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Bio-LuminescentKirby — Wisp Revamp V4 (w/ Bio)
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Published: 2017-06-06 16:12:07 +0000 UTC; Views: 485; Favourites: 10; Downloads: 0
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Oh great, I made another revamp//shotChanges:
Added headphones
Changed the color of the bottom of his shoes
Now has eye heterochromia (his right eye is now cyan)
Changed color of his tail
Changed color of his hat (band and ball at the end)
Bio (w/ some changes) :
Name: Wisp
Age: 6 (formerly), 7
Gender: Male
Species: Baby Star (puffball)
Friends or Siblings: All of my good FC's and OC's (comment if your character wants to be friends with him), Nega Wisp (genetic copy)
Enemies or Rivals: Nega Wisp, Malice (comment if your character wants to be enemies and/or rivals with him)
Personality: Wisp was an extremely shy kid when meeting new people, but over time he has gained more self-confidence and maturity.
He's still pretty soft-spoken, but he has learned to be more open with other people, especially his close friends.
Powers or Abilities:
Star Energy Manipulation
Hyper-go-ons (Color Power)
Flight
Ice
Stats:
ATK: 7/10
DEF: 8/10
SPD: 7/10
HEALTH: 7/10
STAMINA: 7.5/10
Extra:
He has sixth sense.
He loves to read.
Wisp belongs to me.
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Comments: 21
Hey, do you think this puffball's a kid?
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he's 7
so yea i guess
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So, will he join the Martial Arts Kids?
Martial Arts Kids | Fanon Wiki | Fandom powered by Wikia
After all, they're a group of children protecting the universe with martial arts. Remember, no offense. And if not, then you need to say sorry.
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i'm
gonna have to say no.
i don't exactly want my character to be part of this
sorry
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i don't exactly feel... comfortable about it...
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Sorry...
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it's okay
just
try not to self-advertise here, please
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Okay. But would you like to make me a new Martial Arts Kids bio please as an apology?
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Um, sorry.
i think you misunderstood.
"No" means "no."
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Oh, sorry.
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it's... fine
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Thanks.
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Ooooooooooookay, so I've had a look at this guy's bio (along with digging in your other pics for more info), and there's some things I wanna point out in the hopes of improving your character. Using his older versions as a comparison, btw.
- What's the tail for? Nothing was explained for that. From what I can see, it provides no real purpose to his character, and if anything, feels like a last-minute random extension.
- Do seriously tone down the neon colours. If you're struggling to find good colour palettes, I suggest colorhunt.co .
- Not sure what the facial designs are there for, nor was anything explained on how Wisp got them. Also, you only added heterochromia just to make him cooler?
- Going to be blatantly honest here; is a form really that needed? And seriously, dark alter ego doppelgangers. He looks already powerful in his current state, why the need to go overboard? Some things listed on there (like lightspeed and moonlight, which does what exactly?) just scream overpowered to me.
- Granted, a good thing about this character is his confidence progression; his first version did make hints to a "shy person" stereotype tbh.
Not bad, but perhaps you need to bring down some things a few notches to make him not so OP.
/$0.02
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- His tail kinda acts like an extra limb (kinda like a monkey's tail now that I think about it); in this pic (Wisp's parents ), his mom has a tail (although it's sorta blends in with the bg).
You got a point with the "random extension" thing. I have yet to provide much usefulness for it. ;;
- I guess I went a little overboard with the neon
- Well, the star mark on his right eye has to do with him being able to manipulate star energy, and the cyan eye he has has to do with his ice-related ability which I forgot to put in the description//shot.
(also shown in New Power- Wisp and in Uh oh.... )
The power symbol, I just added for extra.
- Idk, I just thought that he may need some enemies 'cause he's already so powerful.
But I guess it does scream overpowered, huh?
- Thanks. my first version was/is so cringey
Thanks for the advice.
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- Dude what, he can fly. That's a moot point there.
- Ehhhh, I think there's better ways to be able to show that in a method that's less garish.
- Then tone down his power. That'll give him more opponents that are actually capable of fighting him at their respective levels (eg, Violet. She'd effectively lose against him in his current state.)
No worries.
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wait where does it say he can fly-
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yeah I saw right after I commented that lmao
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