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ARTnoob — Prince Of One Night Stands
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Published: 2008-09-03 02:28:30 +0000 UTC; Views: 155; Favourites: 2; Downloads: 0
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I'm the prince of one night standsSo bend over and balance with your hands
This is the last time I'll call you babe
So you better start screaming my name
Let's say goodbye to the party time
I'm not saying I want you to be mine
You're another notch on my bedpost
For right now you're the one I want to fuck most
I should've told you from the start
I only want to make my mark
Scratch your back while you scratch mine
Let's keep this down to a damn good time
I want what everyone does to fool around
With you and the other girls in this town
It's not that I'm a heartless jerk
I just wanna get to work
So let's fuck this time
Pant and moan
Say goodbye in the morning
And go back to alone
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Comments: 16
I like this. The rhyme scheme bugs me a little bit, and CompulsiveVeVerbalist is right about the rhythm. I think irregular rhythm is good sometimes though. It's cruel and sadistic it works. The last stanza is the best.
(The dark side is certainly an interesting place to visit, I'll let mine out sometime.)
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Well thank you.
And yeah, the whole rhyming thing gets me in trouble sometimes, lol.
It works as a screamo song though.
Which is kind of the intent.
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You're welcome.
In trouble with me especially. If I ever seen you on the street I'll start yelling at you about rhymes.
Screamo makes me not happy.
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I'm serious, I'll do it.
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this is VERY good. i dont see why it cant be an element of you either, or me, or anyone, iv wanted this at times for sure. I love how raw it is, it feels very honest. The rhythm is a touch out.. as i read it anyhow, which i think is the only thing which subtracts from it a touch, as the rhythm would add to the grinding/fucking/etc. However, that said, i like how it is a touch out of place, as this is not intending to reflect you, so therefore adds to that. If you see my meaning. Some really superb imagery, some of the sentences you have put together are SO powerful.. very well done.
Above all. Gosh this is good.. more more more i cry! xx
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Well thank you.
I appreciate your criticism.
I always do.
And yeah... I'd be lieing if I said to a minor degree I don't mean any of it...
but yeah.
Thanks nonetheless.
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love it haha, most guys do think of this and i hate when they pretend they don't, i'd rather hear the truth that they just wanna fuck then to be led on haha.
i dunno guess im weird too haha.
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Haha, yeah.
I strive to be as far from the normal "male" tag.
Thanks also.
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This made me smile. GUESS I'M SUPER WEIRD.
But no. I like this. A lot. Of course it's different than what you usually do, but still your style, just a new perspective or narrator.
Amazing piece.
<3
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Haha, I guess I'm glad I decided to post it.
lol
Thank you by the way.
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