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Whitepaw took a step into the dark surf. She flinched as the water lapped over her paws. The water was cool, though not cold. She took another few steps forward, screwing up her face as water washed over her legs. She didn't like the feeling of wet fur. She glanced back at Hawkfrost uncertainly, but he just nodded for her to go on.Before long, the water was almost over her back. A shiver ran through Whitepaw's fur. Being submersed in the dark liquid, even with solid ground beneath her paws, was frightening. 'What am I afraid of?' she thought crossly. 'Fish bites?' Determination searing in her pads, Whitepaw kept walking.
Whitepaw lifted her front paw to take another step forward, but she couldn't find solid ground. She waved her paw around, trying to find a lump of pebbles, but she lost her balance instead and tumbled facefirst into the water. The water swept her forward, and now none of her paws were touching the lakebed.
"Help me!" she screeched.
"Run!" her mate yowled back. "Get flat."
Whitepaw stopped struggling and let her back face upward. Sure enough, the water pushed her up to the surface, and Whitepaw raised her head out of the water, gasping for air. As she began to sink again, she wriggled her front and back paws. Not only was she staying afloat, she was moving forward!
She looked down in amazement at her paws, pushing her through the water. "Keep going!" Hawkfrost called. Whitepaw propelled herself in a circle, waving her front and back paws stiffly back and forth and sticking her tail straight up.
"I'm doing it!" she yelled. "I'm swimming!"
Soooo this is the scene in my WhitexHawk fanfiction Dark Hearts where Hawkfrost teaches Whitepaw how to swim!
I remember when I wrote this scene I based it off of the part in Eclipse where Jaypaw’s teaching Cinderpaw how to swim. What I realized was...all in all, swimming isn’t actually that hard for cats. It’s just that most don’t like to get wet :/ They can “doggy-paddle” by instinct...as can humans. Like most Thunderclan cats, Whitepaw hates the water, but for the sake of appeasing her mate she agrees to take “swimming lessons”
HOLY CRAP, you have NO IDEA how proud I am of this!
The background was a pain -____- I had to draw the island like 6 times before it didn’t look stupid, and it took me forever to figure out what exactly to put on the lakeshore! I tried to make the trees, bushes, and grass look darker than usual to give it sort of a nighttime effect since the picture is supposed to be, you know, at night. I thought it wouldn’t do any good, but the pic actually looks like it’s at night!
I had to use 2 references for this one, since a ref of a cat swimming was REALLY hard to find! Here they are: [link] and [link] . I DID NOT TRACE THESE! I know it looks like I did, but I just have a good eye for referencing and I’m able to reference linearts really closely. I AM NOT AN ART THIEF! Still, I felt a little guilty referencing these because this person is such a damn good artist and I could never ever in a thousand years be as good as them. Sighhhh
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Comments: 42
Warriors55 [2014-02-10 23:47:11 +0000 UTC]
Ok I just changed warriors wiki to say Dovewing's father is Hawkfrost but someone's going to change it to Birchfall again
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Bramblestar27 In reply to Warriors55 [2014-02-11 00:14:37 +0000 UTC]
Lol yeahhhh, that's not going to stay up for long XD But it IS a headcanon and warriors wiki is only for canonly confirmed information
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Warriors55 In reply to Bramblestar27 [2014-02-11 00:19:02 +0000 UTC]
Yeah I know but seriously. Ivy and Dove look nothing like Birch. Nothing at all.
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Bramblestar27 In reply to Warriors55 [2014-02-11 03:49:40 +0000 UTC]
Lol true, but they don't look much like Hawkfrost either. Other than Ivypool being tabby-and-white like Hawkfrost.
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Warriors55 In reply to Bramblestar27 [2014-02-11 15:10:19 +0000 UTC]
I guess but I still find WhitexBirch really annoying because it was uncalled for and they hinted Birch didn't really like White in Outcast when she got Icecloud for an apprentice
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Bramblestar27 In reply to Warriors55 [2014-02-12 01:18:55 +0000 UTC]
I always saw them as best friends, but never any more. I always imagined him being like a younger brother to her, so any romance between them is just weird. Besides, they have NO chemistry whatsoever :/
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Warriors55 In reply to Bramblestar27 [2014-02-12 03:22:59 +0000 UTC]
I agree with you I like them separately but not together.
