beautiful and lovely and amazing. The imagery is marvelous and the flow is wonderful.

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your-methamphetamine In reply to InTheStarryNightSky [2012-07-03 08:09:37 +0000 UTC]

Thank you, Aiedee.

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InTheStarryNightSky In reply to your-methamphetamine [2012-07-04 01:48:52 +0000 UTC]

You're welcome Cassie.

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RussianTim [2012-07-02 23:35:35 +0000 UTC]

This was great. So many lines stood out to me. Well done!!

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your-methamphetamine In reply to RussianTim [2012-07-02 23:36:55 +0000 UTC]

thank you so, so much.

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featherback [2012-07-02 05:57:32 +0000 UTC]

I think you just became my favorite writer. <3

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your-methamphetamine In reply to featherback [2012-07-02 07:08:01 +0000 UTC]

Oh my. Thank you!

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rainbowfishie101 [2012-07-02 05:39:27 +0000 UTC]

Words cannot describe how amazing this poem is <3

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your-methamphetamine In reply to rainbowfishie101 [2012-07-02 07:08:24 +0000 UTC]

Thank you so much.

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rainbowfishie101 In reply to your-methamphetamine [2012-07-03 05:17:41 +0000 UTC]

You're very welcome

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Contradictory55 [2012-07-02 03:19:27 +0000 UTC]

It's so beautiful with its lonely feeling to it...

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your-methamphetamine In reply to Contradictory55 [2012-07-02 03:26:10 +0000 UTC]

Thank you.

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Contradictory55 In reply to your-methamphetamine [2012-07-02 03:28:54 +0000 UTC]

You're welcome!

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DoveThunder [2012-07-02 02:40:48 +0000 UTC]

Wow, fantastic imagery! The storyline is a little vague, but you completely make up for that in the delightful mood of the poem.

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your-methamphetamine In reply to DoveThunder [2012-07-02 03:26:32 +0000 UTC]

Thank you so much!

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DoveThunder In reply to your-methamphetamine [2012-07-02 05:38:40 +0000 UTC]

You're welcome.

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Felix-Anima [2012-07-01 23:35:52 +0000 UTC]

This is very moving... I know this is like, the millionth praise it's gotten, but it deserves it.

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your-methamphetamine In reply to Felix-Anima [2012-07-01 23:39:46 +0000 UTC]

Every comment puts a smile on my face. Thank you so, so much.

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Adonael [2012-07-01 21:09:52 +0000 UTC]

I loved the counting numbers towards the end. It had such a tension in it.

The 'butterfly lungs' also brought up some fantastic imagery

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your-methamphetamine In reply to Adonael [2012-07-01 21:10:45 +0000 UTC]

Thank you so much.
I am thrilled you like it.

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Adonael In reply to your-methamphetamine [2012-07-03 23:44:06 +0000 UTC]

No worries

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LionesseRampant [2012-07-01 21:06:37 +0000 UTC]

Oooh, interesting. I love the concept Good job!

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your-methamphetamine In reply to LionesseRampant [2012-07-01 21:08:55 +0000 UTC]

Thanks.

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LionesseRampant In reply to your-methamphetamine [2012-07-01 22:12:46 +0000 UTC]

You're welcome

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OniOfTheShade [2012-07-01 19:59:33 +0000 UTC]

really really good!!

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your-methamphetamine In reply to OniOfTheShade [2012-07-01 20:41:28 +0000 UTC]

Thank you.

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OniOfTheShade In reply to your-methamphetamine [2012-07-02 17:34:24 +0000 UTC]

of course!! ;D

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KaitForest [2012-07-01 18:53:01 +0000 UTC]

butterfly winged lungs
that is a beautiful image

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your-methamphetamine In reply to KaitForest [2012-07-01 18:53:43 +0000 UTC]

Thanks.

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Adrolyn [2012-07-01 18:19:27 +0000 UTC]

I have to say this is one of you best works.

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your-methamphetamine In reply to Adrolyn [2012-07-01 18:32:00 +0000 UTC]

..Wow. Thank you so much.

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roylapost [2012-07-01 16:17:36 +0000 UTC]

I truly enjoy these sojourns into your heart and soul. Bearing witness to the influence of music on your writings.
Truly a rose by any other name does smell as sweet and a butterfly has wings of silken beauty.

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your-methamphetamine In reply to roylapost [2012-07-01 18:02:38 +0000 UTC]

I'm glad someone can make sense of them.
Thank you.

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AnonymousPinkRose [2012-07-01 16:14:56 +0000 UTC]

This is so haunting and emotional, brilliant work x

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your-methamphetamine In reply to AnonymousPinkRose [2012-07-01 18:00:06 +0000 UTC]

Thanks.

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Pyrefly-child [2012-07-01 10:14:44 +0000 UTC]

I agree, this is very beautiful, such a pleasure to read.

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your-methamphetamine In reply to Pyrefly-child [2012-07-01 14:08:47 +0000 UTC]

Thank you.

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