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ChloroformBoy — antagonistic, i have no pulse.
Published: 2010-12-03 06:27:47 +0000 UTC; Views: 4946; Favourites: 127; Downloads: 18
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Description hold on.
hold onto what?

hold onto me, hold me,
when nothing else matters
because my arms are open 24/7
25/7 actually, even that extra hour
on the longest day of the year
because that's how special you are
(to me?  i guess.  but i never know
if i guess correctly or not)

"wait, did you say something important/poetic/meaningless?"
what.
"hold on a second, i'm busy."

well, i've never held onto a second;
time always slip through my fragile
fingertips.  never held onto an hour
either.  or an our.  a your?  fuck you
pronouns.  just hold onto something
(i'm a thing; hold me) hold me like a
second.  for a second.  instead?  you
hold me like a second-place trophy;
for a second-best, runner-up (no, i'm
walking down, head down, just down)

i told you i'd wait that extra hour for you,
but holding onto this second is too much
even for me.  sorry, but it's closing time.

it's none of yours, but i'm out of business.
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Comments: 90

ChloroformBoy In reply to ??? [2017-07-14 00:00:36 +0000 UTC]

wait i do
i give thee my gratitude

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HelenaLena [2011-03-31 11:25:37 +0000 UTC]

Wow, this is great, really great.

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ChloroformBoy In reply to HelenaLena [2011-05-27 05:04:09 +0000 UTC]

thanks

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ClearSound [2011-02-12 01:29:18 +0000 UTC]

Featured in my journal: [link]

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oxcrushhed [2011-02-10 17:14:52 +0000 UTC]

wow, i love that last line. it's been awhile since i've read poetry, but i'm so glad i read this. it is incredible.

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ChloroformBoy In reply to oxcrushhed [2012-05-27 04:34:56 +0000 UTC]

<3

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QuenWrites [2010-12-20 12:48:48 +0000 UTC]

Just letting you know that I have featured this piece in my latest journal

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ChloroformBoy In reply to QuenWrites [2010-12-21 12:10:21 +0000 UTC]

thanks <3

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QuenWrites In reply to ChloroformBoy [2010-12-21 12:38:02 +0000 UTC]

No problem

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chickadee90 [2010-12-16 23:58:57 +0000 UTC]

just wonderful, beautiful, amazing. pick an adjective.

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ChloroformBoy In reply to chickadee90 [2010-12-21 12:18:09 +0000 UTC]

antagonistic is an adjective XD

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xPaiNtEdxWiNgSx [2010-12-15 05:12:09 +0000 UTC]

its simple, yet clearly complex? either way..i like it. a whole lot.

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ChloroformBoy In reply to xPaiNtEdxWiNgSx [2010-12-21 12:36:21 +0000 UTC]

well.... it's not simple really lol but thanks

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xPaiNtEdxWiNgSx In reply to ChloroformBoy [2010-12-24 19:43:24 +0000 UTC]

no, its not simple at all. sorry- i probably meant something more like its straightforward? who knows but. its really good either way

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in-response-to-death [2010-12-11 14:32:54 +0000 UTC]

"i told you i'd wait that extra hour for you,
but holding onto this second is too much
even for me. sorry, but it's closing time."

way to relevant right now

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ChloroformBoy In reply to in-response-to-death [2010-12-12 08:39:50 +0000 UTC]

too* XD

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in-response-to-death In reply to ChloroformBoy [2010-12-13 04:41:24 +0000 UTC]

devin, this is why no one likes you.
jokes, but i was half dead then.
still am, sick ;A;

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ChloroformBoy In reply to in-response-to-death [2010-12-13 05:29:49 +0000 UTC]

idsaf

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in-response-to-death In reply to ChloroformBoy [2010-12-14 00:59:08 +0000 UTC]

whut? D:

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ChloroformBoy In reply to in-response-to-death [2010-12-21 12:36:06 +0000 UTC]

whatwhat

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in-response-to-death In reply to ChloroformBoy [2010-12-22 04:33:27 +0000 UTC]

what's idsaf mean?

