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brokenfragilethings — Even fallen angels miss the clouds, she says.
Published: 2015-10-27 22:48:39 +0000 UTC; Views: 806; Favourites: 25; Downloads: 0
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When it rains, she keeps quiet. I’ve learned to look away fromthe whole of her on those days, keep my eyes up towards the
skylight, watch the rain come for me but never reach, never
touch. I don’t want to be cleansed. But when I search for her
from beneath my lashes, she is outside on the grass, arms
outstretched.
Big storms are her favorite: thick droplets catch the hairs on
her forearms, pour down like velveteen drapes. With the light
like this, I see wings. I see remorse. Here she is, an offering.
With the light like this, I know she spits apologies to the
heavens. I know she remembers her mother’s slamming door.
The stench of burnt trees, lightening. Running, running,
running. I know she will curl up on the couch tonight to the
lull of the TV.
I know, I know. She wants to go home. When it rains, she keeps
quiet, gathers the drops like a scientist, keeps them in jars on
her nightstand. A reminder. Sin and mercy. Resentment and
forgiveness. When it rains, when it rains, when it rains. When it’s
over, I catch her tears with my palms. She’s still quiet.
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Yearning for something you lost even if you destroyed it yourself, I know that feeling. I had it with my family. It's a beatiful reminder of sad happy days.
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Sad happy days—that's a really good way of putting it.
Thank you for your comment—I hope you're doing alright and hanging in there. Loss always stings. Be well! x
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I will try to, I got my sweet guy to support me ^^
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that's wonderful ! i'm very happy to hear that.
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yeah, he's very sweet ^^
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Good job combining some of my favorite things: rain symbolism and themes of friendship and comfort after emotional experiences. Oh, and repetition for effect. "When it rains, when it rains, when it rains." Great prose!
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i find it so interesting you took this as themes of friendship! i love that.
it's always fun hearing the different interpretations of written work:
people take what they see from it. i think that's awesome.
i'm a sucker for repetition, so i'm glad it worked.
thank you!
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Ah, yes, multiple interpretations are always fun. I, personally, drew my conclusion from how much the narrator seems to know about the girl, how much personal information is kept safe within them, and how much care lies in their words as they describe their friend. How they seem to view her as this angelic, pure being.
That last verse, with the tears in the palms, is so quiet, yet so vibrant... Ah, that's it! The prose flows like rainwater. That more or less sums up what I mean.
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it was! well, the intent was more of a romantic relationship between the two, and one dealing with? not being accepted by their family.
but that's very specific and, unless you know the details, don't really know where to look to pick out the hints — so your conclusion is very valid! and very, very close, so i'm stoked that my point was achieved. 
the person kind of saw her as an angel because she was still an angel even though, according to her family, she'd fallen. she kind of wants to go back.
i suppose i could turn this into a series, or, a short story or something if i really wanted. i have a lot of ideas.
anyway! i really love your take.
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Hm... Actually, I think I rather prefer the romantic relationship viewpoint. I was getting vibes for that, but I didn't bring it up for fear of misinterpreting something. Anyway, I think the poem is even sweeter now that I know that. ^^
This could definitely make itself into a series! I'd totally support you if you wanted to make it.
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oh my gosh! thank you so much. i'm glad you liked them.
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Of course! Like, your writing is so imagery heavy I can just see it, like a movie. I can feel everything your trying to say, just getting so immersed, it's really cool :3
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oh, gosh! Thank you so, so much : )
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