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AlexandeNight — Bleeding Time (The Mists)

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Published: 2019-02-28 04:17:28 +0000 UTC; Views: 2026; Favourites: 59; Downloads: 4
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Description Been working on this for a long time, but it is finally done! My program crashed on me once and I lost all of the background work I'd done:'D But that was okay, I was able to go back and do it better the second time round.  This was from a screen in my story "The Mists".  I was going to draw it how it was in the story, but decided against it... idk why

Comments, Question or Critiques are greatly appreciated ^^
Characters and Story (c) AlexandeNight 

Enjoy the story excerpt.  

Bleeding Time:
Razen and Alistar made their way across the emerald green grounds dotted with drainage landscaping, down to the gate.  The guards gave the pair a strange look, but once Alistar stated their purpose for entering the Mists, the guards accepted it without question.  As soon as they passed through the gates, the Mists pressed in, smothering them in thick miasma.  

It would appear being an advanced student has its advantages, Razen mused, looking over at the blond man.  There was a part of him that was having trouble accepting recent events; he was still fuzzy on the details, but it appeared that they were now dating, what was more, the slayer was now helping him bleed his magic.  It was all too surreal.

"Where do you do this?" asked Alistar looking about the foggy landscape.  

"Farther away from the wall-" Razen grunted, the magic build up was getting hard to manage.  He rubbed his chest, trying to ease the pain, and made his unsteady way farther into the Mists.  "Here." he said coming to a suitable spot, a small clearing with a large boulder at its center.  "You should take cover, in case something goes wrong."

"Is that Likely?"

The black haired youth shrugged, "I'd rather not test it if you know what I mean."

"Can I watch though?"

"Only if you can see from-" he scanned the area, eyes clapping on the boulder "from right there!  Hide behind that and don't do anything stupid."  

Alistar did as he was told, and watched Razen from a safe vantage point, scarcely believing what was happening.  He had been accepted by Razen.  Up to a few hours ago, he'd wondered if Razen would ever speak to him again.  And now he was watching, watching as he knelt on the earth, as he planted his hands on the ground and watching as the sparks started to fly.  A small plant shot up between Razen's clawed fingers, growing taller, fuller, sprouting more and more shoots until leaves started to unfurl.  The buds burst open with all the vigor of Tracy's fireworks.  With a faint cry, Razen broke the connection, falling back on the earth exhausted.  

"You okay?" Alistar asked peeking out from behind the boulder.  

"Yeah, it seemed to go better than it has in the past."  he stood brushing himself off.  "You can come out now." he stooped and cut one of the flowers, trimming away the thorns with a talloned thumb.  "For you."  he blushed, holding the rose out to Alistar.  

The Slayer took it stunned, "That was incredible!" and he meant it.  The rose was a fine specimen, with a delicate aroma.  The yellow petals gave way to red tips.  He normally didn't notice such things, but now that he was open to it- he couldn't stop thinking about it- it was beautiful- So this is magic he thought, incredible. 

Razen shrugged, embarrassed "it was just something that I've been practicing.  Lilly mentioned the plants seemed to like me..."

The youth rose to is feet, seeming to wilt a little.  "You sure you're alright?" Alistar asked, bracing him.  

He nodded, "I'm just a bit tired- bleeding can really take it out of you-"


Hope you enjoy ^^
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Comments: 31

Antika7 [2019-05-11 08:37:46 +0000 UTC]

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A wonderful story.
Comic and writing transmit the feeling of something feared or forbidden happening.
I would guess your characters live in a world where many prejudices and fear against magic exist and that some supernaturals as Razen are unable not to use their magic, distancing themselves from the rest of society? Maybe magic users are even registered and controlled, based on the numbered collar Razen is wearing.
Razen seems to be aware of the fact that his magic is seen as something wrong as he looks afraid of hurting his boyfriend with it. Especially him cutting off the thorns of the rose, for me shows his fear that his magic may be able too hurt someone and his wish to protect Alistar.

The anatomy and expression of the characters are done very well, the supernatural detail (fangs, ears, and claws fit right in).
The poses and facial expression, especially the eyes, transmit intense feelings.

