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Description The only thing you
ever gave me, besides the
figurative noose
your deft fingers slid around
my neck, was a broken heart.
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Comments: 13

the-solimnludic [2013-08-08 17:13:47 +0000 UTC]

Cool! It's like another version of the haiku! Or shall I say, the haiku is another version of the tanka, because the tanka came first, ahah. XD

You're a pro with short pieces, honestly.

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brokenfragilethings In reply to the-solimnludic [2013-08-12 04:14:35 +0000 UTC]

Haha! I know. It's quite fun to write, too, because you get a bit more than the haiku!

Thank you so much wheezes

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the-solimnludic In reply to brokenfragilethings [2013-08-12 18:15:23 +0000 UTC]

Yeah, I always find myself hanging off with more to say after I try to write a haiku...haha! Thanks for sharing again, and no problem!

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LadyLincoln [2013-07-22 01:07:38 +0000 UTC]

Breathtaking, darling.

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brokenfragilethings In reply to LadyLincoln [2013-07-22 03:21:20 +0000 UTC]

You're such a babe C:

Thank you kindly. I genuinely appreciate this<3

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LadyLincoln In reply to brokenfragilethings [2013-07-22 07:03:23 +0000 UTC]

You're welcome, dearheart.

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andrewpom [2013-04-05 22:30:34 +0000 UTC]

i'm not sure if you know this, but in japan it was tradition for lovers to exchange tankas instead of written prose love letters. bearing this in mind, this poem has a dark and heartbreaking feel.

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brokenfragilethings In reply to andrewpom [2013-04-05 22:36:05 +0000 UTC]

No! I didn't know that. That makes me giddy, actually, I love little facts.
That's also really cute oh my goodness.

But, thank you! That was my intent, and I'm glad it came across alright. (:

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nosedivve [2013-04-04 04:10:33 +0000 UTC]

"figurative noose" oooh, wow that's so fucking powerful. anyways,this is amazing & I absolutely adore tanka (this one esp. It's beautiful in all the dark and gripping ways)! You really wrote this so well.

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brokenfragilethings In reply to nosedivve [2013-04-04 04:14:27 +0000 UTC]

B'aw, BABE. Thank you. (:
I tried to choose worse that would really strike, if that makes sense. I'm glad it went through!

Thank you very much. x

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nosedivve In reply to brokenfragilethings [2013-04-04 04:18:34 +0000 UTC]

You're welcome.
It really did!

You're very welcome.

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forbravery [2013-04-03 17:53:58 +0000 UTC]

This is a beautiful poem, and i love the form, i might try it sometime.

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brokenfragilethings In reply to forbravery [2013-04-03 18:01:34 +0000 UTC]

Thank you kindly, doll. x
And yes! Give it a shot. It's not as difficult as I thought it might have been, and I think it's quite fun to write a fixed form every once in a while. (:

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