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BloodBanePhage [2009-10-20 18:35:18 +0000 UTC]

Alrighty, here we go.

Lighting
I like it for the most part. Although the right wing is partially obsured by what looks by leaves that overshadow it. In my opinion, if they are flying up, then a swarm of leaves should not be obscuring that much of his wing. Those leaves would not cast shadows with all the indirect lighting either.

Composition
A winged figure holding a woman and flying straight up? I think that is an interesting subject matter. With his slight blush and her wonder, it adds a strong emotional element to the image as well.
In my opinion, you did very well in this department. (though I could have handled a few less leaves to distract from the two characters)

Did I manage to create any depth?
Most definitely. There are the leaves right up close to the camera in yellows and oranges; one in focus, but the others mainly too close to see well. (very good)
Then there are the characters in the midground. They are the focus and center of the image. (brown leaves obscuring his wings are distracting, and throw off the sense of realistic depth)
Finally, there is what looks like a grassy field beneath them, or perhaps an open park. By the lack of detail on the grass (only blended patches of color) it appears they have ascended to a modest height at the moment of this image.


Is the picture too busy?
They are in motion as are their surroundings... so, it is fine that it is busy and blurred around the border of the image. The only things that need to be in focus are the characters faces and the space between their faces. This gives the illusion that the camera is on them and they are the focus of the image, while the blur and distortion around the characters gives the illusion of movement. (the wings could be a little more directionally blurred to give more sense of a flapping motion)
Yeah, the leaves may not do much to enhance the characters, but it fills empty space with something that interests the eye. (that is great)
Just uncover the wing shadowed in brown leaves... The yellow leaves that float in front of the lens are fine though, as they are eye-catching and add to the depth.

Does it work as a whole?
Yes, I think it looks nice as a whole. Just uncover the wing shadowed in brown leaves, that is not so nice.

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KawaiiHimeArtist [2009-10-20 02:37:53 +0000 UTC]

I love how their expressions are like they are letting go of the worry. I think the angle is great and the back ground looks amazing. =]

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Rijio [2009-10-19 21:11:23 +0000 UTC]

Okey~ Time for some feedback!
First up it's really good, it deserves a warm and friendly fav+
I especially like the way you made the colors it's both vivid and moving!

You made an awesome job on the composition as well as on the character, I love the softness of the emotion <3

You worked the leaves very well and again it gives the impression of movement which myself I wish I could do.

My advice on this one would be to try to work a bit more on the wings as they look a bit stiff compared to the rest but still is overall a very good submission!

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Lukis24 [2009-10-19 20:51:18 +0000 UTC]

You did a good job on blurring out the background to make it look like they are flying. I think the angel that is flying's eyes, they look a little droopy and big.

Lighting: the lighting is good. It seems to only be visible really in the middle of the picture though.

Depth: The depth is very, very good. The only thing I can point out is that the girl's hair should be falling down, it looks like it's falling to the side.

Hope this helps, great peice

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epic-bando88 [2009-10-19 20:50:06 +0000 UTC]

I think you pulled off the angle well!!! just work on the expressions abit because the guy looks a tad... high. Great job with the coloring and nearly everything else!

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EquinaSephine [2009-10-19 20:17:09 +0000 UTC]

I quite like how you did this composition, especially how you placed the figures in the middle ground, and the illusion of speed.

I also wish to say this picture definitely is not to busy, and has a lot of depth.

Good work

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edgeraven [2009-10-19 20:11:24 +0000 UTC]

From #GimmeFeedback .

This is quite well done, overall -- at least, I think so. It is much better than I would have managed.

However, I think actually that the diagaonal hilighting is a bit of the busiest part of it. Why is it there? Is it supposed to show movement?

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SHO111 [2009-10-19 20:05:42 +0000 UTC]

Well, I absolutely love the angle! It's amazing! You did a great job! And as for feed back:
I feel like there is too much going around but then again when something takes flight the rustle of the wings will make things messy. So I do and then I don't feel like there's too much going on. The male's face however seems a little...eh...weird. The female's face is gorgeous and I love her expression. Great job overall.

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zooha [2009-10-19 19:04:08 +0000 UTC]

really cool i like it a lot but it kind of hurts the eye because everything is blurred so maybe only blur the things that are above them and as it gets closer to them unblur it and add more details to the ground so itll look like their flying up and not just a collage of stuff. hopefully that will help because this is a really pretty drawing

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OoOEmotionOoO [2009-10-19 17:03:30 +0000 UTC]

The colour-use and lighting looks fine to me.
The only thing that is bothering me a bit is that the guy looks pretty stoned. xD

Other then that I find it awesome that you dared to make such a huge piece.

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Kanille-Hime [2009-10-19 16:53:25 +0000 UTC]

Composition, depth and ligthing are pretty good I think. But it's a bit too busy for me. All the leaves blur the charas a little too much.

By the way, you did a great job with the girl hair !

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Wheatart [2009-10-19 16:14:01 +0000 UTC]

Firstly, I have to say I love crazy angles! The dangerous one with this is deciding whether they are lying down or spinning. I like the leaves blowing across, and I think the one thing that might improve this pic is if some of the streaks of wind were whirling around the characters. I don't think wind blows straight very often. But that's jus tmy opinion.

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gppr [2009-10-19 16:01:32 +0000 UTC]

I think you've covered the couple a little too much with falling objects. They are the focal point and some elements in front of them are making it hard to see their detail. The loose feathers are awesome I love how they become bigger and unfocused as they come closer to us (yes you've created the impression of movement for me). and so are a few of the leaves, but the thick patches of leaves are covering too much. I'd love to see their faces clearly and the wing on the left. We also need to see some blurred details on the ground far away to notice the depth. Very daring and nicely executed angle. I like the lighting, but I'd like to see it with less elements to give a better opinion. All in all, I think it does work as a whole.

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Lumysaara [2009-10-19 15:58:52 +0000 UTC]

i like the way the painting turned out, especially when it comes to those strikes that create the feeling of whirlwind and motion blur. also, there is a lot of depth in the image, due to the colors used and the well placed detail of the leaves in the foreground, opposed to the sharpness of the background.
in terms of composition, i think that it would look more balanced if the orange strip of cloth would be placed in the left side. to counterbalance the one in the right.

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Langepon [2009-10-19 14:59:23 +0000 UTC]

Your couple seems to be flying or dancing, maybe both. Beautiful idea.

I must say, the the blurr is a little to strong here. The couple isn´t blurred at all, but looks like it´s in a rapid movement. I´m still thinkig whether this is okay and for some reason it seems to me, that photo artists must know this kind of topic well.

But the part, that bothers me the most is the leave texture in the background. They are not blurred and they don´t seem to be flying. But the couple is partly hidden by this texture. I suggest you use another texture with not so many leaves of you do as you have done with the single blurred leaves and make it on the whole picture like that.

If you have questions, don´t hesistate to ask. ^^

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dawnmist [2009-10-19 14:23:41 +0000 UTC]

Your experimentation paid off. This is lovely! I adore the colors and the people, and the faces look perfect. Stunning work here.

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