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Published: 2009-04-08 06:03:18 +0000 UTC; Views: 454; Favourites: 1; Downloads: 24
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Description in the silence of a
moonless cave,
breathing through
transparent skin,
the blind salamander
sits unseen,
submerged

in a diverging
subterranean stream,
running towards the night sky
or maybe just more night;

even the stars are fleeing
and the universe resides
in space-time wrinkles,
balanced on the edge of
a mathematical sword
or hanging by a
non-existent thread,
held together only by
absent light of a
sleeping television
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Comments: 24

pseudometry [2009-04-14 02:01:05 +0000 UTC]

Beautiful sibilance in the first strophe, slides and hisses of the tongue very nicely. I liked the concept much too.

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ColonelFitz In reply to pseudometry [2009-04-16 00:28:09 +0000 UTC]

Thank you very much. Also, I'd like to tell you that you've gotten me saying "strophe" instead of "stanza," too.

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pseudometry In reply to ColonelFitz [2009-04-17 21:36:31 +0000 UTC]

Hooray for Strophes! I find it more versatile, more useful when you want to indicate a section of a poem: you can call a single unattached line a strophe, but you can't really call it a stanza.

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ColonelFitz In reply to pseudometry [2009-04-20 07:05:06 +0000 UTC]

That's definitely true.

Although most people actually know what stanzas are...

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pseudometry In reply to ColonelFitz [2009-04-23 05:43:32 +0000 UTC]


Yeah, that's a good point... eh, but I figure people can look it up. I mean, teh internets are right there, for your convenience.

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xellikat [2009-04-13 02:05:51 +0000 UTC]

Niiiiiiiice... this! Especially the ref to string theory, because that's what really got me hooked into this kind of physics. Just made me want to giggle again.

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ColonelFitz In reply to xellikat [2009-04-16 00:26:20 +0000 UTC]

Same here! It was 7th grade. Instead of doing a project on an element, I asked if I could present on string theory instead. And there went half a year of my life.

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xellikat In reply to ColonelFitz [2009-04-16 02:38:53 +0000 UTC]

Ah... that must've surprised your teacher. I was watching that Nova program on string theory and then I got hooked on astrophysics in general.

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ColonelFitz In reply to xellikat [2009-04-20 07:06:49 +0000 UTC]

Ah yes...the Elegant Universe?

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xellikat In reply to ColonelFitz [2009-04-21 00:41:51 +0000 UTC]

Yup, that. You can't really blame public television if they skew your view towards science, can you?

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b1gfan [2009-04-10 20:01:19 +0000 UTC]

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ColonelFitz In reply to b1gfan [2009-04-16 00:26:33 +0000 UTC]

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Blueskye27 [2009-04-09 13:10:01 +0000 UTC]

Theme 4?

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ColonelFitz In reply to Blueskye27 [2009-04-16 00:22:08 +0000 UTC]

100 themes challenge.

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Blueskye27 In reply to ColonelFitz [2009-04-16 11:50:21 +0000 UTC]

Ah...been a long time since I worked on those. Are you enjoying it?

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ColonelFitz In reply to Blueskye27 [2009-04-20 07:06:23 +0000 UTC]

Ish. Procrastination...

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laura-beth467 [2009-04-08 18:42:37 +0000 UTC]

goodness Fitzy. i just realized that I never comment you. but now I know why. I never have anything interesting to say. lol. Lots to imagine in this one.

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ColonelFitz In reply to laura-beth467 [2009-04-14 07:39:28 +0000 UTC]

It's okay. Uninteresting words at least are made of pixels?
That was just the worst explanation ever. Ever.
Glad to know you're reading, though.

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laura-beth467 In reply to ColonelFitz [2009-04-14 19:02:20 +0000 UTC]

yep. i read when im in Shakespeare. Like I am right now.

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ZexyPineCones [2009-04-08 16:40:08 +0000 UTC]

Metaphysical and intelligent with being distant or cold...very nice.

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ColonelFitz In reply to ZexyPineCones [2009-04-14 07:38:42 +0000 UTC]

Thanks! I'm glad it didn't feel just like I was chucking theories at your head.

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ZexyPineCones In reply to ColonelFitz [2009-04-14 19:11:53 +0000 UTC]

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GetYourGrip [2009-04-08 16:28:12 +0000 UTC]

love this

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ColonelFitz In reply to GetYourGrip [2009-04-14 07:38:04 +0000 UTC]

Thanks!

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