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Published: 2003-08-24 01:55:01 +0000 UTC; Views: 1181; Favourites: 9; Downloads: 74
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Description Kept in chains
Locked up with my demons
A punishment

The angels hold my keys
Not willing to let me free
Watching me suffer
Be ripped apart from the inside
By my demons

Screams issue from my lips
My hands grip the bars
Being pulled back by my demons

Halos knocked to the ground and shattered
Gold and silver sparks fly
I was innocent
But now my demons break me

Satan's thoughts brew inside my fragile mind
And all my angels do is sit and watch
As I get torn into shreds by my demons

Angels, lend me your hand
Pull me from this pain
Colours fade from my world
As everything becomes different shades of black;
And red

Fire laps at my feet, it burns
My demons are burning me
And yet my angels are not saving me

Goodnight my angels
My demons have engulfed me
My innocence was over rated
I have contemplated my sins
Now I know what the future holds

I was innocent
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Comments: 22

Metatetron [2005-10-13 12:18:28 +0000 UTC]

You know what I like about this one? You never say, the tortured one IS innocent, only that she, was

I find that, intriguing, somehow -

and you imagery is lovely, in a horrifc sort of way -

I like this one a good deal, and have at last found why I keep bouncing back to your pages...

thank you *Metatetron

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braceletsofsmoke In reply to Metatetron [2005-10-13 14:35:54 +0000 UTC]

whoo!! thankyou i havent read this one back to myself in a while...i like it too

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Metatetron In reply to braceletsofsmoke [2005-10-13 17:45:21 +0000 UTC]

You are most welcome -

*Metatetron

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Rosebud1313 [2004-06-16 10:09:48 +0000 UTC]

Dark & amazing. I am really digging your work!

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seekingtruth [2003-11-12 15:52:07 +0000 UTC]

Sweet stuff. Reminds me of the poetry of a good friend of mine- very dark and evil sounding.

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fyehroqs-fugue [2003-10-21 01:16:20 +0000 UTC]

Hmmmm, sort of an interesting poem. I suppose I could try and apply what I think you were trying to say metaphorically to this, but then again, maybe such thoughts are best kept to myself so I don't interfere with what you had in mind.

In either case, good job!

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rachelbabyfrog [2003-10-06 20:36:55 +0000 UTC]

Makes me thoroughly dislike the angels... even more than the demons, if you get my drift.

Excellently written!

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kamelin [2003-10-02 01:09:32 +0000 UTC]

Das crehhhhhhhzih mahn, yous got deh breeehnses

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devilishlycrazy [2003-09-28 09:18:55 +0000 UTC]

omg this is amazing! great imagery, I love it

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perfectisboring [2003-09-27 01:36:31 +0000 UTC]

Angels, lend me your hand
Pull me from this pain
Colours fade from my world
As everything becomes different shades of black;
And red


Beautiful. The final line ends the poem so nicely. I can just hear someone reading this aloud; it's so amazing. Keep it up!!

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drewpy [2003-09-27 00:26:08 +0000 UTC]

I especially love the 5 stanza. It's just an awesome image.
Another thing is how it ends. "I was innocent." Simple, and just closes up the poem so well. I really love this.

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DivineApathy [2003-09-26 06:32:33 +0000 UTC]

I am in awe... I really dont know what to say. This is so intense... so emotional.

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Arkaizer [2003-09-24 04:42:23 +0000 UTC]

Hm, tis a nice poem, good flow. Continue writing, good work.

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badblokebob [2003-08-31 13:42:42 +0000 UTC]

Halos knocked to the ground and shattered
Gold and silver sparks fly

Preeeeeeeeeetty


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mirva [2003-08-30 11:32:15 +0000 UTC]

Brilliant, cruel, aggressive and perfect.

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brwncow [2003-08-26 06:21:27 +0000 UTC]

Amazing.
It's so violent. It feels so right for the subject.

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mech61 [2003-08-26 01:23:24 +0000 UTC]

Another brilliant poem sally. Thought you werent submiting any more for awile... Well Im glad you did. I never saw the original ending but it all flows very nicely. Great job, keep it up!

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alwayzdazd [2003-08-24 23:31:33 +0000 UTC]

Awesome..that ending is perfect...wonderful job...made the whole poem tie together nicely.

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moosekleenex [2003-08-24 13:49:40 +0000 UTC]

wow.I esepecially like the 6th stanza.

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halfway2nowhere [2003-08-24 07:27:26 +0000 UTC]

"Halos knocked to the ground and shattered
Gold and silver sparks fly
I was innocent
But now my demons break me"

I like this stanza the best, excellent imagery!

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kamelin [2003-08-24 02:04:52 +0000 UTC]

Demolition of Virginity

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angeljunkie [2003-08-24 01:57:14 +0000 UTC]

well, that was quick. the ending's much better now.

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