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Ripper~All this World is Hell,
and all the Men and Women
merely Demons~
He Looked and watched as she passed. With her hair down and hips swaying East to West. Once a Virgin, Pure and White, now a vile Portrait of Sin and Wickedness.
Once her Gaze met his, all Hope was lost to the Beast. She looked into his eyes, and saw nothing, he was sure. But hers told a story. A solitary Tale that defined the way of the world in this day; this God Forsaken time.
He Lured her into his grace with sweet, luxurious fruits and Drinks named for Beautiful Queens of far way lands.
Her Eyes were bright Green, like Envy; like Greed; like Poison. Like the poisonous winged lady that possessed him this very Night. And her skin was a rosy Pink. Oh, curse the mind and Damn the imagination. That which torment him with brutal fantasies. How would it feel to let that pale flesh stroke along his Blade?
One swift gesture and the deed was done. The Knife was kindled in the Blood of this whore, as she was laid to Rest
He looked down on her lifeless body, the Blood like Gossamer, and he felt a wave of Righteousness lap over him. Then, it turned quickly to Rage and drowned him from within. Hatred. This Blade, this Hellish Companion was his ruler, and he was powerless against it
He knew what he was. He was much like this woman. A whore and a slave to circumstance. The Hatred boiled inside him, but the Devil's thirst had not been quenched, so he lived on with an insatiable Lust for the kill.
Still, somehow, with great glee and a satanic essence in his voice, he spoke to her, "Good night sweet Lady. May flight of Devils wing you to your Rest?" And offered a smile for our recently departed Maiden.
As the skies turned red, like the Blood on her dress, and his Eyes faded from a Malicious Black back to a soft Blue, he looked into the Darkness wishful that he might see more than the repulsive spectrum his world had become, and hopeful for a day with Gladness to see another.
He searched the very depths of his Soul for the words that might comfort him, but there was nothing. Nothing but the Cruel truth.
"May God have mercy on my Soul. For I am in Hell."
And so it was, that the last words on his lips were of sorrow and sadness with no Hope of ever receiving the glory of Heaven.
Good Night Sweet Prince.
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Comments: 50
Jakethedogluver [2013-03-27 00:50:48 +0000 UTC]
I read this aloud and it has a great flow to it. Very well put together.
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Psycho-wolf131 [2012-12-16 02:54:16 +0000 UTC]
I got a great visual. The word choice you used was magnificent, and your sentences flowed together.
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StarsongVinry [2012-10-02 21:21:11 +0000 UTC]
This put a very good picture in my head. This is beautifully written. I love it.
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MyChemicalRomance863 [2012-02-15 23:51:38 +0000 UTC]
That actually made my head spin. It was Brilliant.
I Love Jack the Ripper myself, and what I would give to actually be able to write a piece like that!!
Well Done!
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AClockworkBlue In reply to MyChemicalRomance863 [2012-02-19 01:42:10 +0000 UTC]
Awww thank you :~)
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AppleCinnamonBuns [2011-11-23 04:24:22 +0000 UTC]
Thats beautiful, I have always been interested in Jack the Ripper, I still want to know who he truly is.
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SusanKay13 [2010-11-28 07:45:20 +0000 UTC]
This really gives a new depth and perspective to Jack the Ripper that I never thought about. Truly brilliant.
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Literary-Visionaries [2010-09-04 02:22:23 +0000 UTC]
Your fantastic work has been selected for feature in our Weekly Literature Feature by a member of the staff.
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AClockworkBlue In reply to Literary-Visionaries [2010-09-04 04:03:39 +0000 UTC]
Thank you! I'm flattered
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BlackwingRose [2010-09-03 06:22:52 +0000 UTC]
Absolutely wonderful. I've always been fascinated by Jack the Ripper (morbid, I know), and this is by far one of the best pieces of work I've seen on the subject — it really gave me shivers. :3
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pomohippie7 [2010-08-09 22:05:07 +0000 UTC]
It's a neat you incorperated regret into your version of Jack. I've never seen that before.
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AzeeraTheNinja [2010-08-09 15:26:06 +0000 UTC]
Wow I really like this! The only problem with it is that random words you have here are captilized, but besides that, great job! ^^
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AlecWolfe [2010-08-09 12:03:57 +0000 UTC]
This is very interesting... I quite like the way it is written and it certainly portrays the guy in a rather different way. Great work.
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PeacefulSoul [2010-08-06 01:58:03 +0000 UTC]
Although this was a most fantastic read and has its poetic elements, I felt this sounded more like prose or prosetry than it did poetry for some reason.
