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Description Pokémon Mystery Dungeon: Wrath of Omega
Part 1: "A New Beginning."
Narrator: "In the year following the brave Grovyle's ultimate sacrifice to save the time gears, peace eventually came to the land, and a new generation of explorers came forth to continue that legacy..."
(School bell rings)
Treecko: (To himself, while running in the hall) "Man! I'm going to be late to class again. What's the teacher going to say to me this time? (Pauses at the door) I really don't want to know the answer to that question."
(Steps Inside)
Clefable (Teacher): "Number 21, Treecko, you finally decided to join us today. Late as usual I see.
Treecko: "I'm sorry, Ms. Clefable. I just got caught in-"
Clefable: (Interrupts him) "I don't have time for your excuses today. Just go to your seat. I'll have a talk with her mother this afternoon after school."
Treecko: "Yes, ma'am…"
Narrator: "That's me. I'll admit it. I was a clumsy Pokémon most of the time back then. Those were some good times. (Scene jumps to parental conference) My teacher didn't quite understand me like my mother did. She saw the adventurer in me, especially because she was there when I met that brave Grovyle days before he was taken from us."
(Flashback)
Treecko: "Grovyle! Grovyle!"
Grovyle: "Well, look what I've got here. You're quite the young and inspired Treecko. You remind me of myself when I was your age. Always ready for anything. You look and act like a true explorer. I know you have the makings of becoming a great adventurer, young Treecko. Just remember this. Adventure comes from the heart. A heart that is pure is inside every true adventurer. And, no one can ever tell you otherwise. You have that heart, Treecko, and I know you'll use it for great things when the time comes. (Starts to walk away) Until we meet again…"
Narrator: "Of course, I would never see him again, but his words inspired me. I knew what my dream was then. I wanted to become a great explorer, just like him, and continue to bring peace to the land. It was my destiny…"
(Flashback ends) (Intro. music would play here)
(Inside Treecko's home)
Treecko: "Man! I'm so excited. Tomorrow is Tag-Team Day. The day we are assigned partners for various training exercises. I can't wait!"
Trevor (His younger Treecko brother): "Sounds like fun. Wish I could join you, big brother."
Treecko: "Don't worry, Trevor. Next year, you'll have as much fun as I'll have."
Mother Sceptile: (Chuckling) "If you're not late to class again, young man."
Treecko: (sighs) "Awe… mom. Could we not talk about that anymore please?"
Mother Sceptile: "Until you stop doing that, we can. I know you want to be a great adventurer. But, to do that, you need to be on time all the time. Do you understand me?"
Treecko: "Yes, mom."
(The Next Day…)
Narrator: "Tag-Team Day had finally arrived. The day was almost a complete blur to me. (Various training exercise footage are seen…) I had all sorts of Poké partners, from a Squirtle to a Chikorita, and so on. However, the assigned partner I had for the last exercise, the Double Training Battle exercise, far excelled better than the others…"
Medicham (Instructor): "For this exercise, Number 21, Treecko, will be paired up with… Number 57, Riolu."
Narrator: "I never really know that Riolu before that point. However, after our easy victory over the pair of a Snivy and Houndour, we both become friends because we shared a common adventure spirit inside of us. We would go on to hang out as often as we could. We would discuss all of hopes and dreams we wanted to accomplish after we were officially inducted in the new and expanding Team Freestar. That fateful day, finally, came.
(Graduation Day)
Narrator: "For the ceremony, the leader of Team Freestar, a well experienced Raichu, gave an inspiring speech to all the graduates. He told use that, even though we would be smaller than some of our enemies, we could still defeat them as long as we never lost hope. Then, each graduate had to select one other graduate to be their permanent partner for a sub-team. My decision was quite obvious…"