Whereas the characters and foreground are nicely detailed and accurate, the background looks slightly off considering the overall detailed style of the comic. For me, the missing ground in the panels two to four interrupts the style, especially as the bases of some trees float in the mist. Even in a misty surrounding, I would have expected to either see the ground as detailed as the tree bases standing on it or see the tree base as blurry as the ground.

All in all a wonderful story and comic with complex characters.

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AlexandeNight In reply to Antika7 [2019-05-12 15:27:12 +0000 UTC]

Thank you once again for the in depth critique! 

I'm glad that the forbidden quality does come across in the piece.  Indeed humans of this world are incredibly predigest against anyone who has magic.  The bulk of the story takes place in a post-apocalyptic world overrun by The Mists (a toxic cursed miasma that has a nasty habit of corrupting and killing humans).  The Slayers Academy (the remnants of human society that have banded together to combat the dangers of the Mists) will do anything they can to preserve human kind.  They took in Razen and his friend Lilly, believing them to be human.  The only one who knows about the truth the Slayer, Alistar Stirling (and he even tried to kill them when he first found out...it wasn't pretty XD).  But Razen does have to bleed his magic from time to time (not doing so can make him quite ill, and make the magic extremely volatile).  So there he is, a young demon-ish man bleeding his magic in front of a Slayer for the first time.  And yeah, he is afraid of hurting Alistar, afraid of losing control, and also afraid of rejection.  Even though Alistar knew about this part of Razen, he had tried to shield him from it, believing that it was his problem alone.  But Alistar doesn't want to be protected, he wants to be included.  

I'm glad to hear that the anatomy and posing worked overall, it does seem a bit stiff in some areas, but I guess that will become smoother with practices xD. 

Yes, I was wondering about that.  I was trying to put in in the style of some of the web-comics I've seen online; that and I kind of pushed my drawing programs to the limit with this pic xD (it kept crashing when I fiddled with the background).  I do see what you mean about defining the ground.  I'll try to go back in and see what I can do.  

Thank you again for the in-depth critique and the honesty, it is really useful!   

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RiverStyxofHell [2019-03-01 17:51:20 +0000 UTC]

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Absolutely beautiful. I love it so much! The way the boys, (I didn’t really read the description) acted around each other was beautiful. It almost made me tear up. They looked like they could be lovers if they chose to be. The way you made the flower grow was absolutely fabulous. How the black haired boy looked shocked and then pleased with himself is something that I wish I could witness if it were real. Regardless to whatever other people think of the work of art, I thought it was amazing. Once again, absolutely beautiful artwork. Thanks for making this amazing art piece.

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POLISHhedgieFanGirl [2019-05-22 21:14:25 +0000 UTC]

wait ... i actually had no idea these two previous drawing  were part of this comic thingie XD oh well

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AlexandeNight In reply to POLISHhedgieFanGirl [2019-06-02 03:59:24 +0000 UTC]

XD yep, it was taking a long time to complete, so I released some of my favorite panels while the rest of the thing was being put together 

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POLISHhedgieFanGirl In reply to AlexandeNight [2019-06-30 10:49:37 +0000 UTC]

i see! that's legit :3

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AlexandeNight In reply to POLISHhedgieFanGirl [2019-07-25 06:16:05 +0000 UTC]

XD yeah

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ComradeAcerbus [2019-05-15 00:46:54 +0000 UTC]

Super pretty! I really like the soft atmosphere; you delivered the mood of the scene perfectly; solemn, but not too sad, sweet, but not to a sickening degree. I'd also like to mention the body language between the two. Eye contact and physical contact are both very important with men, and I like that its portrayed, though it is a tad too much. Now, I'm not familiar with these dudes (I am new to the group ), so take that with a grain of salt. 

The anatomy is also accurate, but still has a sense of style to it that is hard to work with. Overall, nice job! I really like the artwork!

