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It was all distortion, as it usually was. But there I stood taking photos with my digital camera, in this place; a place that seemed familiar, but foreign at the same time. There was moss covering the cinder blocks and vines growing up the dilapidated walls of this once-used building, with sunlight peeking through the cracks in the ceiling. But this light was soft, almost like it was diffused through the fog after a rain storm.As I looked over towards the door, my best friend happened to be walking in. She smiled at me, happy to see me, as she often was. But there was something different about this smile. It was a smile I hadn’t seen from her before. Then I realized why. Following not too far behind her was the love of my life; the one that had broken my heart, and for whom my body still ached. Her hair was long, and she wore that gray Led Zeppelin shirt that she’d had for years. Seeing her there gave me a pit in my stomach; an uneasiness that I feared would forever follow me.
My legs went weak, and I fell to my knees. Slowly, my love walked toward me and knelt beside me, raising her right hand to my face, and tilting my head up until my gaze met hers. We stared deep into each other’s eyes for what seemed like an eternity, but what was in reality, probably only a few seconds. She moved her lips in close to my ear.
“I love you.” She whispered, and then once again looked me in the eyes. I must’ve been stammering. I couldn’t choose the words to say.
After a moment of silence, all I managed to utter was “But, why?”
Truth be told, I didn’t care why. Before she could muster an answer, I simply said “I love you, too.”
She smiled. And I could feel the warmth of happiness overcome me. It was a feeling I hadn’t felt in months. It was magnificent. All of the sudden, the world again seemed like a beautiful place.
And then, I woke up.
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Comments: 15
CrypticWritings [2009-09-19 16:27:56 +0000 UTC]
dreams like this are the best and the worst. especially when they're believable.
you wrote this well, love.
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AShoreNeverReached In reply to CrypticWritings [2009-09-19 17:11:23 +0000 UTC]
tell me about it...
thank you lovey
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wakeyjakeyeggsnbakey [2009-09-19 04:37:16 +0000 UTC]
love it!
i told you everything i thought of it in person, lol, but comments are nice!
p.s. some dreams that let us see exactly what we want are worse than any nightmare ever could be.
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AShoreNeverReached In reply to wakeyjakeyeggsnbakey [2009-09-19 17:12:25 +0000 UTC]
precisely. cause then you wake up and BAM gone.
...and sometimes you read the newspaper, and ten years later BAM -herpes.
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dragon-kazooie In reply to AShoreNeverReached [2010-01-14 03:25:05 +0000 UTC]
yeah, screw those dreams. >_>
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Drocan [2009-09-18 02:27:14 +0000 UTC]
The concept of describing something and then waking to discover it was all a dream has been done on several occasions.
It's not a problem to do it, but perhaps there is a more creative way to end it. And by that I mean phrase the ending in in a slightly less simple and abrupt manner.
I get the contrast. Everything is so soft, until the very sharp, harsh ending. But I still think you could play with it a tad.
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AShoreNeverReached In reply to Drocan [2009-09-18 23:45:10 +0000 UTC]
i see what you mean, except i wanted it to be told how i experienced it. i think the reason it's done this was so often, is b/c there's no other way to express it, except in the literal sense.
thanks for the input though.
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Drocan In reply to AShoreNeverReached [2009-09-19 19:09:52 +0000 UTC]
If I actually had a better idea I would have given specifics. As it stands, that very well may be an indicator of the truth of that statement.
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anchorme [2009-09-17 20:24:58 +0000 UTC]
very touching. i can see it play out before my eyes. very well-written.
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AShoreNeverReached In reply to anchorme [2009-09-18 00:13:40 +0000 UTC]
thanks. glad to hear it came out like i wanted.
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anchorme In reply to AShoreNeverReached [2009-09-18 17:21:40 +0000 UTC]
ur very welcome. i really enjoy reading it. even if it is sad
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crypticshadows [2009-09-17 18:27:45 +0000 UTC]
Such a sweet dream & such a harsh ending. This piece is very sentimental. Hopefully, all wounds are healed eventually though.
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AShoreNeverReached In reply to crypticshadows [2009-09-17 18:57:49 +0000 UTC]
i can only hope.
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