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braceletsofsmoke — Souless Angel
Published: 2003-10-05 20:38:12 +0000 UTC; Views: 222; Favourites: 1; Downloads: 43
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Hovering next to my windowI see my souless angel
Black wings
Mouth sewn shut
Eyes as black as a moonless night
I stumble and fall
My breath caught in my throat
Eyes fixated at my window
A white feather falls
And is blown across fields of blue
My angel has lost his last feather;
Wings of bone now beat in the wind
His ripped cloak is covered with thick, black blood
Torn from days of attempted salvation that were never fulfilled
He stares at me
Extends out his bony arm
Words enter my mind;
Spoken from lips shut
I blink and he is gone
Yet one feather remains
Blown across fields of blue
Entwining with the wind
Till one day it comes to rest
In the palm of my hand
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Comments: 19
This is so beautiful. I like how it leaves us imagining. I can see it all in my mind. wonderful.
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yep! gotta agree with everyone else...this is fantastic! great job, you're a very talented writer.
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I love the imagery here. This would also make a great short-story I think.
His ripped cloak is covered with thick, black blood
Torn from days of attempted salvation that were never fulfilled
Personal favorite line right there. *Points upwards*
Great job overall, and the picture is stunning.
Do more
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Good job sally, this is darker then your usual work tho. I love this poem so much, keep up the good work 
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Oh I luv this. The imagery is excellent. I could actually see the dark angel watching through the window.
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Definitely dark! I love the repetition of the "fields of blue" imagery -- I honestly can't say what it is I like about it, but it works so well repeated there, methinks. Very good, strong imagery in general -- the bone wings are another bit I like, even though I find the thought of it somehow repulsive (in a "good" way, if you see what I mean... like, I feel like that's kinda what you're going for).
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HEY!!!! this is scary, reminds me of my dream sal!!! and man....now it's fresh in my mind, i can't go back to that room!! oh man....shit......i thought i'd lost all contact from those angels and now they're back in my head! they're fresh, as if your poem just tore open the wound that was healing!!!!
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Hey, did you get the idea for the feather over the fields of blue from FF VIII?
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er....no, if your refering to Final Fantasy...i've never even played it
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This is so pretty...it reminds me of another deviation called "Guardian of a Lesser Kind" [link] . Excellent job, as always...the imagery is intense.--Jenna
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BEAUTIFUL preview and beautiful poem. Nice work
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you have very very nice imagery i must say~ i can vividly see it all 
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oh... sweetie, wow. just wow. i don't know what else i can possibly say about this. but i saw it. every single bit of it.
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So amazingly beautiful. The imagery is so vivid. And there is tons of emotion. Great job. ^^;
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Wow, this is really good. You must have been hurting a lot 
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Whoa...The poem goes perfectly with the picture. ^_^<3 8.5/10 Anime Sweatdrops!
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