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AlexandeNight In reply to ComradeAcerbus [2019-05-18 03:47:15 +0000 UTC]

Thank you for the feedback! ^^
XD yeah, I was trying to walk the line between sickeningly sweet hallmark card and genuine tender moment.  While at the same time just showing off different aspects of Razen's demon form.  He wasn't born a demon, he was made; and if he doesn't bleed his magic when he needs to, it has a way of eating away at his insides and corrupting his appearance.  Just the small things, the claws, the fangs, exaggerated slit pupils, etc...  It's incredibly painful and exhausting to deal with.
This isn't what you'd normally expect from one of their interactions (it's really touchy feelly, not Razen's strong spot).  It was a break through moment though.  It was the first time that Razen really let Alistar in on this part of his life.  It was something that he was nervous about, something that he truly expected Alistar (despite knowing what Razen was) would flat out reject him.  When that didn't happen, it was overwhelming.  Basically all Razen wants to do now is nap XD 
I look forward to learning more about your characters as well.  

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ComradeAcerbus In reply to AlexandeNight [2019-05-18 09:52:23 +0000 UTC]

I’m glad you achieved your desired effect. Trying to get the solemn but sweet thingimijig is a challenge for myself in writing. Gotta get it just right!

And no probs about the feedback. Everyone needs it!

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rainbow000pegasus [2019-03-03 09:40:08 +0000 UTC]

It's so sweet! The pacing is really well done, as well as the images and effects!

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AlexandeNight In reply to rainbow000pegasus [2019-03-03 17:25:06 +0000 UTC]

Thank you!  I'm glad to hear it ^^
I've been trying to expirntment with pacing and using my programs to get the job done (used two different programs to draw this out)

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rainbow000pegasus In reply to AlexandeNight [2019-03-04 09:16:36 +0000 UTC]

You're welcome!
I sometimes alternate between programs myself! Sometimes it's needed but it's such a hassle-

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AlexandeNight In reply to rainbow000pegasus [2019-03-05 20:48:15 +0000 UTC]

Aie, that it is XD
My normal program is an app, so it has limited canvas size, the other one is on my little computer, the program itself is more comprehensive, but the computer is a little limited XD 

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rainbow000pegasus In reply to AlexandeNight [2019-03-11 22:48:11 +0000 UTC]

Ah, I see. If only sharing functions was possible!

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AlexandeNight In reply to rainbow000pegasus [2019-03-15 19:02:44 +0000 UTC]

XD Yeah, that would be great!

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KanahaniART [2019-03-01 15:58:41 +0000 UTC]

Love the slow progression of the hug, super cute and heartwarming <3

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AlexandeNight In reply to KanahaniART [2019-03-03 17:05:00 +0000 UTC]

Thanks!  I'm glad you think so ^^
It's not something that I've done a lot of so I'm glad that it worked out ^^  Part of it was guilty pleasure of retracting the claws XD 

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KanahaniART In reply to AlexandeNight [2019-03-03 18:08:16 +0000 UTC]

Oh yeah, didn't notice the claws before. Really nice detail!

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AlexandeNight In reply to KanahaniART [2019-03-05 20:48:30 +0000 UTC]

Haha, thanks >///<

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Anime--Bunny [2019-02-28 21:06:35 +0000 UTC]

very beautiful comic

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AlexandeNight In reply to Anime--Bunny [2019-03-01 21:33:27 +0000 UTC]

Thank you kindly!  I'm glad you like it ^^

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Anime--Bunny In reply to AlexandeNight [2019-03-02 01:01:31 +0000 UTC]

you're welcome

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AlexandeNight In reply to Anime--Bunny [2019-03-03 17:29:09 +0000 UTC]

^^

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Anime--Bunny In reply to AlexandeNight [2019-03-04 04:42:06 +0000 UTC]

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Dallyvanters [2019-02-28 19:07:26 +0000 UTC]

Awwwwww this is even cuteeeer <333
thanks for referring me to it ;D 

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AlexandeNight In reply to Dallyvanters [2019-03-01 21:33:13 +0000 UTC]

Thank you kindly for taking the time to check it out!  It is appreciated -^^-

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FujeeB13 [2019-02-28 15:36:15 +0000 UTC]

This is so beautiful!

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AlexandeNight In reply to FujeeB13 [2019-02-28 15:52:14 +0000 UTC]

Thank you kindly, I'm glad you think so ^^
I came across the scene and just had to draw it out XD 

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DarkYnx98 [2019-02-28 08:02:36 +0000 UTC]

So adorable 💙

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AlexandeNight In reply to DarkYnx98 [2019-02-28 15:50:45 +0000 UTC]

Thank you kindly, 
I'm glad you like it ^^

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