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lately, i've been dreamin' 'bout shattered teethcrumbling from my mouth
like crushed honeycomb, sticky blood slow,
just like that honey. sticky blood sweet,
just like that honey.
in my dreams, i can taste the fall of rome,
powerful cities, rich red and royal,
disintegrated on my tongue.
i swallow. smile. teeth no longer teeth but bees,
teeth no longer teeth but buzzing. warm.
i choke and i wake up.
mama says that means death, decay, rot rot rot
( Боже мій, спаси мою дитину )
mama makes the sign of the cross
against my shoulder as i leave every morning
as though i ain't coming back this time.
night falls, so do my teeth.
rinse, repeat.
mama asks if i dreamt last night, watches me
over her steaming, porcelain teacup,
leaves swirling some premonition we both pretend
we don't understand.
i'm lyin' but i say no, mama. i didn't, mama.
no more teeth, no more blood, mama.
when i smile, my tongue is honey-heavy in my mouth,
bee-sting warm. thick.
we both pretend she believes me,
pretend my cards ain't always the three of swords,
the devil.
lately, i've been dreamin' 'bout crushed teeth,
a girl in a yellow dress. a temptress. a devil.
rome falls. i choke.
don't worry, mama. i always wake up.
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Comments: 16
brokenfragilethings In reply to creativelycliche [2018-09-19 15:54:09 +0000 UTC]
thank you so much ! glad to hear it.
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pansydiv [2018-04-23 13:30:11 +0000 UTC]
I really like this vibe and this poem, it's got a very solid core, if that makes sense? something about it is like cold water to the face and it's brilliant!!
My friends and I have been victim to similar dreams. It's like some kind of conspiracy theory.
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brokenfragilethings In reply to pansydiv [2018-06-13 04:05:36 +0000 UTC]
wow ! this is such lovely praise. thank you so very much !!
i'm sorry y'all know these kinds of dreams jdfhkjfhsdkjhfkj they're wild af
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Hydrogenuine [2018-03-05 04:30:54 +0000 UTC]
The repetition in this could not be more on point. And the style is so fluid, I just keep re-reading it because god the imagery it evokes is so wonderfully visceral. And I just can't get enough of the uncomfortable pang that it instills at the bottom of my stomach.
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brokenfragilethings In reply to Hydrogenuine [2018-03-06 03:18:00 +0000 UTC]
this is such a wonderful, smile inducing comment to receive.
i'm so glad the repetition was positively accepted! along with the content.
it can be a little gruesome, or visceral, so i was a bit nervous, but.
that's the feel of the poem, and i'm so glad you liked it.
thank you so much for taking the time to leave sometimes!
i'm really really overjoyed that you took to the piece.
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brokenfragilethings In reply to xfuture-boundx [2018-03-06 03:18:06 +0000 UTC]
thank you so much! x
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CyniqueMartyr [2018-03-03 12:33:21 +0000 UTC]
Beautiful imagery! It paints a beautiful, if gruesome, picture.
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brokenfragilethings In reply to CyniqueMartyr [2018-03-06 03:18:19 +0000 UTC]
that's exactly what i wanted it to do, so i really appreciate this !
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Muerte23 [2018-02-06 02:05:38 +0000 UTC]
i think it's as long as you make it, whatever you feel is appropriate, stopping or continuing on when your brain tells you to.
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brokenfragilethings In reply to Muerte23 [2018-03-06 03:18:48 +0000 UTC]
you're right! i just tend to like to do revisions from time to time, and i don't quite feel this is done yet.
thanks for this, though! i appreciate it!
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Muerte23 In reply to brokenfragilethings [2018-03-07 00:26:59 +0000 UTC]
i get that, we're always our own worst enemies.
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