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Remember that day we sat in the open field? No? Well I must have been alone, thinking of you. I remember your presence there. The field went on for miles and miles, becoming a blur of brown, sienna, yellow ochre. When I stared at it for too long, I lost my balance in the waving grasses. I had to find the tree to right myself again. One lone stubby tree in a million miles of dreaming field.I remember the light coming from the left somewhere, because it struck the tree in a most magnificent manner. Its shadow stretched long and thin, finally fading into blurry little fingers. I don’t know the brand of tree it was, it was unfamiliar to me. Short, stubby, gnarly trunked, with large bushy leaves over little pods. Well actually, the pods and everything else must have been bigger than I remember. I was a very long way from the tree.
The sky was malevolent blue that day, with long rust-and- grey clouds sweeping sideways across it. A thin strip of pink on the horizon gave the lower clouds a soft pink underglow. Everything seemed to be moving sideways, to the right. Clouds, grasses, shadows; slowly, faster, slowly again. I don’t remember any wind. The clouds parted for a moment, and there was the earth with its moon, right in place. I heard a voice call from a very long distance. I got up and began walking towards it. Only in my memory, you were walking with me.
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SenZzo-art [2014-12-05 22:53:51 +0000 UTC]
Is this the memory of an imagined or true reality, and if the latter were you there? Or was that just a dream pretending? It seems such images pop up more and more regularly lately, am I loosing the line between?
Nice imagery Ron.
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Bark In reply to SenZzo-art [2014-12-06 09:50:02 +0000 UTC]
This is kind of an imagined memory used as a metaphor for a real memory. I'm not sure about such images cropping up more, I hadn't noticed.
Thank you.
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SenZzo-art In reply to Bark [2014-12-06 22:49:32 +0000 UTC]
No I was referring to my own mind Your text just triggered that I experience the same thing: memories I'm not sure are from reality or imagined.
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brassteeth [2014-11-03 10:53:35 +0000 UTC]
Do trees come in brands...? That threw me, as everything else felt so long and flowing and lush....nice read just the same..
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Bark In reply to brassteeth [2014-11-03 11:39:22 +0000 UTC]
Yeah, I threw that in because 'type' just seemed so mundane.
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JasonMasters [2014-10-30 02:09:12 +0000 UTC]
The imagery was very well crafted so that I could well imagine what the protagonist was remembering. You're quite a wordsmith.
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Bark In reply to JasonMasters [2014-10-31 10:08:44 +0000 UTC]
Thank yery very much, I'm flattered!
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Bark In reply to Shyll-j [2014-10-31 10:08:11 +0000 UTC]
Thank you, that's a wonderful thing to hear!
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Poetrymann [2014-10-29 15:08:39 +0000 UTC]
This amazing work is featured here: This is Halloween!!
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RichardLeach [2014-10-28 20:55:41 +0000 UTC]
A very evocative piece, Ron. The abstract and concrete images are mixed in a fine way.
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MOTOM-MOandTOM [2014-10-28 15:01:36 +0000 UTC]
so wonderful - a journey through the imagination of life - of being
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AElfrics-Cat [2014-10-26 06:16:54 +0000 UTC]
Oh, marvel.... It's beautiful. Such a sense of lack through the beauty of it all; that heavy nothingness where something is missing that should have been. Beautiful x
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Bark In reply to AElfrics-Cat [2014-10-26 07:40:05 +0000 UTC]
Thank you very much! You really understood it better than I did myself... I guess I was too close to it. But yeah, that's it exactly.
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FollowinTheBlackBird [2014-10-25 16:22:26 +0000 UTC]
You have the most remarkable way of making one want to reach out for your stories and grab on for all one's soul is worth. To think that should you ever part from this world we would be without that is the most profound of losses.
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Bark In reply to FollowinTheBlackBird [2014-10-25 16:53:51 +0000 UTC]
Thanks, friend Jon. I will leave, and probably sooner than later. But I'll keep working until I'm too weak to do it...which I hope is the very last minute.
