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Published: 2003-03-03 16:03:12 +0000 UTC; Views: 120; Favourites: 0; Downloads: 1
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Tell MeThey say blood is thicker than water.
I know as well as you that statement is true.
She used to try and change you.
Now I watch her plan for the time
When you wonβt be there anymore.
Is that what I should do?
Should I sit back and let you
Dig deeper the hole you sit in?
Should I sit back
And watch this kill her?
Tell me.
What is it that you want from me?
Do you want me to let you make your own mistakes,
As you have always let me?
Or do you need me
To help you change?
Tell me.
Is smoke thicker than blood?
Comments: 6
okay its about smoking, or is it? sorry but are you talk to two people in this? i mean its good i like it but it didnt really make sense, i dont know blah okay i'm gonnna stop making comments and critiques when my head wont process anything, dammit sorry i've been trying to comment on your stuff but hardly have enough time to submit anything then when i do my mind is all blahblahblhabljjfdlkjs, sorry...
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It's about smoking. Primarily about my father. I know it's jumbly....it's so personal I haven't been able to refine it all the way. It's spoken to the father, but also referes to the mother/wife. I think that's what is so confusing about it, but I am unsure how to fix that.
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oh i thought it was spoken from the sister's view about her sister and to her sisters boyfriend or husband
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..so sad. Grief is the mosst awful feeling,, i know it well. I like this poem. a lot of emotion and its strongly converyed.
i'm sorry for you, and i hope that whatever yuou're going through gets easier.
-elly-
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nice work i like the grief conveyed in the piece it's gritty and real, very good writing
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