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TELL ME, BROTHER / DID IT HURT /WHEN FATHER GREASED YOUR WINGS ? /
WHEN HE LET YOU FALL ?
BETRAYAL / IS A SHARPER SWORD / THAN SIN. /
GABRIEL / PLEASE LET ME COME HOME
YOUR BODY / HAS ALWAYS BLED BRONZE /
YOU WERE NEVER PURE ENOUGH / FOR GOLD
Comments: 9
brokenfragilethings In reply to incalyscent [2018-10-05 02:22:06 +0000 UTC]
aaAAAAAAA thank u SO much i had sO much fun writing this piece i kind of want to delve more into it so IM GLAD THANK YOU
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incalyscent In reply to brokenfragilethings [2018-10-05 06:40:36 +0000 UTC]
plEASE DO biblical shit of any sort makes me DIE in the best way
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brokenfragilethings In reply to incalyscent [2018-10-10 19:56:10 +0000 UTC]
hOOOooOOO THANK U FOR THE MOTIVATION THAT IS A BIG MOOD I LOVE ME SOME BIBLICAL SHIT
thank you !!! I WILL DO MY BEST
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incalyscent In reply to brokenfragilethings [2018-10-12 06:19:45 +0000 UTC]
angels are drama queens and i love themheart
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VenetianCloud [2016-09-29 10:40:27 +0000 UTC]
Great poem, but your verses are a bit distorted? Or is it just the way you want it?
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brokenfragilethings In reply to VenetianCloud [2016-09-29 22:12:04 +0000 UTC]
do you mean the spacing? that was intentional!
the middle italicized verse is a different pov,
hence the difference between the use of 'you' from the first and last,
and 'me' from the second.
if you think i should make it a little more clear,
i can work on that! perhaps adding a name to the non-italicized will add a bit more clarity that it's a snippet of conversation.
thank you so much for your comment!
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PoetsHand [2016-08-30 05:07:41 +0000 UTC]
How do you do the voodoo with words? This is great!
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brokenfragilethings In reply to PoetsHand [2016-08-30 05:34:08 +0000 UTC]
haha, thank you so much! the prompt was beautiful, i'm giving it full credit!
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