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Description The sun was not yet up, though the sky had turned the colorless hue that heralds sunrise.  The tops of trees still budding could be seen as stark shadows against the sky, a testament to the light that would soon return to the world.  From somewhere in the predawn fog, the forlorn sound of a train echoed into the dark station.  Gradually, the rhythmic chugging of the engine's wheels became more audible, and the large iron beast came into view.  The train came to rest in the station, steam blowing out of its smokestack.

"Pine Harbor!" the conductor shouted drearily, half-expecting no one to get off.  Peter stepped alone off the passenger car and looked around.  Home at last, he thought wryly.  Not that there was anything in particular to look forward to.  Swinging his father's battered top hat onto his head, he walked out of the station and into the road.

At this hour, Pine Harbor lay in the midst of the forest like a ghost town.  Aside from a few overly ambitious mailmen, not a soul was to be seen on the cobblestone streets.  The windows of the various buildings in the center of town stared out like dark, empty eyes.  Not that it was much busier in the waking hours.  Pine Harbor was the northernmost town in the country.  If one were to travel any further north, they would officially find themselves in the wilderness.

At a run-down section of town, Peter paused for a moment and slowly pulled a silver watch out of his jacket pocket.  The cover was intricately carved with dozens of different images; soldiers on the battlefield, saints, stars.  But none of this held Peter's attention for long.  By now, he had grown accustomed to the remarkable craftsmanship.  What interested him was on the inside.  Flipping open the cover, a single number written in gold shone out dully in the growing dawn light.  The lid flipped close, and Peter continued on his walk home.

Before he could take two steps, a figure shambled haphazardly out of the open door of a bar and collided with Peter, knocking them both to the ground.  "Watch where you're going," the man said in a voice slurred with effects of alcohol.

"You're new in town, aren't you?" Peter asked.

"I just came in.  Why?"  The drunk man tried to get up, but collapsed back into the dust.  Judging by the look of his tattered clothes, he was telling the truth.

"I'm a Clocksmith.  I don't know if that means anything to you in your current state of mind, but to most people around here, It's considered bad luck to cross my path."

"Yeah?  I've had my share of bad luck.  I just left the military."

Peter stood and straightened his top hat.  "Why are you telling me this?"

"I'm drunk, as you said.  Besides, if you're a Clocksmith, you won't report me."

"Not for leaving the military."  Peter turned to leave the man lying in the road.

Reaching out a hand, the man called after him, "Hey, do you have a cigarette?"

"I don't smoke," Peter answered without turning.

By the time Peter reached the dirt road leading to his house, the sun had just begun to rise above the tree line.  Soon people would be awake and outside.  Peter quickened his pace, hoping to reach the relative safety of his home before he was stopped by someone.  Everything was going well at first.  There was only one other house on his road, after all, and he hoped that the house's resident would stay asleep.  He turned a corner and found himself face-to-face with a young woman about his own age, her raven hair still hanging loosely about her shoulders.

       "Tried to sneak past me again, Peter?" she asked.

       Peter silently cursed his luck.  How long had she been waiting there?  "And I almost succeeded.  If you don't mind, I want to go back home and catch up on my sleep."

       "Not until you tell me why you left."

       "Rebecca-" Peter began, but was cut off.

       "Come on, you can tell me," Rebecca said.  "I won't tell anyone else if it's a secret.  Is it a secret?"

       "I needed to find something my father made," Peter reluctantly said.  "His notes said it was important, though never explained why."

       "Sounds like a mystery.  Can I see it?"

       "No,"  Peter said, "I don't want anyone to see it until I figure out what it does."

       "If you say so," Rebecca said with a shrug.  "I'm heating water up for tea.  You want some?"

       "I'll get my own tea, thank you."

       "Because you don't like me or because you don't want to see your old house again?"

       Peter sighed.  "Both.  I'm leaving now."

       Secretly, Peter did want to see his old house.  He wanted to own his old house again, to be more precise.  When his father had gone missing five years ago, so did the sizeable fortune he had accrued, leaving Peter with next to nothing.  In order to make ends meet, he had sold the mansion to Rebecca.  Now Peter lived in a small, three-room house a quarter-mile down the road.  As Peter walked by his old house, he stared longingly at it, thinking that perhaps having tea there one more time wouldn't be too bad, even if he had to listen to Rebecca's ramblings.

       Peter swung open his front door and cringed at the awful noise it made.  It creaked terribly, and the hinges needed to be oiled.  He hung his coat and hat on a wooden post and sat down on the worn-out chair by the small woodstove he used for cooking.  There wouldn't be time for a decent breakfast, Peter thought glumly.  He quickly heated a pot of water for tea and some toast and made his way into his workshop.

       In the bronze light of Peter's work lamp, the watch's surface seemed to waver slightly, as though it was only a mirage.  After a moment, Peter picked it back up and flipped open the lid.  The clock's face was marked by simple gold lines in the place of numbers.  No other markings gave away the watch's meaning, or even hinted that it had been finished.  It didn't seem finished to Peter at all; the hands didn't move and there was no way to invoke it.  There didn't even seem to be a Virtue assigned.  Peter placed the watch back on the work table and regarded his problem in silence.

