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Published: 2010-06-15 17:08:19 +0000 UTC; Views: 19907; Favourites: 87; Downloads: 454
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Recently, I've completed a seven page submission of "Miss Doomsday" that I'm sending to various publishers. Here's the third page of that submission, a sample, if you will.I'm nervous as all get out because I haven't submitted anything in years.
Gulp. Wish me luck.
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Thanks! I did have some apprehension about redoing this page, because I liked the mood and imagery. I appreciate the comment.
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LOL, is she dressing up to bait pedophiles on To Catch a Predator?
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It would appear that SOMEBODY has had a sneak peak at my script!!!
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Nah, I just think the worst, lol! Cant wait to see more. I like how youve started this out, once you have an opening page like that you just HAVE to know the rest of the story.
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This is excellent work. The lines are tight, yet leave plenty of room for shading with colors. You've also obviously got a very good grasp on perspective (demonstrated by how often and cleanly you shift it) and panel layout. And, of course, tantalizing storytelling: why is her "public persona" so incredibly different from her private self, and how many *other* "public personae" (sp?) does she have? I see at least two other wigs on those wall-mounted faces...
Best of luck navigating the treacherous waters of comic-book publishing!
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I'd just like to say "thank you" for the thoughtful analysis of the comic page. I hope I can navigate those treacherous waters of publishing. I guess I'll be finding out very soon.
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Thank you so much! I love working on this comic.
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I really like your style. It can be call traditional, but still, you give it something more, something, that makes me feel scared and... I really want to read more of this.
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Thanks! I was going for a creepy feel to this page. I've always envisioned my comic as a sort of Vertigo-like comic, except with more humor.
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this looks very interesting. nicely drawn. i can't wait to see the whole set. <3 cybereena
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Thanks! I do have quite a few more pages than this one waiting in the wings.
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You be fine. It looks like something I would read. I like this kind of Art work
I dont think the cats to happy though...
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Thank you so much!
Yeah, the cat (whose name is "Johnathon"), isn't too pleased having a girl's panties on his head.
PS I deeply appreciate all the faves!
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No problem... any chance that we will see Johnathon in a picture by himself?
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I'm not sure. I've got so many things on my plate right now but maybe I will draw the little furball by itself at some point.
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Dont call Jon a furball:3 LOL
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True. You wouldn't believe the constraint I had to put on myself. Man, it was torturous!
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The layout on this page is really nice Zac. I like the way the panels are presented and the drawing is top notch.
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Thank you so much, Fladam! Drawing these pages were a mixture of pleasure and torture. I stressed over every panel. Hopefully, it'll pay off.
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Good Luck dude! I'm sure you'll get it picked up
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Thanks, Dan! I truly appreciate it.
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*Slathers luck all over you*
Even though you don't need it! Your work will speak for itself
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Thanks! With my luckscreen on, I hope I can get the attention of one of those editors out there in comicland.
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You know the more I look at this the more I appreciate the fact that she isn't super pretty. She's hot but distinctive. I like it.
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I'm glad to hear that (and thanks). I was really going for that real world look, like somebody who was pretty but not perfect looking. I also wanted to draw her with distinctive features, as I (and many artists) have a tendency to draw everybody looking the same.
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I love were this one is going, She's hunting tonight! Nice
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This page really evokes V for Vendetta for me.
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Really? Thank you so much. I'm honored by the comparison (and thanks for the fave, too).
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Zac, I truly hope you do great with your submissions. Now since you want to jump to show your work to publishers, I'd like to tell some real criticism, don't take it wrong please and most importantly: don't feel down!
The story telling works very well, your reader will understand exactly what's happening, I liked the way you change angles, it doesn't botter at all. So in graphic narrative you're excellent. The cat's design and expressions are great.
However some details look like they were done in a rush, for example:
-I know you can ink better than here, specially in the shadings.
-I'd suggest to pay more attention in furniture and space, like the structure of that chair she's sitting or the way the water falls in the second panel.
-The way you drawed the panels is interesting, since I haven't seen the rest of the pages I can't tell much about it, however one supposes that when the artist do these kind of shapes it's for a reason and not just aesthetics.
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Thanks, Jade, for the critique. You're correct that there's little I can do to change it right now, as I'm currently in the process of submitting the pages to publishers (there are seven of them, altogether).
I purposely laid off doing too much shading on this page. That's because there are so many panels on the page that each one had to be relatively small. If I put on too much shading, the page would get muddled, busy, or potentially too confusing (at least in my opinion). I wanted the images to be simple so the reader could get what's going on within a heartbeat.
Your other points I'll consider in the future.
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No problem, I can try to help if I can, even if I'm not a pro yet and, I don't know the editorial line of the publishers you're searching to so I may be doing a mistake in my advices (that's important too).
In any case, wish you best luck and even get reviews from the editors!!
You have to tell us how it went.
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Thanks, Jade, for the support. I really appreciate.
By the way, I've really been enjoying your art in "The Oswald Chronicles". Great stuff.
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Always man, when I saw your first entry in here with Opey, I knew you had and still have talent.
Thank you very much for taking a look at it.
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Hmmm, now that is quite interesting, and impressive on her part... wonder just what she aims to achieve with that disguise...
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Thanks! I like to add a lot of mystery to my pages.
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Which is good... so long as the mystery is eventually resolved...
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Good luck!
Very nice sequence too. A nice quiet slightly haunting scene. Those can stick with you.
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