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Bramblestar27 In reply to Warriors55 [2014-02-14 02:51:01 +0000 UTC]
Yeah, I love them as characters but NOT as a couple. It's kind of like if my friend from school got together with her best guy friend who's like a brother to her (and also happens to be my crush )
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Warriors55 In reply to Warriors55 [2014-02-10 23:48:15 +0000 UTC]
NOOOOO someone changed it back
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Bramblestar27 In reply to Sparrowsongg [2013-07-06 18:15:40 +0000 UTC]
SHUSH I CAN'T BE PERFECT >____<
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Sparrowsongg In reply to Bramblestar27 [2013-07-12 00:39:23 +0000 UTC]
Pfff you're already better than I can ever be ;u; <3
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Bramblestar27 In reply to Sparrowsongg [2013-07-12 03:24:34 +0000 UTC]
Awww no way! I've just had a lot of practice :3 And I probably ref too much
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CosmosTheKitsune1 [2013-07-05 17:32:09 +0000 UTC]
Wow, You Have Improved So Much!!!!! I Love How Young You Made Hawky And Whitey Look And The Way That The Stars Are Reflected In The Water And Hawky's Soft Expression Are All So Beautiful. I Just Love This Picture.
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Bramblestar27 In reply to CosmosTheKitsune1 [2013-07-06 18:43:26 +0000 UTC]
Hah well, I have my reference to thank for most of that Thank you! Yep, they were pretty young at the time this scene happened :3 I'm pretty proud of how I figured out how to make the stars glow
Photo-editing FTW!
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CosmosTheKitsune1 In reply to Bramblestar27 [2013-07-11 17:32:40 +0000 UTC]
You're Welcome! ;3
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Rosewolf732 [2013-07-04 05:02:24 +0000 UTC]
GOT IT! Ivy betrays her sister and goes with Tiger because they meet in the darkforest.........I just finished book 2 of OOTS so don't judge me if im wrong or if the die or something.
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Bramblestar27 In reply to Rosewolf732 [2013-07-04 18:15:39 +0000 UTC]
So IvyxTiger? That's an awesome couple I prefer DovexTiger and IvyxBumble, but still.
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Rosewolf732 In reply to Bramblestar27 [2013-07-05 05:20:05 +0000 UTC]
Im thinking about it right now....It starts off on Ivypaws day like how she got a thorn in her pad but when she peeked through the brambles to the medicine den,Jayfeather(hes so awesome) was talking with Dovepaw.When she wanted to go on a walk with Dove she saw her talking with Firestar at the fresh-kill pile.
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Bramblestar27 In reply to Rosewolf732 [2013-07-06 18:38:40 +0000 UTC]
Lol wow, this story is just riveting thus far! XD
Love your new icon BTW
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Rosewolf732 In reply to Bramblestar27 [2013-07-06 23:01:03 +0000 UTC]
Thanks! I was thinking of changing it because WolfLover773 made me another icon of my main O.C .
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Bramblestar27 In reply to Rosewolf732 [2013-07-07 00:50:23 +0000 UTC]
Aaaaand you changed it again XD
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Rosewolf732 In reply to Bramblestar27 [2013-07-07 19:29:19 +0000 UTC]
Well sorry if Wolfy had Icon-drawingness yesterday and made me an icon of my new main O.C!
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Bramblestar27 In reply to Rosewolf732 [2013-07-07 22:17:10 +0000 UTC]
Yaaaaay! But it was such a pretty flower...
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Rosewolf732 In reply to Bramblestar27 [2013-07-08 19:33:37 +0000 UTC]
Poppyfrost: Not as pretty as Jay.......... I have a feeling she likes him after he saved her and all... But she's older right?