       "Hey Peter!  Are you home?"  Peter furrowed his brow and walked over to the front door, deliberately taking his time.

       "What do you want, Rebecca?" Peter asked as he cracked open the front door to peer out at his unwanted visitor.

       "I came over to see that thing you found."

       Peter sighed in resignation.  "Fine.  But don't go talking about it to anyone else."  Peter led Rebecca through his house to the workshop and gestured roughly to the watch sitting on the table.  "That's it.  Just a watch."

       "What's this one do?" Rebecca asked.

       "That's the problem.  I can't figure out how to invoke it.  And see here?"  Peter flipped open the lid and showed her the inside.  "No number indicating it's Virtue.  There's no way to open it on the back, either."

       "Couldn't you just cut it open?"

       Peter shook his head.  "If I did that, I'd damage the gears.  I have to get it to work some other way."

       "And you're sure your father made this?"

       "Positive.  His notes describe it exactly.  But like I said earlier, they don't mention what it does or how to work it.  It's almost as if a portion of his notes are missing."

       "Maybe someone took them?"  Rebecca suggested.

       Peter stared thoughtfully at the watch in his hands.  "Maybe.  But why would anyone want them is the question.  This watch was my father's greatest achievement, supposedly.  Perhaps a rival wanted the formula to create other watches like this."

Rebecca sat down and looked at the tools hanging on Peter's wall.  "You certainly have a lot of tools.  Doesn't one of them tell you how to make the clock work?"

"They're for building clocks, not reverse-engineering them.  And I don't know why you're sitting.  I didn't invite you in."

Rebecca stood and rolled her eyes.  "Are you sure you want me to leave?"

"Yes.  Now would be nice."

"Fine."  Without another word, she left and Peter sat in the chair she had been occupying.  It was times like these that made him regret ever selling his old house to that woman.
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Comments: 34

BlackwaterNoble [2017-07-19 01:34:45 +0000 UTC]

Wow, you write really well Cody. This got me really intrigued about the whole concept of Clocksmiths and watches. Peter's general attitude seemed so akin to mine, I was quite amused. I haven't been reading nearly as much as I should recently, but I might have my boyfriend get your book through amazon, so I can read it on vacation. Thank you for the comment and favorite too

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Captain-Random In reply to BlackwaterNoble [2017-07-19 14:24:37 +0000 UTC]

Goodness, thank you so much for the kind words! Going on the feedback I've gotten from readers over the years, people either love or hate Peter, so I'm glad you lean more toward the former of those two categories. If you do end up getting the full book off of Amazon, please let me know. I'd love to hear what you think of the rest of the story

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xlntwtch [2017-05-12 23:05:53 +0000 UTC]

I saw this in LadyLincoln 's features of the day, and I'm glad I did. Very enjoyable reading. Will have to explore your gallery.

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Captain-Random In reply to xlntwtch [2017-05-13 14:13:25 +0000 UTC]

Thank you~ I'm glad you enjoyed it that much.

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knightlock-27 [2012-12-13 02:34:03 +0000 UTC]

This is really good, I hope someone will pick it up and help you publish it. I'm kinda new to DA so I don't even know what a 'Daily Deviation' is, but it sounds good, so Congrats!|

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Captain-Random In reply to knightlock-27 [2012-12-13 21:19:49 +0000 UTC]

Thank you for taking the time to read The Clocksmith I'm glad you enjoyed it. Also, welcome to DA. A Daily Deviation is a submission chosen by one of the staff members (I believe) as an excellent piece of art and then displayed in a special area of the website for the day it is chosen. You can usually find a link to said page at the bottom of whatever part of the website you are on.

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knightlock-27 In reply to Captain-Random [2012-12-13 22:00:22 +0000 UTC]

oh, okay, thanks!

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Captain-Random In reply to knightlock-27 [2012-12-14 00:35:44 +0000 UTC]

You're welcome

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the-soulseeker-vio [2012-05-07 00:24:43 +0000 UTC]

First chapter=amazing!

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Captain-Random In reply to the-soulseeker-vio [2012-05-07 13:50:24 +0000 UTC]

Thank you, and thanks for the favorite as well I'm glad you enjoyed reading it.

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the-soulseeker-vio In reply to Captain-Random [2012-05-07 13:54:23 +0000 UTC]

I'm going to be keeping my eyes peeled for the book!

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Captain-Random In reply to the-soulseeker-vio [2012-05-07 21:07:09 +0000 UTC]

If all goes well with finding a publisher, it should be available soon. It's currently in the final stages of editing, and as soon as that's done, I'll be sending it back out until someone takes an interest in it.

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the-soulseeker-vio In reply to Captain-Random [2012-05-08 12:35:55 +0000 UTC]

That's amazing! GOOD LUCK!

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Captain-Random In reply to the-soulseeker-vio [2012-05-08 13:08:38 +0000 UTC]

Thank you

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LiliWrites [2012-02-01 14:51:24 +0000 UTC]

Your work has been featured here !! Congratulations on your DD!

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Captain-Random In reply to LiliWrites [2012-02-01 15:24:41 +0000 UTC]

Thank you It is an honor to have my work featured in the Daily Deviations.