Raichu (On the stage with Treecko): "Number 21, Treecko. Who will be your partner?
Treecko: (Without hesitation) "Number 57! Riolu!"
(Riolu walks up onto the stage.)
Riolu: "I know you'll pick me. You made the right decision. I think we both know that. I will be honored to be your partner, Treecko."
(Both Pokémon grasp hands as a friendly gesture.)
Raichu: "Treecko and Riolu. You are now proud members of Team Freestar. (Medals are placed around their necks) Will you two carry on our team's tradition of maintaining peace to our land now and for always, and protect any other Pokémon that is in innocent?"
Treecko and Riolu Both: "Yes sir!"
Narrator: "We were now officially adventures. However, we needed a team name. After much deliberation between the two of use, we decided to name ourselves, Team Xtreme. It fit because of our lust for adventure and exploration. I would wear a blue bandana, and Riolu chose a red one to show our friendship. A few days past, and on a nice and sunny day…"
Treecko: "Hey… Riolu!"
Riolu: "What is it, Treecko?"
Treecko: "You want to have a little practice battle with me? I've really never seen your true strength yet."
Riolu: "Since it's just for fun, why not!"
Narrator: "I had a good little tussle with Riolu. We wrestled a bit, and I even got some blows in. However, in the end, I would lose the battle. I mean he threw me for a loop onto the grass pretty hard, but not too hard of course."
Treecko: "Wow! You're really good!"
Riolu: "Thanks! You're not too bad yourself. With a little more training, you and I could be unstoppable!"
Treecko: "Yeah!"
"Hahahahahaha… You call that a practice battle?!"
Narrator: "We turned, and there was a Shinx laughing at us."
Shinx: "Come on. I've better battles than this one where I trained at. This is nothing compared to that."
Riolu: "Shinx, it's been a while."
Shinx: "Yes, it has Riolu. Interesting… You chose a Treecko as your partner. I have to question that myself, but, hey, if you want a little lizard as a partner, then so be it."
Treecko: "Who are you calling "little?! You're just as little as me, Shinx!"
Riolu: "Shinx, you have no right to say things like that to my partner. Why are you here anyways?"
Shinx: "I'm here because I heard noises that sounded like some Pokémon battling, and I came to see what was happening. Your little battle here pales in comparison to the ones Team Omega offered me."
Riolu: "What is Team Omega?! Is that a sub-team of Freestar?"
Shinx: "No! Let's just say it's a team that helps out Pokémon who are seeking revenge. Their training is top-notch, and it really brings out the best in you. So, unless you want to join the team, I suggest old friend and his partner, that you stay from me and Team Omega as far as you can. Have fun doing those lame practice battles. It'll get you nowhere." (Walks away, laughing)
Treecko: "Riolu… Do you know him and what this whole revenge thing is about?"
Riolu: Unfortunately, yes. He and I were good friends before I started school. One day, someone attacked his home, and his family was taken away from him."
Treecko: "You mean…?"
Riolu: "Yes, Treecko… They're gone, forever. (Both sigh) I'm guessing this whole revenge thing is about him going after whoever did that to him. I just hope that whoever is
leading Team Omega doesn't make him power-crazy. If that does happen, which I'm sure it will, I got a bad feeling that we could be fighting each other one day on opposite sides."
Treecko: "Do you think Raichu would know anything about this Team Omega?'
Riolu: (Sadly, with some tears coming out) "He probably does know a lot about them. We must go see him. I'm worried about Shinx." (Sobs)
Treecko: "I am too, Riolu. I am too…"
Narrator: "So, we set off back to HQ to see Raichu, to learn the secrets behind the mysterious Team Omega…"
(To be continued…)
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Comments: 27

