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Yudhaikeledai — Temporal Shift, Chapter 1 Pg 1
Published: 2011-07-22 08:35:50 +0000 UTC; Views: 4600; Favourites: 24; Downloads: 86
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Damn... I don't really anticipate that this thing will be extremely heavy in dialogues...Now here, we focus on the protagonist, Cuddles as he tries to console the for the second time crushed Flippy.
As you can see, this is the signature style of Temporal Shift: It will be narrated in first person by Cuddles himself, giving a unique view point in which what we can see is limited to Cuddles' view point. I chose this so that readers will have a sense of what is happening inside the protagonist's mind.
So here's a little question: Flippy mentioned double threat. Anybody has any implications where this is going? Right answers got a cookie
Temporal Shift (C)
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Comments: 13
A double threat 
BTW, doesn't Cuddles have that white tuft on his head
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Well, nope. Basically, the double means exponential. Something like e^2. His murderous tendencies now has become exponentially dangerous. Why? Next page's gonna reveal that to you.
That detail? I decided to omit it, as later there will also be a character whose detail gonna need a little attention, for assumption purposes
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That's really confusing O.e
I guess if he kills someone, the creature will never come back to life
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I have no idea what he means, but I bet it can't be good.
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I truly get everything.
(:<
Heheh, wow; Flippy's sounding like, no, MORE like you.
Hahahaha, no kidding.
And by the way, cuddle's hand on panel #4 is way off hand.
Hahaha, you know 'off hand'?
Get it?
Meh, I suck at jokes; I prefer actionable humor.
And at panel #3 with the long description thing.
It kinda turns off readers when you put descriptions and junk.
Try to avoid that, or else the readers would totally get off track of the story.
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Yup, got your pun there 
Well, I'm actually a bit... hesitant putting such long description into that panel. But if that's the case, the cost would be that some others wouldn't understand the link. Hehehehe, I know how you can easily pull off assumptions based on vague connections, and so do some others.
Its a dilemma really 
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Yeah, hate puns.
Give me confused thoughts, even though I thought why I even put it in the comment.
Avoiding that, yeah; I do get those times whenever I'm going to put a long description or not.
Normally when I don't have any ideas of drawing a panel and junk.
Meh, mostly it varies in the maker's personality and way or expressing, so it's a pretty common fact.
Hm, normally I'd say after that conversation Flippy and Cuddles had, make a little background flashback on why Flippy even joined Sniffles in that experiment.
Got me confused there, why was Flippy even with Sniffles in the first place?
Damn these things are hard.
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Ah, that thing about Flippy in the lab? Well, after some consideration over which characters to put into that experiment, I guess Flippy's the one who should be put on the flak this time. Not out of subjectivity though, it was a plot driving event. But his connection with the experiment will be revealed both in a short while and also much, much, much later into the story. (cough, cough, damn spoilers)
The next page will kinda wrap up the confusion generated on this page, but in turn will lead to another perplexing event.
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Damn spoilers, but you did that to clear 'em up.
Then go do it INSTEAD OF COMMENTING WITH ME.
Meheh, just do it, I'd like to see the next.
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I have no idea what's double threat...
But anyway, this page seems intense enough in dialogues. Somehow I can feel what Flippy felt from the incident.
Anyway, for the design, it needs a bit more cleaning up. Some ends of the speech bubbles are uncolored, as well with some details on Flippy's face needs to be slightly tidied up. Seems kinda messy to me. O_O
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Ah that's good then, I haven't spoiled really much on this page
Hmmm, probably I did something wrong with the lineart and the colouring? Well, will fix it up for the next page, thank you for telling me
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