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To date, this is probably the hardest time I’ve had figuring out the dialogue for a page. I knew what I needed to say, but I had a lot of trouble with the whole “how much is too much” dilemma. At one point there was a lot less, for a while there was a lot more. In the end, I think I found the right balance. Hopefully!
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Haha, and I'm usually not very good with subtlety. That's why this comic starts with a guy masturbating alone in his room!
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Wow, laden with metaphors.
This is just brilliant.
I think this is all of us, we'll just keep going straight until we crash into others.
For me, this is the most insightful and touching page so far.
You're managing to narrate my feelings. Thankyou.
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Thank YOU my friend. You always find new ways to really make me feel like I'm doing something right. I'm glad all the time I put into tweaking the dialogue on this page paid off, because I think it's a very important moment.
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Trust that instinct, you're doing something very right.
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we'll just keep going straight until we crash into others
I love this!
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Thanks, in the original version there was actually a lot less subtext. Daniel responded with "I've been trying to get you to stop going straight all night," and from there an argument ensued. I liked it, but the tone was wrong and it was a little too on-the-nose. I'm glad trimming it down seemed to pay off!
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That was good instincts, on your part... all the little subtleties fit in to the tone wonderfully too. Speaks to the degree of restraint.
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