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Published: 2006-07-09 03:28:29 +0000 UTC; Views: 238; Favourites: 0; Downloads: 4
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Description Head, meet desk. This is the ink madness that killed the Doodle Dump 2 page. It's from spring break, back when I was trapped on a plane from Japan to Texas. Joy of joys, my sketchpad came to rescue me, and I spent the entire trip doing the pencil work for this. (Once we reached Houston, I almost attacked the baggage retrieval so I could find my luggage and dig out my pens before I left.) Everything was fine and dandy. I even had a frickin' title for this thing, and I NEVER have titles ready.

Then I realized, rather abruptly, that I simply LOATHED the guy's design here. I hate it. Hate hate hate HATE it. He has a slight resemblence to an old friend of mine, mainly the hair style, and it just hit all my hate buttons. Not to mention I discovered I am spatially retarded. So the project was scrapped. A pity, really--I still like Chavela's design here, and the general set-up. Later I might try to redraw it, but at the moment, this picture just doesn't satisfy me at all.

The story behind it (for anyone bored) is that Chavela is a girl who has a curse of seeing spirits. It's not nearly as exciting as it sounds; the only spirits that have the pure emotional power to hold themselves to earth are those that are enraged are heartbroken, and the only way for them to cling to earth is to constantly relive whatever event tied them there. As a result, they don't experience reality the way they should, and Chavela hasn't been able to successfully tune it out completely. Whenever a spook comes by, her sense of reality turns to silly putty, and she gets sick. Therefore, she's become almost agoraphobic in her efforts to avoid all unnatural presences, and loud heavy metal tends to block out the rest.

Enter Dion, a spook who claims passionately that he isn't dead. Since the only thing he remembers about himself is his name, he has no great rage or pain tying him to the world, and therefore, he doesn't have any adverse effect on Chavela. A year and a half of aimless wandering has made him desperate for any social interaction he can get, and Chavela is the only person he's met who can see or hear him. He doesn't care how badly his presence annoys her, only that he finally has someone to discuss football and music with.

My brother kicked me off the scanner, so that's all for the moment.
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Fransoun [2006-07-11 22:23:51 +0000 UTC]

He does bear a resemblence to someone you (we) know. The name is also...similar. So are his interests. ...So why do you hate it? *has that look that was driving you crazy at Hutt's*

And, in the story, how is he anchored?

Excellent job on Chavela's character design. She looks like an individual.

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BaaingTree In reply to Fransoun [2006-07-12 03:53:26 +0000 UTC]

Get that look off me; this was from spring break, and the first pages of this thing came from October of last year. So it was before... that.

For no reason I can figure out, I just hate the design. It strikes me as utterly hideous, and it just doesn't match my mental image of the character, who's admittedly being a real tease in coming out properly. I've gotten a little better, but he still ends up coming out looking like a surfer and/or a girl. Also, I am positive that when you try and write a real person, you become overconfident ("this should be easy--after all, I've known such and so for years!") and the writing goes bland as boiled rice. I am determined to force him into his own cohesion, but he's winning that fight hands-down.

As for why he's still around, that's pretty much the plot: "WHY AREN'T YOU GONE YET?!" So far, my idea is that he had an unfortunate accident that, if not for some luck and quick medical intervention, would've killed him. However, by the time they revived him, his soul had already attempted to depart. There's just enough left of him stuck in his body to keep him from completing the whole dying process, and either that strain or a plain old whack on the head during the accident took out some of the finer points of his memory. What say you? Has the idea any promise?

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Fransoun In reply to BaaingTree [2006-07-12 15:53:53 +0000 UTC]

Okay, okay, just kidding...

That's fine. And what you say about writing a real person makes a lot of sense. (I wouldn't know, and it sounds good to me.)

I think that plot idea is good, but I'm a little confused. If he is still stuck in his body, why can't others see him? And if he's the part that left his body, where is his body now? Am I making any sense? And I would think that there would end up being many more like him because of the increase in medical technology.

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BaaingTree In reply to Fransoun [2006-07-12 19:48:08 +0000 UTC]

Thanks. Seems to me I have to work on knee-jerk defensiveness... *wince*

It's odd, because you'd think it'd be easier mimicking a person you know rather than come up with a whole new one from scratch, but I figured out years ago that it isn't so. Not sure why.

The second part is right--he's the part that left his body, and that's the question both him and Chavela are dying to know. Without his memory, he has no idea himself, and he's spent a good amount of time wandering aimlessly. That's a lot of time to go by, so they're not even sure what'll happen if they try and get the two parts back together. I figure that's what the story will actually be about--them trying to figure out how he ended up the way he did, how they can remedy it, and whether it's possible.

Hmm. You make a good point about the medical technology, though. I hadn't thought of that. *rubs chin* Perhaps she lives in a small town, where big emergencies are shipped over to a nearby bigger town to cope with? No, that wouldn't make sense--why would Dion be at all interested in blowing in unless it has something to see? Hmm. Something to chew on...

