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Description I am tired, heavy-footed, worn with wear I wear my hair
down long
Cold air blows through windows trying to nip the buds
long gone
I watch the cigarette smoke whip through the air currents
blue-grey
Saddened by the sun's insistence, shining on a day like
this day

I am rust, I am crushed metal, junkyard darkness, graveyard
sunset
I can't remember when I remembered what I'm trying so hard
to forget
Fire in oil drums replace the sun and the screaming and singing's
begun
I can't sing anymore, like Clancy can't, and the noise in my head's a
throb-thrum
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Comments: 89

Bark In reply to ??? [2013-02-22 12:33:11 +0000 UTC]

Thank you very much!

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halcyonshores [2012-03-05 21:12:25 +0000 UTC]

The second stanza is brilliant Ron...
Powerful writing, though I do wish you could sleep..

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RussianTim [2012-01-22 18:24:39 +0000 UTC]

This is really impressive. Every line carries a unique sensory stimulant. The smell of the smoke, the feel of the cold air, the grogginess of sleep deprivation, the cracked voice I imagined when you try to sing. It's brilliant!

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Bark In reply to RussianTim [2012-01-22 18:55:18 +0000 UTC]

Thank you very much! That means a lot coming from you, I really admire your work.

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disrhythmic [2012-01-22 06:35:37 +0000 UTC]

"I am rust, I am crushed metal, junkyard darkness, graveyard
sunset"

asdfghjkl that's amazing.

-collects herself-

I love the rhythm with those dangling rhymes, and the imagery is just fantastic, that line up there in particular. Love it.

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Bark In reply to disrhythmic [2012-01-22 17:51:14 +0000 UTC]

Thank you very much!

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disrhythmic In reply to Bark [2012-01-22 19:22:01 +0000 UTC]

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RequiemsandReveries [2012-01-18 14:17:37 +0000 UTC]

I wish you a night of peace and rest

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Bark In reply to RequiemsandReveries [2012-01-19 12:01:15 +0000 UTC]

Thank you so much, your wish came true for me last night! It was wonderful!

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RequiemsandReveries In reply to Bark [2012-01-20 01:38:51 +0000 UTC]

OOOH I am so happy to read this!

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chryssalis [2012-01-15 19:21:35 +0000 UTC]

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Bark In reply to chryssalis [2012-01-15 19:34:43 +0000 UTC]

Thank you!

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LaurieLefebvre [2012-01-13 03:54:39 +0000 UTC]

featured here [link]

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Bark In reply to LaurieLefebvre [2012-01-13 08:21:25 +0000 UTC]

Thanks so much, it was really nice to include my words with all of that great visual art!

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LaurieLefebvre In reply to Bark [2012-01-14 00:03:14 +0000 UTC]

my pleasure

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LancelotPrice [2012-01-11 13:03:18 +0000 UTC]

A fine expression of that feeling, that feeling we know too well, too long.

We who cannot feel the sun.

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Bark In reply to LancelotPrice [2012-01-11 13:05:15 +0000 UTC]

Thanks, Lance.

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LancelotPrice In reply to Bark [2012-01-11 13:14:26 +0000 UTC]

You're very welcome and deserving, Ron.

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beleave [2012-01-10 08:44:21 +0000 UTC]

how long is long enough. most never know.

sleep can always wait.

nice, like the sounds. a bit cliche-ridden. "sun's insistence" = fav

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Bark In reply to beleave [2012-01-10 09:03:16 +0000 UTC]

Thanks. I was very tired when I wrote it.

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TheDarkenedBride [2012-01-09 10:23:57 +0000 UTC]

brilliant!

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Bark In reply to TheDarkenedBride [2012-01-09 13:19:57 +0000 UTC]

Thank you!

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TheDarkenedBride In reply to Bark [2012-01-10 13:49:49 +0000 UTC]

my pleasure

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jimfleming [2012-01-09 02:55:32 +0000 UTC]

I like this very much and throb-thrum is perfect! I guess it's just that time of year?.....
Sleep hides from all of us from time to time...

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Bark In reply to jimfleming [2012-01-09 08:40:49 +0000 UTC]

Thanks, Jim.