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ChloroformBoy In reply to in-response-to-death [2010-12-22 04:57:23 +0000 UTC]

idk

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in-response-to-death In reply to ChloroformBoy [2010-12-22 05:07:59 +0000 UTC]

well then i feel cheated devin >:

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ChloroformBoy In reply to in-response-to-death [2010-12-22 05:14:32 +0000 UTC]

huh

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mackeydolly21 [2010-12-05 21:11:03 +0000 UTC]

i love how you can put your feelings into words people dont even notice have real feeling in them

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ChloroformBoy In reply to mackeydolly21 [2010-12-21 12:35:56 +0000 UTC]

thanks

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mackeydolly21 In reply to ChloroformBoy [2010-12-22 07:02:25 +0000 UTC]

what i dont understand is how you get the feeling and emotion to flow threw and seep into the mind of the reader to make it so real. how do you do it? or at least can you tell me how to get better? it would really help alot

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ChloroformBoy In reply to mackeydolly21 [2010-12-22 07:16:52 +0000 UTC]

the first step is to experience emotional wreckage.
then you just write down exactly how it happened...

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mackeydolly21 In reply to ChloroformBoy [2010-12-22 07:29:26 +0000 UTC]

ha. funny. you'd think i have enough of that with my family-but it doesnt even hurt anymore. just the people i thought i trusted hurt me

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tictactoeyoulose [2010-12-04 08:55:32 +0000 UTC]

....

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ChloroformBoy In reply to tictactoeyoulose [2010-12-05 00:23:24 +0000 UTC]

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rockstar2511 [2010-12-04 05:00:47 +0000 UTC]

Simply amazing, as always.

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ChloroformBoy In reply to rockstar2511 [2010-12-21 12:35:36 +0000 UTC]

thanks, as always

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ibrokeafuton [2010-12-04 04:55:26 +0000 UTC]

well played.

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ChloroformBoy In reply to ibrokeafuton [2010-12-21 12:35:45 +0000 UTC]

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ChaoticToSayTheLeast [2010-12-04 04:43:59 +0000 UTC]

Waaaaaaaay too long.

(pimpin' ^O^)

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ChloroformBoy In reply to ChaoticToSayTheLeast [2010-12-21 12:35:08 +0000 UTC]

THATS WHAT SHEEEEEEEE SAIDDDD ;D haha

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ChaoticToSayTheLeast In reply to ChloroformBoy [2010-12-22 10:36:08 +0000 UTC]

Then she choked, but enough of things offensive.

Oh, shit, it smells like irony in here!!

^O^

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ChloroformBoy In reply to ChaoticToSayTheLeast [2010-12-22 10:41:23 +0000 UTC]

[link]
in case you wanted to download my older shit

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ChaoticToSayTheLeast In reply to ChloroformBoy [2010-12-22 10:49:37 +0000 UTC]

Coolio, thanks.

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RawrSammy In reply to ChaoticToSayTheLeast [2010-12-05 05:29:43 +0000 UTC]

I think it's perfect and amazing :3

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ChloroformBoy In reply to RawrSammy [2010-12-21 12:34:51 +0000 UTC]

thanks

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ChaoticToSayTheLeast In reply to RawrSammy [2010-12-05 06:43:55 +0000 UTC]

Not the peice, the amount of time simce his last.

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RawrSammy In reply to ChaoticToSayTheLeast [2010-12-05 21:48:18 +0000 UTC]

Ohh alright, sorry haha :]

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ChaoticToSayTheLeast In reply to RawrSammy [2010-12-06 07:30:23 +0000 UTC]

Ha, iss fine.

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siilentlullabie [2010-12-04 04:23:53 +0000 UTC]

The great thing about your poetry is how it all seems to be like a thought. Something catches your eye and then your brain names off a bunch of other subjects and questions and ideas and theories and just rambles on and on and on, and then something else peaks your minds interest and then the same process happens again and again. that (to me) is what it is like to read your poetry, it seems to just go on about seemingly mundane things but then those same mundane things become a bigger picture and in the end all have to do with the same subject.

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ChloroformBoy In reply to siilentlullabie [2010-12-21 12:32:41 +0000 UTC]

lol pretty much XD

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emtay96 [2010-12-04 03:51:21 +0000 UTC]

I really love the bottom half and the way you worded it ^^

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ChloroformBoy In reply to emtay96 [2010-12-21 12:32:25 +0000 UTC]

thanks xD i like bottom halves too lol

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emtay96 In reply to ChloroformBoy [2010-12-22 12:42:10 +0000 UTC]

XD i meant your poem not in general lol. and your welcome

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