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Fransoun In reply to BaaingTree [2006-07-13 14:36:21 +0000 UTC]

Maybe because you don't know a real person as well as someone you make up yourself...

Then it's going to be interesting to see what the effect on his living body was. Does he (the body) even know what's happened to him? If the ghost remains the same age while the body continues to age, that could also be a problem.

Yay! I'm helping!...ish. I only thought of it because I work near a hospital now.

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BaaingTree In reply to Fransoun [2006-07-13 18:29:08 +0000 UTC]

Good sense made there. It's HARD trying to make yourself think like someone you know; it hurts.

I don't think the body is actually too sentient right now; there's only so much brain and soul to spread around, I figure, so it probably just concentrates on sleeping, eating, and staying parked in front of the TV while a nurse or something watches over him. Pretty much, it functions just enough to stay alive, maybe with some help. And yeah, I've been considering having them being "estranged" for, like, a year and a half. That's a long period of time (because the ghost side of him is formed by his own body image; it doesn't change) so I figure that's not going to make the attempts at integration any easier. After an accident big enough to knock him loose, I think Dion's going to have quite a shock when he sees how his body has changed.

Yes! Keep helping; it makes me think of things I didn't come up with before.

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Fransoun In reply to BaaingTree [2006-07-19 23:12:17 +0000 UTC]

Hn. Interesting. So does the still body retain the memories? Because it would be interesting (gotta stop using that word) to see how a person with memories but unable to draw a personality from those memories would act. Dion's body would be a whole different person. How would those around him explain it medically? And would the body, concentrating (so to speak) on staying alive, even be aware of the memories, or would they be locked away until body and sould rejoin, or are they lost forever? The degree of conciousness of the body, I think, will be key when it comes into the story. And it will be an interesting character study to see if Dion even wants to re-enter his body, and, if his body can think, what it will think of the idea.

Omigosh, the Pirates soundtrack is awesome. I'm typing so fast I keep rearranging the letters in words.

And I'm SOOOO sorry I didn't call before you left. I'm so lame.

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BaaingTree In reply to Fransoun [2006-07-20 20:57:40 +0000 UTC]

A body with memories but not the sense to use them would pretty much be like me and Physics, don't you think? I memorized the equations, and could use them in a very limited, straight-forward manner, but I didn't understand them and I couldn't really adapt them, and once I was left to my own devices, I was no longer able to use them at all. So I figure the body would have the memories but it wouldn't really be able to apply them to his "life" (existence?) or make sense of them, except in the simplest, most straight-forward manner. So it might retain enough understanding to get out of the way of a roaring lion, and maybe even figure out how to open a door, given enough time, but that's about it, and it probably wouldn't have the curiosity to wonder or ask about these strange protocols stuck in its head. As for how it would act--probably like a zombie or a coma patient, depending on how hungry it was. ("Saaaandwiiiiichh..." ) Not exactly high society.

Ah! You have come up with another idea that I didn't! I figured his biggest problem would be how much memory and function his physical brain would have after the accident and spiritual divorce; I never thought about what his body would think of the whole thing. I mean, I guess if I was a body, I'd be a little freaked out if someone tried to take me over, and after a year and a half, who knows whether I'd recognize the guy or not? But how would you get a body to understand something like that? The best I can figure is bonk it over the head and then worm your way in before it has a clue what's happening--but the poor thing's taken enough damage already. So there's another snarl.

Yay, Sountrack!

Yes, you're lame, and you're my friend anyway. Too bad!

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Fransoun In reply to BaaingTree [2006-07-22 19:49:01 +0000 UTC]

Good analogy.

It all really depends on how the body acts and functions.

Guess what I'm listening to right now?

...hey.

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ChessaB [2006-07-09 23:31:55 +0000 UTC]

Chavela has a wonderfully realistic-ish body build, and the sweater is a wonder in expressing it (those lines! fantastico!). And I like the guy's skin color.

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BaaingTree In reply to ChessaB [2006-07-10 03:21:36 +0000 UTC]

Yeah, my brother hates Chavela's design, but that's his issue. The woolen turtleneck sweater seems to be her clothing article of choice, and the one I possess has lines. Thus, so does hers.

I can't see whether I like anything about this design of Dion anymore. I just want to burn every bit of it. After pretty much an hour of determined scribbling ("Darn it, you're coming out my pencil, whether you like it or not!") I got a profile I liked better, but I'm still fighting with him. He's as bad as Thomas.

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thenight [2006-07-09 13:26:49 +0000 UTC]

Nice work. I never saw a game of vertical Twister before. I hope your brother gets out of your way soon so that you can get back to your art work.

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BaaingTree In reply to thenight [2006-07-09 22:51:39 +0000 UTC]

Vertical twister is usually quite easy; all you need is one person determined to go in one direction, and a second person determined to go with that person in the opposite direction. Voila! Twister.

That and my dad had to do taxes.

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