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Published: 2008-02-27 20:25:23 +0000 UTC; Views: 557; Favourites: 5; Downloads: 15
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And I call outOut to this stone hallway
And I cry to the ceiling I can barely discern
And all I ever hear
Is a recurring echo
Echo of my cries, my own desperation
An echo rebounding from the concrete and stone
Unforgiving
Relentless
Not to be moved
By mere emotions
And I cry
To these unmoving walls
That will never react.
~ dedicated to the crying girl at the railway station
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Comments: 23
I love it. It doesn't fool around with unnescesary words, just gets straight to the point. Very deep, raw emotion. Very good.
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wow - thanks a lot!
and you even faved it!
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No problem. You deserve it and I love to help a fellow poet out.
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I really love it! The emotion really comes through.
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You're welcome! ^^
It's a really nice piece of writing
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I think it is very clever in it's understated simplicity. I really like it 1R. Like Colleen, it makes me think of a prisoner, although to me just a normal prisoner, not one in an asylum. I really think it is beautifully written. Very clever.
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thanks.
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wow.... i like it!!!!!!!!!!! um, i hope you don't mind, but i've kinda started writing a reply...
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Sie wollte sich aus diesem Wahnsinn durch die Schreie retten.
Und dennoch verhallten all ihre Töne ohne jemals gehört zu werden.
Schreib öfters, du schreibst schön. (-:
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... du schreibst aber schöner.
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Aber nicht in einer Fremdsprache ,D *knuff*
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ist für mich ja keine fremdsprache. *knuff zurück*
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Well I think it's well written...though I probably got a different image than you intended. I saw a prisoner in an old mental asylum, suffering, screaming out for help to deaf ears. It definitely paints a strong image so I rate it as quite good. And it's not 'yet another overdone lost love/depression poem'. I do get tired of those.
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hmm. you're right. it does sound like a prison. crap. I just hated the way a person can sit in a hall full of people and nobody reacts to her sorrow, just walk past. At least I sat down and offered her chocolate... was the least I could do really, since I suck at consoling people or anything.
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*hugs* ich hoffe es geht dir besser
ich kenne das gefuehl zu gut
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h-hey! das ist nicht über mich! uhm... uhm... naja.
danke.
moment... what the crap? seit wann watchst du mich denn?!?
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