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AlexTGFan — My first TG caption
Published: 2012-07-17 10:01:37 +0000 UTC; Views: 31884; Favourites: 298; Downloads: 729
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Hello please comment this is my first(might be the last)TG caption thing enjoy
One more thing i do not own the image and i didn't make it
I found it in a folder so i don't know who created it sorry Dx
There are some words misspelled but I corrected them
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pretty good for a first caption keep it up
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Good for a first. My advice is to try more ways of connecting your sentences; they seem to much like statements.
You have the right amount of detail, though in some cases you could be a little more explicit, that is if you weren't doing it for effect; right now the sentences don't really convey any emotion or feeling. 'She was so shocked she fainted' shows this; you've just gone ahead and told us that she's shocked rather than making an attempt to convey it without stating it.
Now, if you weren't bothered with reading all of that, then: It's great for a first. I hope to see more.
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Very good for your first time only problem was most of the there's should have been thier other that that this was great
i also loved the idea of the picture under the text so you see the outcome after you read the story
hope to see more
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wow i mean their i can't spell for the life of me
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Thank you.
But now i feel dumb D:lol
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its ok i think i failed more i misspelled their where you only used the wrong word s you had no spelling errors
that i know of like i said i can't spell
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Lol I noticed you misspelled their right before you said that xD
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Lovely work but put more detail.
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