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Now just a quick reminder that there's no chapter cover as of yet. I'm completely stumped as to what to draw and I didn't want the rest of the update to just sit there while I drooled all over my desk. So it will have to come at a later date but for now please enjoy the first chapter. Yes, Sam isn't on the road yet but that's due to two reasons that have been bothering me a bit lately:
I've seen many cases where people want to get past the prologue part of the game as quickly as possible because "It's slow and it's a waste of time". Judging solely by the games, this is true. But this mentality often spills over into the various nuzlocke stories that I've read. Without wishing to insult any other writers out there I feel like that's backwards thinking. Sure, the beginning doesn't have much meaning but in a nuzlocke story you can give it meaning. Taking your time and being thorough with what you're writing can pay dividends later along the line as the story stretches on and the true appeal of your characters and events are tested. I can guarantee now that you still won't bee seeing Sam on the road for at least another couple of updates but I feel that the extra character development afforded by this slow burn will be beneficial. But on the other hand I know that a story that takes it's time and a story that's interesting are two different things. I do have proofreaders but I can't be entirely sure that what I'm writing is interesting in any way. That's why I rely on you, my readers, to voice when you find something wrong with my work. I love the nuzlocke comunity but I find that it's a bit too accustomed to blind praise at times. I'm not the sort who will get his feelings hurt, I'm a big boy. So if you find something worth critiquing by all means share it with me.
Massive thanks to and for proofreading and art evaluation. If you haven't already, go check out their stuff. It'll be well worth your time.
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Comments: 20
That first panel gives me vertigo.
That's probably a good thing, actually.
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All dem scenery shots. I need to stare at this some more.
Okay, done!
I totally agree with you, the beginning of a comic is really important and should be used to show the personalities of the first characters already. 10 pages of a slow beginning can be so much more interesting than 1 page of 'Let's speed through all this boring shit!' Because, what happens after fast-forwarding to the first Badge - you have to do all the character development now, and everything you did so far was a wasted effort and appears flat and meaningless.
You see, I think you're doing everything right. And since you have a very good update speed, this comic won't suffer the fate of 'Well, this is an interesting beginning, but after 1 year he still hasn't caught a second Pokémon yet, so we will probably never see the carefully planned meat of the plot' either.
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Thank you very much for the lengthy feedback and kind words ;w;
When I say the prologue is going to be long I mean It's probably going to take another month, maybe even two until they actually set out. I know that I should take my time but I will be doing my best to condense things here and there as I refine the script so that it doesn't affect anything while making things a bit more brisk. It also depends on what I plan to do with everything thereafter. I haven't told many people this but I will be completely skipping accumula town due to it's sole purpose of being a tutorial town and to introduce plasma (Something I have my own plans for). I'm thinking of writing an essay-length piece in my journal explaining my motivations for a ton of things both general nuzlocke related and comic-related.
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Anytime! Well, sometimes! Whenever I'm not overwhelmed with things to comment on.
Pfff, what's one or two months in Nuzlocke world. We are the slowest webcomic artists in the world. (Except for SUPER EFFECTIVE , maybe.) Yes, cutting things that aren't really necessary is a good idea, though. Drawing is too hard work to spend time on something that bores you.
Yay for no Plasma demonstration! I enjoyed it in your first take, but original plot is always more interesting.
And I'm actually looking forward to the essay, even if I might be in the minority with that.
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Heh, bribery is the best way to get Pokemon on your side.
Also, some serious leaps forwards in your art on this page, I think.
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Sam isn't bribing him but Billy is suspecting him of it anyway :3
I wouldn't really call it a leap as much as it is a clear showing that I suck at drawing buildings and interior spaces where precision is a must.
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dat beachline and cityscape is damn amazing *w*
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Holy fuck that is the most amazing beachfront I've ever seen! xDD You rule way too much for that.
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he would still get paid for the work he did
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You haven't met Juniper, have you?
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Damn love it so far!!!
but yeah.. the second panel text was hard to read and after that it was almost impossible for me to even read the text unless i got on my desk and faceplanted into my computer screen, other than, i see nothing wrong, and love the artwork and style c:
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I was stupid enough to forget to adjust the sizing in the submission page. It should be readable now.
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UH IT'S HARD TO READ
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....I mean, can you please make it a little bigger? :3
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I fixed the sizing. It should be readable now
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Moop! It's a little small, Chaos o3o It gets a bit difficult to read :'D
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Terribly sorry about that, dragnia. I fixed the sizing. It should be readable now
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oh my dear lawd. That last panel. It came out very fantastic XD Definitely a lot more readable now, and dayung o3o I really like where it's going : D good job : DDD
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