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juno08 [2012-01-10 02:55:31 +0000 UTC]

How many chapters will there be? Not to seem critical okay, that's a lie, this is gonna sound critical, but isn't it a little short for a first chapter....?

I'm probably wrong, and I'm sure it'll be longer when you publish it. I'm just trying to imagine its length in an actual publication. Feel free to ignore me, and congrats on the DD.

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Captain-Random In reply to juno08 [2012-01-10 11:28:13 +0000 UTC]

Thank you for the congratulations, and the first chapter is a bit short. Maybe three thousand words or so, though I haven't actually bothered to count so it could be less. The rest of the chapters are much longer and I might combine the first two if I feel it needs to be longer, though the chapter length isn't really what's important. The full book is 80,000 words which is an average length for an adult fiction book, so I'm fine with it.
Thank you for the feedback

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ScarletDevil1503 [2012-01-10 00:19:29 +0000 UTC]

Congrats on the DD!

-Scarlet

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Captain-Random In reply to ScarletDevil1503 [2012-01-10 00:24:46 +0000 UTC]

Thank you It is a huge honor.

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HinPink [2012-01-09 22:39:37 +0000 UTC]

I am sooo going to try and buy this when it is published! This is really good! Congrats on the DD

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Captain-Random In reply to HinPink [2012-01-09 22:50:57 +0000 UTC]

Thank you I'm glad you liked it.

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HinPink In reply to Captain-Random [2012-01-09 22:57:08 +0000 UTC]

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Soto-The-Faceles-Cat [2012-01-09 16:56:31 +0000 UTC]

i was about to set it aside as just another steapunk story... maybe it was the top hat... but you've caught my interest somewhere in there... I'm not actually sure it is a steampunk story yet though, but I'll keep on reading. I rarely read more than a chapter of anything on this site, so kudos to you.
Thanks for the post, and goodluck with the publishers. I've heard they're anything but fun.
By the way, how much research do you do when you write? Or is it all stuff you already know?

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Captain-Random In reply to Soto-The-Faceles-Cat [2012-01-09 18:06:23 +0000 UTC]

Thank you for reading my work I actually wrote this before I knew steampunk even existed, so I don't count it as such. There are no airships or anything of the sort here. I usually refer to it as Victorian-era fantasy whenever someone asks.
Yes, publishers do tend to be difficult, though justifiably so. To me, a rejection means that I'm not skilled enough as a writer yet.
I do a fair amount of research, but not nearly as much as many authors. When writing The Clocksmith, I borrowed books from my local library on steam engines and clockmaking so as to get an idea of how these objects work in real life, but then took some creative liberties when writing about such things. It is, after all, a fantasy story.

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Bloody-Writing [2012-01-09 15:54:29 +0000 UTC]

I really love this. I didn't think it'd be something I'd enjoy because for some reason I'm really picky when it comes to reading. Although, this is really good and I think what made me want to read on was how well it was written, (it was superbly written in my view) and I also do want to read on.

Guess I should be more open minded hmm?

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Captain-Random In reply to Bloody-Writing [2012-01-09 16:17:26 +0000 UTC]

Thank you for the wonderful feedback. It always makes me happy to hear from people who like my writing. I, too, can be rather picky with what I read, perhaps because I hold myself to very high standards, though it does pay off to be open-minded because you never know when you'll find something of value. Also, thank you for the favorites

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TurdCheckers [2012-01-09 14:20:35 +0000 UTC]

gay

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Lit-Twitter [2012-01-09 09:03:19 +0000 UTC]

Chirp, congrats on the DD, it's been twittered. [link]

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Captain-Random In reply to Lit-Twitter [2012-01-09 12:24:01 +0000 UTC]

Thank you. It is an honor to have been chosen for the Daily Deviation

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WickedVodka [2012-01-07 14:18:55 +0000 UTC]

Congratulation on having it published! What an amazing moment it was when you found out, right? When it is, I'll go out to buy it; you have my word.

Excellent grammar! It really makes me happy

I loved the beginning; the description was absolutely fabulous! As for Peter, I find his past incredibly intriguing.... His father disappeared five years ago, Peter wears a top hat, and he used to live in a mansion with a considerable amount of money to back him up.

I can't help but feel that the watch is magical...

I really liked it and I hope that you succeed in finishing the sequel!

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Captain-Random In reply to WickedVodka [2012-01-07 20:21:49 +0000 UTC]

Thanks for the praise It always makes me happy to hear from someone who enjoys my writing, especially when they have something to say about it like you did. Unfortunately, you will have to wait a little while longer before you can read the book in its entirety, as I'm holding off on publishing with the company who accepted me right away in the hopes of finding one that can pay better. Until then, you can read the next few chapters on here.
Again, thank you for the wonderful feedback

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Andreous [2011-07-24 20:53:23 +0000 UTC]

Mm, charming indeed. And what indeed is good about this, is that it makes you want to continue reading.

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Captain-Random In reply to Andreous [2011-07-24 21:08:23 +0000 UTC]

Thanks for the compliment Hopefully soon, you'll be able to read the entire book.

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