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jimfleming In reply to Bark [2012-01-09 12:23:17 +0000 UTC]

With pleasure sir

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LaurieLefebvre [2012-01-09 01:14:16 +0000 UTC]

I love the sun. It makes me feel like painting. The rest I can relate.

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Bark In reply to LaurieLefebvre [2012-01-09 08:43:00 +0000 UTC]

Some days are so bad the sun seems to be there only to taunt.

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LaurieLefebvre In reply to Bark [2012-01-09 11:56:11 +0000 UTC]

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katu01 [2012-01-07 05:54:52 +0000 UTC]

That drone in your head reminds me of things I once thought more important than sleep. In my 20's, a nympho ex-GF kept me awake for a year, sometimes thoughts of passion can induce REM sleep in minutes. Your writing never fails to bring life to a host of memories.

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Bark In reply to katu01 [2012-01-07 21:19:42 +0000 UTC]

Thanks, that's a great compliment... and a great GF!

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bitybaby45 [2012-01-05 03:19:25 +0000 UTC]

I used to just daydream until my body decided it was time to actually fall asleep. But that's just me, I'll admit I'm pretty unusual. Great poem. I love the second to last line the most. I don't know why, I can just feel the heat from the fire and hear the screaming and singing like some demented bonfire. Very very nice! I hope you get some rest soon.

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Bark In reply to bitybaby45 [2012-01-05 12:11:26 +0000 UTC]

Thanks a lot! I did get a good night's sleep last night

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bitybaby45 In reply to Bark [2012-01-06 03:08:16 +0000 UTC]

You're very welcome. That's great!

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ExistenceWeSummonYou [2012-01-05 00:32:40 +0000 UTC]

Some great images propelled by some great sound patterning. Poetry! Better than sleep.

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Bark In reply to ExistenceWeSummonYou [2012-01-05 12:10:23 +0000 UTC]

Thank you! I agree, if I manage to write something worthwhile, it's well worth the loss of sleep.

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alapip [2012-01-04 21:50:18 +0000 UTC]

an excellent poem, Ron,
of inventive venting.

have you ever looked into
transcendental meditation?
it puts me to sleep every night.
also, i use a white noise unit
to mask disturbing sounds.

[link]
[link]

never give up... never!

pip

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Bark In reply to alapip [2012-01-04 23:27:17 +0000 UTC]

Thanks, man. I get to sleep OK with medication, but it wears off after 4-5 hours. You'd think an old hippie like myself would have tried TM before, but I haven't. I use the low drone of TV voices as white noise.

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GaYtAcOs [2012-01-04 20:57:43 +0000 UTC]

i love this, sooo pretty oh and i find that music down real low can help awesome job

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Bark In reply to GaYtAcOs [2012-01-04 21:13:15 +0000 UTC]

Thanks!

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FuzzyHoser [2012-01-04 20:22:05 +0000 UTC]

Melatonin, man... It works for me.

But if going without sleep is gonna make you write like this, I take back my suggestion.

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Bark In reply to FuzzyHoser [2012-01-04 20:53:44 +0000 UTC]

Thank you!

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FuzzyHoser In reply to Bark [2012-01-04 20:58:02 +0000 UTC]

Yes'sir! (:

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caddman [2012-01-04 19:05:26 +0000 UTC]

Excellent work Bro...Rust never sleeps..."its better burnout then fade away"...Neil Young

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Bark In reply to caddman [2012-01-04 20:54:22 +0000 UTC]

Thanks, Bro. Neil Young, yeah!

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riparii [2012-01-04 19:02:02 +0000 UTC]

Snow is a first rate insulator. Ground dwelling birds
in northern climes depend on it.
Bleak. Utterly, powerfully bleak.

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Bark In reply to riparii [2012-01-04 20:55:00 +0000 UTC]

Thank you very much!

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jennystokes [2012-01-04 09:00:32 +0000 UTC]

Nice one Barky....................why am I sleeping SO deeply? Heavily fortified with intense dreams like movies?
Can't wake up!

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Bark In reply to jennystokes [2012-01-04 12:13:47 +0000 UTC]

Thanks, Jenny. Sounds like heaven to me, enjoy it! Love.

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jennystokes In reply to Bark [2012-01-04 12:53:12 +0000 UTC]

Feels horrible in the morning like I have a great boulder on my back!
Love you
Sleep well tonight.

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