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Bramblestar27 In reply to Rosewolf732 [2013-07-09 00:27:01 +0000 UTC]
YES! Poppyfrost has a BIG crush on Jayfeather! And she's not that much older. Just one litter. Plus, I'm always getting crushes on younger guys XD
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Rosewolf732 In reply to Bramblestar27 [2013-07-09 01:22:13 +0000 UTC]
-Lionblaze walks by- WHAT DID YOU SAY ABOUT MAH BROTHER!!!!!!!! Firestar: Good show very good show...... NOW GET BACK TO WORK!!! Jayfeather: WHATS ALL THE COMOTION!?! Poppyfrost:Your so cute when your grumpy..... Jayfeather: -ears twitch- (Thank you super hearing!) What??? TO BE CONTINUED......In the next chapter..... Firestar: Leafpool got hurt!She needs A MED CAT TO HEAL HER.....-stares at Jayfeather-
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Bramblestar27 In reply to Rosewolf732 [2013-08-05 20:03:48 +0000 UTC]
Jayfeather: *groans* Make her heal herself!
Leafpool: Help me, son! I have a cold! *sneezes*
Poppyfrost: Do it, Jay! FOR ME!
Jayfeather: Why don't you do it, if you care so much?!?
Poppyfrost: Maybe I will. I stalk you so much, I know all of the herbs!
Jayfeather: Wait...what???
Firestar: Please, continue!
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Rosewolf732 In reply to Bramblestar27 [2013-08-10 02:01:57 +0000 UTC]
Poppyfrost:Nothing........
Lionblaze:What just happened?......
Leafpool:-sneezes all over herbs-
Jayfeather:UGH
Poppyfrostont worry JayJay I have some
right here...-has stalker face-
Firestar:-jawdrop-
Lionblaze:JayJay?.......
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Bramblestar27 In reply to Rosewolf732 [2014-08-31 19:29:02 +0000 UTC]
Jayfeather: yeah...don't ever call me that
Poppyfrost: *heals Leafpool with stolen herbs*
Firestar: Jayfeather, is there something going on between you and Berrynose's mate that he should know about?
Jayfeather: NO, OF COURSE NOT
Leafpool: *cough* I love how he's more worried that Poppyfrost is cheating on her asshole mate than that she's breaking the warrior code
Poppyfrost: Well, I haven't broken it YET...
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Rosewolf732 [2013-07-04 02:55:37 +0000 UTC]
hmmm hmmm Should I make an epic couple that no one has thought of like you?
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Bramblestar27 In reply to Rosewolf732 [2013-07-04 03:24:23 +0000 UTC]
You can try! I will evaluate it >:3
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Rosewolf732 In reply to Bramblestar27 [2013-07-04 04:06:46 +0000 UTC]
You know what would make it better?If they were in diffrent clans! >:3 Wind and Shadow? Wind and River? Wind and Thunder?
Thunder and Shadow?Thunder and River?River and Shadow? I think River and Shadow....What about you?
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Bramblestar27 In reply to Rosewolf732 [2013-07-04 18:16:15 +0000 UTC]
Are you talking about the clans or the cats who started the clans? Their names were Wind, River, Shadow, and Thunder.
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flickeringdreams [2013-06-28 00:58:55 +0000 UTC]
Awww! I love Hawk's expression, he's just... ahh, adorableee! I'm terrible at the water thing, so great job on that!
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Bramblestar27 In reply to flickeringdreams [2013-06-28 02:52:33 +0000 UTC]
Thanks! Haha Hawky looks so smug I wasn't even sure how to make a cat look like they were swimming, so i just made a lucky guess and it turned out pretty good
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flickeringdreams In reply to Bramblestar27 [2013-06-28 03:39:04 +0000 UTC]
He does! It turned out great.
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Bramblestar27 In reply to flickeringdreams [2013-07-09 16:37:06 +0000 UTC]
Lol he's just like "Swim to me, my minion! " Thank you!
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KiraKats [2013-06-27 05:26:32 +0000 UTC]
Dayum! This does look awesome! Hawkfrost especially! and the background looks super epic- the fallen log-bridge looks really good!
You've improved so much since we were friends...
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Bramblestar27 In reply to KiraKats [2013-06-28 02:51:46 +0000 UTC]
Dayum, thanks! Hawkehhhh <3 Haha that actually wasn't that hard to draw...I thought it was going to be SO difficult X3
Lol well some of my earlier pictures were total crap, that's for sure! I still can't draw without a ref, though
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