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19seconds — american spirits
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Published: 2015-05-04 15:57:00 +0000 UTC; Views: 838; Favourites: 30; Downloads: 0
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Description You shoved your tin of nicotine
and cancer beneath my nose
and told me “smell it,
it tastes like evergreen.”

And as we walked these streets
of gentle suburbia, hardly
touching—but remembering all those
days of adamant high
school love (now unravelled and lost
like a paperclip you unwound
and can’t put back together again)—
I breathed in your smoke
and spice and mint, and bottled
it up like a souvenir.

You kissed me that evening,
even though we both knew you shouldn’t.
Your lips tasted like champagne,
(bitter)sweet and free,
even though all you ever drink is beer.

“My insides are fireproof,”
you said as you lit another
cigarette,
and I pretended not to
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Comments: 27

shep4life [2015-07-31 04:27:37 +0000 UTC]

Really well written

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UrsulaMS [2015-07-10 23:34:23 +0000 UTC]

I can't say how much I loved this... the title and the visual play with the last word were only part of the reason. Your wordplay is incredible! It was hard for me to pick a favorite verse.

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19seconds In reply to UrsulaMS [2015-07-24 00:25:02 +0000 UTC]

Thank you so much! I'm glad you enjoyed it.

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UrsulaMS In reply to 19seconds [2015-07-26 02:59:57 +0000 UTC]

Psh, I'm glad you wrote it! Hahaha, you're welcome.

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Braxton-T-Rutledge [2015-06-19 13:28:56 +0000 UTC]

I really like this. The drawing out of the word 'mind' seems less effective than a line break and the word mind.

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19seconds In reply to Braxton-T-Rutledge [2015-07-24 00:25:23 +0000 UTC]

Thank you!

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Braxton-T-Rutledge In reply to 19seconds [2015-07-24 00:57:05 +0000 UTC]

No problem

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Phi921 [2015-05-21 21:27:28 +0000 UTC]

Exquisite, masterful, the spirit of America captured in one song. Llama, favorite, watch - instantly. I'm looking forward to more of your poetry.

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19seconds In reply to Phi921 [2015-05-21 21:39:45 +0000 UTC]

thank you so much! i'm glad you enjoyed it. (:

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DynamiteHearts [2015-05-10 20:03:09 +0000 UTC]

*gasp*
Oh this is so wonderful ♥ one of the best pieces from the contest, for sure c: good luck!

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19seconds In reply to DynamiteHearts [2015-05-11 16:28:31 +0000 UTC]

Thank you! (:

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EmpyreanDreamer [2015-05-10 02:15:20 +0000 UTC]

this is beautiful. love every word!

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19seconds In reply to EmpyreanDreamer [2015-05-10 02:16:28 +0000 UTC]

Thanks so much! (:

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skullhips [2015-05-09 01:31:28 +0000 UTC]

I love this

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19seconds In reply to skullhips [2015-05-10 01:15:20 +0000 UTC]

Thank you, I'm glad you like it (:

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skullhips In reply to 19seconds [2015-05-10 02:21:13 +0000 UTC]

You're welcome c:

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ilyilaice [2015-05-07 18:21:13 +0000 UTC]

i love how you engaged the senses. well done.

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19seconds In reply to ilyilaice [2015-05-10 01:15:28 +0000 UTC]

Thanks so much

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FridgePoetProject [2015-05-07 06:23:47 +0000 UTC]

W o w -- this is absolutely gorgeous!  Every little piece if it comes vividly to life.  Beautiful work!!  

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19seconds In reply to FridgePoetProject [2015-05-07 14:36:55 +0000 UTC]

Thank you so much! I'm glad you enjoyed it. (:

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Livelovemaria [2015-05-05 17:25:15 +0000 UTC]

This is wonderful

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19seconds In reply to Livelovemaria [2015-05-05 18:21:58 +0000 UTC]

Thank you

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shep4life [2015-05-05 05:02:03 +0000 UTC]

 (now unravelled and lost
like a paperclip you unwound 
and can’t put back together again)

Love this

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19seconds In reply to shep4life [2015-05-05 05:07:50 +0000 UTC]

Thank you! It's nice to hear that, as that's actually the one part of the poem I was unsure about. 

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shep4life In reply to 19seconds [2015-05-06 13:52:39 +0000 UTC]

Cool

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DailyLitRecognition [2015-05-05 04:16:56 +0000 UTC]

Your wonderful literary work has been chosen to be featured by DLR (Daily Literature Recognition) in a news article that can be found here . Be sure to check out the other artists featured and show your support by ing the News Article.

Keep writing and keep creating.

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19seconds In reply to DailyLitRecognition [2015-05-05 04:59:08 +0000 UTC]

Thank you so much! 

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