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Alex-namn — Alex's Ruby Nuzlocke Part 50
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Published: 2016-11-22 23:34:33 +0000 UTC; Views: 8258; Favourites: 86; Downloads: 0
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Well... I hope I didn't make you too depressing from this page...
The first half of this part was actually planned on be one the previously part, but it would just destroyed the lovely moment there...
Because of the miserable I put you through in this part I can at least say what the next part will be about some backstories from Mark
So little about this part, Oh what I hate water!!! and I have had so much in the way, like being sick and went to Norway...And much technology problems! So this took a little time to finish!
But now it's here and I hope you enjoy... ehh... I mean... it's my 50th part... Yay!!!
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especially when you compared with last part! :C
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WHAT, WAIT! HUH??? HUH?? CUTEY-DEAD?,WAIT ALEX-MAGMA! MARK,SISTER WOUNDED HIM??? WHAT, SEA!!!!????
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and don't forget that the relationship between Erik and Mark starting to get somewhere...
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so much going on
HOLY MOLY NOOOO cutey ;_; RIP
;_;
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Can I do genocide on Magma? Pretty please?
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Of corse you can, but a tip is to just take out the Queen bee of them!
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Hmm... now that I think about it... there's something I don't like too much about this page, but I feel that it can help you somehow.
Do you want to hear my critique?
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It's always helpfull with some critique. What are you thinking of?
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It's about the whole "how" Mark has gotten captured in this scene, I feel that it could have been done... a little bit better.
To sum up the page:
We have Mark, Alex and Courtney (is that the bad girl's name?). After Cutey's death, Mark and Alex get out of the magma base... to find out that Courtney has followed them.
Now, the thing is, Courtney faces Alex and Mark and states "her pokemon are too strong", but then finds out that the way to lure Alex into magma is by using Mark.
As for now it's alright.
Now, the problem:
She provokes Mark so he gets near her so she can knock him out... this seems a bit off knowing that Alex and her pokemon already have the advantage. I mean, I am sure that at the moment they saw Mark getting close it would have been more believable that the pokemon tried to stop Mark. Or that at the moment that Mark had gotten hit, all the pokemon had done something (maybe surround Courtney and prevent her to escape?) instead of sit there and "be sad" at the stuff that is going on.
I am not saying that it's a plothole or that your comic is doomed from this point. I mean, what matters the most about this page is Cutey's death and Mark's kidnapping. But I feel that Mark's kidnapping could have been done a bit better.
I hope I have expressed myself well.
Btw, excuse any mistakes: english is not my first language.
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Oh I actually didn't thought about that! I could have done something with Alex pokemon at least trying to do something.
I'm usually do like the pokemon suddenly aren't around because it's so annoying to draw everyone over and over, but I will defently start to think of when I do that so it not look like they don't do anything!
Thank you for the critique, it's really helpfull!!!~
(and english isn't my first language either, so I can also make mistakes too sometimes) >;3
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I am glad to help. Thanks for listening!
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...should I ask for that pokedoll back?
When I get my hands on Courtney, I will break her!
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I don't think no one would go back to get it... I'm sorry it's lost now.
please do!
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Ahhh!.... Cutey don't leve us...
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(Holy shit this chapter is dark, poor cutey, poor Mark)
Gaio: okay Freight Train just get your inappropriate joke over with
Freight train: when I find Courtney I'll crush her skull into dust
Angel: whoa Freight Train where did that come from? what happened to the guy that earlier today fought a hobo for a twinkie in the garbage
Freight Train:he died the moment that bitch knifed cutie
Gaio: okay we understand your anger mate just control yourself
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Everyone would be really glad if he did that to Courtney...!
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Agreed lord knows Freight Train can dish out one hell of a beating as well as take one
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cutey noooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo *10 år senare* ooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo!!! whyyyyyyyyy??? why???? why? why?
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Varför skulle min lilla bebis dö sådär... Why...?
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jag vet inte varför????? men hon var ju bäst. 
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så varför? kan någon berätta det, varför just hon?
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Cutey why did you died
And is alex able to save mark
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So hard questions... Not easy to answer...
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Really dark. But somehow i really enjoyed this page xD Great job
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I'm glad you do~ it can't be easy to do it I think
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guess who that charater was I put in, I know you put in Sadness.
Also how did Cutie actually die in-game, to a crit?
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I don't know, aren't so good with anime...
this is my big problem, I played this Nuzlocke three years ago and I did REALLY terrible notes of that!!! really, really bad!!!!
so I don't who, how or not even where (well I know which part, like which town or route, but it's not much help)... But I will absolutely not cancel my comic because of that!
But I will do much better in my next Nuzlocke!
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That icon was Azusa Nakano, google it and you'll know
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I can like nothing about Anime...
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I really hope that she will be ok 💕. Mark will be ok 💕. Poor Cutie ❤️.
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Yes now we can only wish that it will end okey for them... only wish... v_v
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My heart.....* I clasp onto my chest *.....Alex, Why do you do this to us?
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