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Published: 2008-09-14 23:38:38 +0000 UTC; Views: 2902; Favourites: 67; Downloads: 16
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This poemwill be found
where you live,
somewhat short of breath,
missing an arm,
and looking
for the way
things used to be.
It will tell
the story of a dream
watching a dream.
Behind small jars
of cardamom
and bay leaf
you will catch
its scent, and,
as you move aside
a thing or two,
it will look up
with lips that purse
like an eye
to recite
all the words for blue
(which might also
be all the names
for wind, weariness,
and God).
It will tell you
what kind you have been,
recalling
the shoes you wore
when you were.
This poem
will be found
where poems always are.
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Comments: 125
Aww...you're awesome! Thanks so much. I am really glad to hear that it struck you in a good way.
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this is amazing work. i want to learn from you so pretty please post as much work as your creative energy will allow before passing out lifeless on the bedroom floor. Thanks a million.
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Continuum, or rediscovery? Whateve the meaning, your writing leaves my head swimming - and I love it!
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Ohh swimming! Come on in - the water's fine
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You are most welcome. If you are ever bored, may I ask you to stop by my gallery?
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I won't even have to be bored - I'd be happy to
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Hahahaha well thank you very much 
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Wonderful. Where all poems live; no matter what they are about. It's amazing. It's like the place where all souls go when they aren't attached to the body no more.
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Hahahaha..well thank you very much 
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this one is a great piece of work- great job ^-^
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Thank you Ender
Orson Scott Card wrote one of my favorite short stories when I was in highschool...It's called "A Thousand Deaths". If you ever get a chance to read it I think you might really like it
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That one I haven't heard of but will be more then welcome to read it because he's my favorite writer- Ender's Game is my favorite book (and not because we share the same name lol )
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From the ones I read is this one my favourite one
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I'm really glad you liked that one - It appeared last month in Read This, an online journal from the U.K. 
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Congatulations!
Have you sent them some of your poems?
Have a nice... day, I guess? It's 11.30 PM here, but the time is a few hours back in the US.
Cheers,
Jane
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I have sent a few here and there
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The stanzas are really short. When I try to read, it seems kind of choppy. Maybe that's the effect you were going for, I'm not sure.
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I like this one. It very nicely recalls the feeling that finding an unexpected bit of the past brings and the free-flow of surprising thoughts that can happen then.
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Thank you James - I was angling for the feeling of a sudden and serendipitous creation and I'm glad it worked for you. Thank you for the comment! and the
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I love this. ^^ "Mind-boggling" was exactly what I was thinking.
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That is incredibly supportive of you -
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wow... you're a poetic genius, I say!
You should do a lyrical work for me.
Write me a song. I'll compose some music for it.
Hit me up sometime.
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I am very fond of this one at the moment to be truthful
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Playful.
A delightfully playful poem.
(I hope it finds its arm)
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One of those poems that once you start reading, you have to get to the end.
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that is very flattering praise - thanks my friend
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it will look up
with lips that move
like an eye
to recite
all the words for blue
(which might also
be all the names
for wind, weariness,
and God).
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And I appreciate every minute of it!
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This poem is where Waldo is. Everywhere. Ingrained in our brains. Dave, this is the embodiment of awesome.
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Hehehe thank you Joan - I feel.....so awesome
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Hi, I found your stunning poem through our mutual friend, the beautiful . It brought tears to my eyes. I once lost a friend to cancer when I was very young. Doug used to make me chai, long before it was ever well known, and his laughter is ever with me. I deeply thank you for bringing me the scent of cardamom.
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