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FollowinTheBlackBird In reply to Bark [2014-10-25 17:58:50 +0000 UTC]
I think I know how you feel. I've been having my own mortality shoved in my face lately. I am now testing my sugar and have been diagnosed with Tourette's syndrome. I've developed a ringing in my ears and a pronounced shortness of breath which the Doctors can't seem to find a reason for since there is no fluid in my lungs and nothing wrong with my heart. They tell me I need exercise but a walk more than twenty feet or so wears me out to the point of exhaustion and I'm out for the count for the rest of the day. I have to use a breathing machine every night or I will stop breathing in my sleep and not wake up and I've developed an allergy to my cats on top of what they are at the moment are thinking may be asthma because they have no other reason for the shortness of breath I suffer so I live from one day to the next. They've asked me to ask my room mate to smoke outside which is like asking her to cut off her leg and eat it. She ignored me. I'd move out if I had any place else to go and could afford it.
With all of that said I have to admire your attitude. Ya know I once heard a man speak at some dinner or what ever I don't remember what but I do remember this and It was the very last sentence of his speech. He said, "One day God will call me home to my rest and this old body will lie down but until then I am going to live and I'm not going to stop until I breathe that very last breath and not one second before." For better or worse my friend, we can ask no more of ourselves than to live.
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Bark In reply to FollowinTheBlackBird [2014-10-25 21:13:50 +0000 UTC]
I'm so sorry you're having all these problems. I know how bad breathing problems can be, especially. I'm curious about the tourette's, I've heard of it but never knew anyone who had it. If I lived alone, I'd invite you to come live with me. Then again, I'm a relentless smoker. I have a list of problems that I'm on medication for too, but right now it's just the severity of the pain. At least I have a diagnosis now, a bad left lung just got worse. Everyone pushes me to quit smoking, but I'm going to enjoy my life while I have it. Screw it, I'm a writer. I can't help it. Sending good thoughts your way, my friend.
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FollowinTheBlackBird In reply to Bark [2014-10-28 02:31:19 +0000 UTC]
Tourette's, how can I explain it? Well, it started out like a hiccup in my whole body and progressed over time to be more and more violent until it started becoming painful. That was when I began involuntarily vocalizing. I can thank God that I don't shout out profanities. Instead it's just guttural noises. My new Dr. has just given me a drug that is supposed to help keep them under control. It seems to be working. The number and severity of instances is lessening.
Thanks for the sentiment. There's a chance I may be going to Wisconsin with my Son and his family next September if I can get my health issues under control. The only misgivings I have about that is that I will have to leave my cats behind and most of the life I have here as well. My Son is allergic to cats, very allergic. Go, not go, it's going to be a tough decision. I hate to be separated from my little monkey but I hate to be a burden to my Son and his family even more.
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alapip [2014-10-24 19:02:37 +0000 UTC]
i very detailed surreal scene, Ron,
from your exacting description,
easy to see in the mind's eye.
with all the talent available here,
i'd like to see one, [or several], of
our artists render it to your specs
as written herein.
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Bark In reply to alapip [2014-10-25 09:52:51 +0000 UTC]
Thanks very much. I really did it as an exercise in description, my stories have always been straightforward story telling and I want to jazz them up.
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jennystokes [2014-10-24 12:39:02 +0000 UTC]
'............and down in the flood of remembrance we weep like a child for the past.'
Eugene Ionesco
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LancelotPrice [2014-10-24 12:07:18 +0000 UTC]
Hardly ever do I remember
those lost people anymore
I try not to
Their doings and my doings
are just a blur
See us there?
We moved too fast to stay.
On the day I die
I may recall
and let the tears
fall
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LancelotPrice In reply to Bark [2014-10-24 13:12:47 +0000 UTC]
Thanks, Ron.
And it strikes me as regretful, dammit.
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