Yamashita-akaDoragon [2011-10-23 16:06:21 +0000 UTC]

Great beginning! *going to read the rest of story*

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IamNobody679 [2011-07-15 17:49:14 +0000 UTC]

Great story! [link]
I am doing PMD story too, I like yours, and you have a better start than mine.

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CoolNala In reply to IamNobody679 [2011-07-15 17:54:54 +0000 UTC]

Thanks. Hope you like my other parts that I've written so far too.

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IamNobody679 In reply to CoolNala [2011-07-15 17:58:09 +0000 UTC]

np

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blindleap [2011-02-15 05:07:08 +0000 UTC]

Interesting! Your dialogue is good, have you considered prose-style writing rather than script-style? (definitely the wrong word but it's gonna have to do.) I like the story.

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CoolNala In reply to blindleap [2011-02-15 15:06:27 +0000 UTC]

What is prose-style? Never even heard of that.

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blindleap In reply to CoolNala [2011-02-16 05:57:47 +0000 UTC]

Oh, bad word choice, sorry
I meant, more like
"...And Treecko ran up onto the stage, skipping steps in his haste. He stood at the front, grinning from ear to ear as he accepted his rescue team medal. 'Thanks, everybody,'he said as they clapped, 'I really appreciate it!'"

Like... A story, I guess. This looks really neat and it would be cool to read it like that. My opinion, of course, and you're welcome to ignore it.

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CoolNala In reply to blindleap [2011-02-16 14:02:58 +0000 UTC]

I'll probably stick with my idea. But, I do understand. I'm not terribly great at word play, so I think script-style is the best choice for me.

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Piplup-Luv [2011-02-15 00:19:06 +0000 UTC]

Very interesting.

One thing I'd sugjest with something like this would be to put spaces between each person taklking

Person 1: .....

Person 2: .....

That way it doesn't look like a wall of text that is hard and confusing to read.

Most people use *....* to show actions so it could be a good idea to do that too. Seeing as you use paretheces for extra information.

Other than that, this is a very interesting story.

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CoolNala In reply to Piplup-Luv [2011-02-15 02:02:48 +0000 UTC]

I did that in the document (PDF). I just tried to make it not so long on here.

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Piplup-Luv In reply to CoolNala [2011-02-15 02:32:25 +0000 UTC]

Ah, I see. Still. Very interesting story

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r3stl3ss-orange [2011-02-15 00:11:38 +0000 UTC]

I'm loving this already.

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cat-mcr-ever [2011-02-14 22:20:55 +0000 UTC]

hello,
thank you for submitting this to , however we do not accept fan fiction

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CoolNala In reply to cat-mcr-ever [2011-02-14 22:35:00 +0000 UTC]

Ok.

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Salphethefirst [2011-02-14 22:09:43 +0000 UTC]

Loved it! I hope to read more of your work!

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CoolNala In reply to Salphethefirst [2011-02-14 22:21:43 +0000 UTC]

Thanks.

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Moondrao32 [2011-02-14 18:48:22 +0000 UTC]

Oh, I wish one of my chars was in it, it be so good XD

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CoolNala In reply to Moondrao32 [2011-02-14 18:56:33 +0000 UTC]

Who is that?

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Moondrao32 In reply to CoolNala [2011-02-14 18:59:22 +0000 UTC]

Sarah the yellow lucario.

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CoolNala In reply to Moondrao32 [2011-02-14 19:03:26 +0000 UTC]

Oh. Maybe I'll use her for something else.

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Moondrao32 In reply to CoolNala [2011-02-14 19:05:42 +0000 UTC]

KK. Just to aler you, she's slightly head strong, tough, and has a metal claw, after a fight with a luxray.

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CoolNala In reply to Moondrao32 [2011-02-14 19:09:04 +0000 UTC]

Ok.

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emoprincesspeach [2011-02-14 18:46:19 +0000 UTC]

wow its good! can't wait to read the next part!

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CoolNala In reply to emoprincesspeach [2011-02-14 18:47:12 +0000 UTC]

Thanks. Faving it? Please?!

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emoprincesspeach In reply to CoolNala [2011-02-14 18:48:40 +0000 UTC]

of corse!

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CoolNala In reply to emoprincesspeach [2011-02-14 18:56:14 +0000 UTC]

Thanks again!

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emoprincesspeach In reply to CoolNala [2011-02-14 18:58:14 +0000 UTC]

your welcome!

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