I don't feel that I should add it to the Group, as I don't exactly see it fitting for it, however, it definately deserves a Fave from me, and so I have added it.
Keep up your writing!
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AClockworkBlue In reply to PeacefulSoul [2010-08-06 02:33:34 +0000 UTC]
I appriciate it greatly :~)Thank you for considering it
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Freedomlastsforever [2010-07-30 17:45:44 +0000 UTC]
I love Jack the Ripper, this is AMAZING! Serial killers are so cool good work!
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lilnutta10 [2010-07-30 15:04:34 +0000 UTC]
Brilliant piece
Love the emotion of the piece
Great use of the structure and punctuation to control the rythm
Have a wonderful day
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PB-ZeppelinFan [2010-07-30 05:12:21 +0000 UTC]
I enjoy the seemingly random capitalization. It makes Rage and other feelings seem more then they are; it makes them seem alive.
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mspadfoot2 [2010-07-30 02:07:36 +0000 UTC]
This is incredibly interesting. I adore the way you worded everything. Rather than just writing it as a normal horror story, I think you sort of had an old-fashioned language thing going on there, and I liked it a lot. It really fit the subject matter, made me think of the time period in which Jack the Ripper lived and killed. Just, the way you worded everything was wonderful.
I also really like that you wrote it from his point of view. It's an interesting point of view, one that would be extremely difficult to pull of realistically and one that few would dare try and conquer. I think you accomplished it well. Kudos. Really.
One thing that sort of bugs me is that you capitalize certain words. I know this is a stylistic choice, and it does lend itself to the time period you are trying to write from, but it just bugs me. It's a bit of a nitpick. I think it would be much more effective if you used it more selectively.
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AClockworkBlue In reply to mspadfoot2 [2010-07-30 02:25:23 +0000 UTC]
Thank you so much :~) And I know I have a serious problem with capitalizing words when i write. I don't know why I just feel the need to capitalize words that seem important or special in my head. I'll work on that lol
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NeverLosingHope [2010-07-30 01:33:45 +0000 UTC]
Very good. As I was reading it I did have an image of Jack the Ripper even though the title hinted at it. Glad to see I was right. Hope to see some more work by you.
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AClockworkBlue In reply to NeverLosingHope [2010-07-30 02:26:48 +0000 UTC]
I do plan to post a few more. This and "Blood Soaked diary" are my favourites :~)
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NeverLosingHope In reply to AClockworkBlue [2010-07-30 02:38:09 +0000 UTC]
Can't wait then. Always good to read what other great minds can think up.
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AClockworkBlue In reply to NeverLosingHope [2010-07-30 03:22:01 +0000 UTC]
Here's a new one [link] Hope you like it
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FallenUmbrella [2010-07-30 00:51:47 +0000 UTC]
This is wonderful! I love how you described everything is such a dark tone that I can imagine what Hell must be like. There is just something about this that stands out from the rest of the horror stories, I guess. With your word choice and interesting perspective of Ripper, it really does stand out.
There's nothing I can complain for this, I guess I really enjoyed reading it
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AClockworkBlue In reply to FallenUmbrella [2010-07-30 00:57:05 +0000 UTC]
Ahh, I feel so good reading these comments. Thank you so much. I'm glad you like it
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Me-and-Missy [2010-07-30 00:21:58 +0000 UTC]
I had tears in my eyes!! I love this so much! But I was pictureing a twisted tale of Beauty and the Beast. The beautyful whore falls into dispare and sorrow while the beast of a man sucked on it like was a sucker. This is so going on my favs!!!
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AClockworkBlue In reply to Me-and-Missy [2010-07-30 01:02:49 +0000 UTC]
I'm so happy my work was able to conjure up such feelings for you. I'm flattered :~)
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Me-and-Missy In reply to AClockworkBlue [2010-07-30 01:27:35 +0000 UTC]
You should be!!! You made me think and that's somethink I don't do that often (LOL Iam a air head). Your awesome for this piece amazing art work!! Keep it up!
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QueenOftheNight341 [2010-07-29 22:17:07 +0000 UTC]
I have always been interested in Jack the Ripper. I watch all the documentaries regarding the murders. This was such an interesting perspective, I love it!
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AClockworkBlue In reply to QueenOftheNight341 [2010-07-30 01:03:31 +0000 UTC]
Thank you so much
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QueenOftheNight341 In reply to AClockworkBlue [2010-07-30 03:46:16 +0000 UTC]
You are very welcome!
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Teale-SugarCookie [2010-07-29 19:26:58 +0000 UTC]
Ohhhh interesting makes me wanna look up Jack the Ripper
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